my first dare

vanillla · 05-19-2009, 07:48 PM

i've done dares before as a little kid, but they were dumb like, "draw a moustache on your face and then wash it off" haha

so this was my first real dare. my friend gave it to me and it was kind of disgusting.. but i've found a new love of dares.

he dared me to take a bit of everything i have in my shower (body lotions, shampoo, etc.) and pour it in my shower (i have a huge shower, i'm 5'9 and i can almost lie down in it), pee and poop on top of it, strip down to nothing, and bathe myself in it.

it took forever to wash all that stuff off of me, but it was worth it. he didn't think i was up for it. ha.

hornygirl09 · 05-20-2009, 04:55 PM

oh that does sound like loads of fun, I wish I could have been with you then lol

Komodo Jones · 05-20-2009, 06:18 PM

Sorry to rain on your parade but being a writer myself I do have a little critique of your story. First off it's not bad...but on the other hand it's not entirely good. Different people have different tastes I'm sure but I will say that some people enjoy a little more detail in their stories. If you take your time and add details to the story, for example how did the dare come about, it could be more interesting. Was it started by a game of truth or dare or something else? I'm not trying to be mean or anything just offering some constructive criticism. If you take the time to add some details and proofread the post, for example all I's in contractions and by themselves should be capitalized, your story/stories could be a whole lot better.

Officelover · 05-26-2009, 05:04 PM

Light. Simple. Interesting. All good words to describe this story.

I do like this story.

05-19-2009, 07:48 PM	#1
vanillla Junior Member Join Date: May 2009 Posts: 15	my first dare i've done dares before as a little kid, but they were dumb like, "draw a moustache on your face and then wash it off" haha so this was my first real dare. my friend gave it to me and it was kind of disgusting.. but i've found a new love of dares. he dared me to take a bit of everything i have in my shower (body lotions, shampoo, etc.) and pour it in my shower (i have a huge shower, i'm 5'9 and i can almost lie down in it), pee and poop on top of it, strip down to nothing, and bathe myself in it. it took forever to wash all that stuff off of me, but it was worth it. he didn't think i was up for it. ha.

05-20-2009, 04:55 PM	#2
hornygirl09 Member Join Date: Jan 2009 Posts: 86	oh that does sound like loads of fun, I wish I could have been with you then lol __________________ 16 f bi likes: bondage, insertion, mess dislikes: anal, pain I am legoguy314's sister so if you have dares for us other than fuck each other I will be glad to do them. Note: I WILL NOT TAKE PICS SO DON'T EVEN ASK

05-20-2009, 06:18 PM	#3
Komodo Jones getDare Succubus Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: in your fantasies...it's ok you can admit it Posts: 1,755 Blog Entries: 97	Sorry to rain on your parade but being a writer myself I do have a little critique of your story. First off it's not bad...but on the other hand it's not entirely good. Different people have different tastes I'm sure but I will say that some people enjoy a little more detail in their stories. If you take your time and add details to the story, for example how did the dare come about, it could be more interesting. Was it started by a game of truth or dare or something else? I'm not trying to be mean or anything just offering some constructive criticism. If you take the time to add some details and proofread the post, for example all I's in contractions and by themselves should be capitalized, your story/stories could be a whole lot better. __________________ KJ 38/male/partially bi/switch D/s Status: Protector, Dom and Daddy of pixie.dust I love meeting new, nice, smart people. I communicate through Discord mainly. What are my limits/likes/supplies? Click here! Check Out my Literary Works Targeting the Ignored [Fiction] Some Stuff I've Done (Non-Fiction) Last edited by Komodo Jones; 05-20-2009 at 06:19 PM. Reason: forgot to add something

05-26-2009, 05:04 PM	#4
Officelover Truth or Dare Enthusiast Join Date: May 2008 Location: New England Posts: 2,602 Blog Entries: 107	Light. Simple. Interesting. All good words to describe this story. I do like this story. __________________ 20 Trans Femme Nonbinary Ass Collector Writes Poetry On Aluminum Foil with Gold Gel Pens Fills Mason Jar with Vodka I'm Doing A Cleanse White Kid with Black Nails