Fiction: The Surprise

slutpup · 09-02-2011, 05:13 PM

All comments are much appreciated. I had RACHIE help me with the grammer,spelling,and a few changes to the whole story.

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THE SURPRISE

It was 10am when Lily got a text from her best friend, Nikki. Reading it Lily got this tingly feeling, what could her best friend want? “meet me at my house in 20 min” it read. Texting back as quick as she could she typed “k ill be there”.

She got changed into a bright pink bra, pink tank top, pink shorts, and a pink thong. As she was changing she examined herself in the mirror. She was about 4 foot 5. She was a little overweight but not too much. She had long black hair that is always in a pony tail. She wears glasses and has freckles.

When she was dressed she told her mom she was going out and left.

Thankful that Nikki's house was only 2 blocks away, she got on her bike still wondering why her friend had sent the mysterious message.

Arriving at Nikki’s house she crept up to Nikki's room.

Nikki is 4 foot 7. She is a little underweight, but not much. She has short blonde hair and a lot of people think she is dumb, but she is actually very smart. She has perfect vision and no freckles what so ever.

"What's up? Why did you want me to come here?" asked a puzzled Lily.

"Because we are going to play truth or dare" Nikki said with an evil grin on her face.

"NO WAY! You know I hate that evil game. Last time I played I had to run around naked outside and I was seen by 3 people!"

"Well, actually, you kind of have to play."

"No I don't. My life, my choice. I'm leaving, bye" replied Lily

"Fine leave, if you want these pictures to go on the internet."

Lily stopped dead in her tracks. "What pictures?" Lily asks.

"The pictures I have of you naked and masturbating." Nikki said with the widest smile ever on her face.

"W...Where did you get those????" She half yelled.

"Well, remember last week when I told you I was coming over at 5pm but never showed?"

"Yeah, why?" asked Lily still puzzled at what this had to do with her being naked.

"Well I came at 4:30. I walked into your room and you were naked. Your back was facing me so you never saw me. I started to leave when I realized the opportunity that I walked right into. I decided to go back and open your door just a crack and took a picture of you. Then, you turned around and I got one with your face." Nikki explained grinning.

"I...I don't believe you." She gasped.

"Fine I'll show them to you." Nikki told her hoping everything was going to plan.

TO BE CONTINUED …………..
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What will happen next?

Has Nikki actually got any photo's?

Keep reading "The Surprise" to find out

Rachie · 09-02-2011, 06:37 PM

Lovely Part keep up the story, and if you need any help feel free to ask

Love Rachie
x x x x

slutpup · 09-02-2011, 06:48 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Rachie

Lovely Part keep up the story, and if you need any help feel free to ask

Love Rachie
x x x x

Thanks

I will haha.

J.M.N · 09-04-2011, 12:24 PM

Very descriptive ! And i like how you explained how Nikki got the pictures ! Plus it was a believeable story !

Great grammer and spelling of course

And there are so many ways you can go with this ! And teasing the reader with a unexplained past event

Yeah i like it

slutpup · 09-04-2011, 01:46 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by J.M.N

Very descriptive ! And i like how you explained how Nikki got the pictures ! Plus it was a believeable story !

Great grammer and spelling of course

And there are so many ways you can go with this ! And teasing the reader with a unexplained past event

Yeah i like it

Thanks

Yeah, I could actually think it could happen. I had Rachie's help with that so don't give me all the credit. LOL. I'm so glad you like it.

hadesnyberg · 09-06-2011, 08:46 PM

nice begining please do continue

mistermagoo69 · 09-07-2011, 11:16 AM

Very nice. I like this

slutpup · 09-11-2011, 04:58 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by hadesnyberg

nice begining please do continue

Thanks.

The next part should be up within the hour.

Quote:

Originally Posted by mistermagoo69

Very nice. I like this

Thanks. I'm glad you like it!!

slutpup · 09-11-2011, 05:00 PM

Special thanks to Rachie for helping me with this post!!
Thanks for the positive comments Rachie, J.M.N, hadesnyberg, and mistermagoo69

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Nikki turned on the computer and loaded up the pictures. Lily gasped and realized she had no choice but to play her most hated game ever.

"Nikki, how could you?" Lily asked her friend.

"Because I wanted you to play with just ME. You only had to do that dare because you played with Dillon, who hates you. I wanted you to try it with me and this is the only way I could think that you would play. I'm sorry but it was my only choice."

Lily thought about it. Her friend just wanted to play with her. It’s not like she did anything wrong, well besides blackmailing her.

"Okay, I'll play, on one condition." Lily answered with a smile.

"What?"

"I get to blackmail you next time." She says laughing.

"Okay, fine. Haha."

"Nikki, how do we know who wins?"

"We each start with 5 back-outs. We can use those for when we don't want to answer a truth or do a dare. Here's the catch: When we use one, we have to give it to the other player. When you take 3 truths in a row, you lose 1 back-out. When you take 3 dares in a row, you gain a back-out. The loser is the one who won't do a dare or answer a truth after they use their last back-out. The loser also has to be the winner's slave for 6 months"

"Wait, slave? You never said anything about that!"

"Well, I wanted it to be a surprise. Anyways you have to play or else these photo's will be on youtube!" Nikki giggled waving some of the images in the air, "and don’t think I haven’t got back ups."

"Okay, FINE!! But, what are we going to use as the back-outs?" Lily asked curiously.

"How about coins? I can go get some." Nikki said

"Okay."

Nikki went and got some coins. She gave 5 to Lily and kept 5 for herself..

"So, can I go first?" asked a nervous Lily.

"Sure."

"Nikki, truth or dare?" Lily asked.

"Truth"

"Why do you want to play truth or dare with me so bad?"

"Well, because you've never played with me before. I wanted to play with just you. You never gave me a chance and I wanted to show you I won't make you do stupid dares like Dillon did. I know you hate this game but if you just give me a chance, you'll see that I won't be an idiot.

"Okay, Nikki. I apolize. I should have given you a chance."

"It's okay, Lily. I forgive you. Now, lets get back to the game. Lily, truth or dare"

"Truth please."

"If I didn't blackmail you, would you have played?"

"Honesty, No. But I realize now that I should have. " answered Lily truthfully

"Okay. That's good to know then."

"Why is it good to know?" Lily asked suspiciously.

"I don't have to tell you!"

Lily knew what question she was going to ask Nikki next. That is, if she picked truth.

"Nikki, truth or dare?"

"Truth"

"Why is it good to know that I wasn't going to play unless you blackmailed me?" Lily asked with a large smirk on her face.

"Well, umm, because I know how to get you to play next time." Nikki said, embarrassed.

"NIKKI!!! After all this your still going to blackmail me?"

"Lily, calm down. I'll tell you later. So, truth or dare?" Nikki asked.

"Dare. I want this over with."

"Fine. Lily, I dare you to give me all your back-outs!!!" Nikki said with the biggest grin on her face.

TO BE CONTINUED …….
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Will Lily give up all her back-outs?
Will Lily get pay back?
Keep reading 'The Surprise' to find out!!

jeff10145 · 09-11-2011, 06:05 PM

omg great ending to tht part i cant wait to see what happens next great story!

Rachie · 09-12-2011, 04:40 AM

Brilliant part honey, keep up the good work, looking forward to reading the next exciting part of the surprise.

Love Rachie
x x x x

thefunman · 09-12-2011, 05:34 AM

Well this is good so far, keep up the good work.

hadesnyberg · 09-12-2011, 09:08 AM

evil plan i like it either way she loses at least one back out

slutpup · 01-24-2012, 09:11 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by jeff10145

omg great ending to tht part i cant wait to see what happens next great story!

Thanks.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Rachie

Brilliant part honey, keep up the good work, looking forward to reading the next exciting part of the surprise.

Love Rachie
x x x x

Thanks for the help and for the positive comments!!

Quote:

Originally Posted by thefunman

Well this is good so far, keep up the good work.

Thanks

Quote:

Originally Posted by hadesnyberg

evil plan i like it either way she loses at least one back out

Thanks

slutpup · 01-24-2012, 09:18 PM

Special Thanks to Rachie for helping me edit the parts!!

Thanks for the positive comments jeff10145, Rachie, thefunman, and hadesnyberg!

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PART 3 of The Surprise!!

"Fine. Lily, I dare you to give me all your back-outs!!!" Nikki said with the biggest grin on her face.

"Nikki! Are you serious?" Lily asked, scared of what the answer will be.

"Yes. I'm completly serious."

"I can't believe after blackmailing me you would try to end the game so soon. But I could always say no and only lose 1 back-out."

"Crap. I forgot about that." Nikki said sadly.

"I'm going to use my back-out." Lily said with a devilish smile.

Lily hands Nikki the back-out. "Truth or dare, Nikki?"

"Ummmm, dare. I'll be brave."

"I dare you to....... strip to your underwear!"

As we were both 14, nobody has seen us without our clothes on at all. Except maybe our parents but that is a different story. Nikki slowly stood up and started stripping. First, she takes off her nice white T-shirt. Afte she chucks her shirt on the floor, she slowly strips off her shorts. She just stands there in her white bra and matching thong.

"Wow, Nikki. You have a nice body!"

"Thanks." Nikki said, blushing. Nikki sits back down and asks, "Lily, truth or dare?"

"Dare."

"Time to make things interesting. I dare you to strip to your underwear and then take off either your bra or panties!" Lily said, laughing.

"Ummmmm, do I have to?"

"You could give me a back-out." Lily has 4 and Nikki has 6.

"No." Lily slowly stands up and takes off her pink tank top, chucking it on the floor. Now it was time for her sweats.

Looking up pleadingly Lily realised it was the big moment. Should she take off her bra or panties. After a few seconds she slowly reaches for......

TO BE CONTINUED.....
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What will Lily take off?
Will Lily get pay back?
Keep reading The Surprise to find out!!

09-02-2011, 05:13 PM	#1
slutpup Distinguished Member Join Date: Dec 2010 Location: MN Posts: 703 Blog Entries: 8	The Surprise All comments are much appreciated. I had RACHIE help me with the grammer,spelling,and a few changes to the whole story. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~~~~~~~ THE SURPRISE It was 10am when Lily got a text from her best friend, Nikki. Reading it Lily got this tingly feeling, what could her best friend want? “meet me at my house in 20 min” it read. Texting back as quick as she could she typed “k ill be there”. She got changed into a bright pink bra, pink tank top, pink shorts, and a pink thong. As she was changing she examined herself in the mirror. She was about 4 foot 5. She was a little overweight but not too much. She had long black hair that is always in a pony tail. She wears glasses and has freckles. When she was dressed she told her mom she was going out and left. Thankful that Nikki's house was only 2 blocks away, she got on her bike still wondering why her friend had sent the mysterious message. Arriving at Nikki’s house she crept up to Nikki's room. Nikki is 4 foot 7. She is a little underweight, but not much. She has short blonde hair and a lot of people think she is dumb, but she is actually very smart. She has perfect vision and no freckles what so ever. "What's up? Why did you want me to come here?" asked a puzzled Lily. "Because we are going to play truth or dare" Nikki said with an evil grin on her face. "NO WAY! You know I hate that evil game. Last time I played I had to run around naked outside and I was seen by 3 people!" "Well, actually, you kind of have to play." "No I don't. My life, my choice. I'm leaving, bye" replied Lily "Fine leave, if you want these pictures to go on the internet." Lily stopped dead in her tracks. "What pictures?" Lily asks. "The pictures I have of you naked and masturbating." Nikki said with the widest smile ever on her face. "W...Where did you get those????" She half yelled. "Well, remember last week when I told you I was coming over at 5pm but never showed?" "Yeah, why?" asked Lily still puzzled at what this had to do with her being naked. "Well I came at 4:30. I walked into your room and you were naked. Your back was facing me so you never saw me. I started to leave when I realized the opportunity that I walked right into. I decided to go back and open your door just a crack and took a picture of you. Then, you turned around and I got one with your face." Nikki explained grinning. "I...I don't believe you." She gasped. "Fine I'll show them to you." Nikki told her hoping everything was going to plan. TO BE CONTINUED ………….. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~~~~~~~~ What will happen next? Has Nikki actually got any photo's? Keep reading "The Surprise" to find out __________________ PM me dares! I will try any dare that gets sent that *doesn't* have anything to do with *any* of my limits! I need help figuring out my likes, dislikes and some limits! Dare me! Likes: Mouth soaping, writing lines, spanking, anal, slight pain, certain public things Dislikes: ??? Limits: Certain public things, permanent, major pain, any type of sex, family, friends If you think I deserve a punishment for not updating my story, punish me.

09-02-2011, 06:37 PM	#2
Rachie I am the cutest butterfly ever Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: In my Bed, Posts: 6,606 Blog Entries: 2	Lovely Part keep up the story, and if you need any help feel free to ask Love Rachie x x x x __________________ RACHIE'S GETDARE USER GUIDE / MANUAL STRIP POKER WITH A TWIST (Story) BED HABITS LOLA.FOX WISHES SHE WAS MY FAVORITE USER <3

09-04-2011, 12:24 PM	#4
J.M.N Getdare's Head Whore Join Date: Jun 2011 Location: UK Posts: 1,401 Blog Entries: 14	Very descriptive ! And i like how you explained how Nikki got the pictures ! Plus it was a believeable story ! Great grammer and spelling of course And there are so many ways you can go with this ! And teasing the reader with a unexplained past event Yeah i like it __________________ [20:16:43] Jameser: ‹@J.M.N› don't worry you're definitely one of the lads here [22:05:21] 1Pupil: Best moderator of getDare to me One day when the light is glowing I’ll be in my castle golden But until the gates are open I just wanna feel this moment "Bdsm. That's were u get spanked!" I love weiners and nuts. "JMN is the one that most the tweenagers want to see in a kilt"

09-06-2011, 08:46 PM	#6
hadesnyberg Account Banned Join Date: Apr 2011 Location: where you die i will be the last thing you see but until then i am in your worst nightmares Posts: 53	nice begining please do continue __________________ 15 male Iowa United States From Your scariest Nightmare I hunger for the flesh of man i can be contacted at [email protected] but pm me first if your going and wait for me to pm back to so i have a heads up i look forward to hearing from you Hades DarkBlade

09-11-2011, 05:00 PM	#9
slutpup Distinguished Member Join Date: Dec 2010 Location: MN Posts: 703 Blog Entries: 8	Part 2 Special thanks to Rachie for helping me with this post!! Thanks for the positive comments Rachie, J.M.N, hadesnyberg, and mistermagoo69 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~~~~~~ Nikki turned on the computer and loaded up the pictures. Lily gasped and realized she had no choice but to play her most hated game ever. "Nikki, how could you?" Lily asked her friend. "Because I wanted you to play with just ME. You only had to do that dare because you played with Dillon, who hates you. I wanted you to try it with me and this is the only way I could think that you would play. I'm sorry but it was my only choice." Lily thought about it. Her friend just wanted to play with her. It’s not like she did anything wrong, well besides blackmailing her. "Okay, I'll play, on one condition." Lily answered with a smile. "What?" "I get to blackmail you next time." She says laughing. "Okay, fine. Haha." "Nikki, how do we know who wins?" "We each start with 5 back-outs. We can use those for when we don't want to answer a truth or do a dare. Here's the catch: When we use one, we have to give it to the other player. When you take 3 truths in a row, you lose 1 back-out. When you take 3 dares in a row, you gain a back-out. The loser is the one who won't do a dare or answer a truth after they use their last back-out. The loser also has to be the winner's slave for 6 months" "Wait, slave? You never said anything about that!" "Well, I wanted it to be a surprise. Anyways you have to play or else these photo's will be on youtube!" Nikki giggled waving some of the images in the air, "and don’t think I haven’t got back ups." "Okay, FINE!! But, what are we going to use as the back-outs?" Lily asked curiously. "How about coins? I can go get some." Nikki said "Okay." Nikki went and got some coins. She gave 5 to Lily and kept 5 for herself.. "So, can I go first?" asked a nervous Lily. "Sure." "Nikki, truth or dare?" Lily asked. "Truth" "Why do you want to play truth or dare with me so bad?" "Well, because you've never played with me before. I wanted to play with just you. You never gave me a chance and I wanted to show you I won't make you do stupid dares like Dillon did. I know you hate this game but if you just give me a chance, you'll see that I won't be an idiot. "Okay, Nikki. I apolize. I should have given you a chance." "It's okay, Lily. I forgive you. Now, lets get back to the game. Lily, truth or dare" "Truth please." "If I didn't blackmail you, would you have played?" "Honesty, No. But I realize now that I should have. " answered Lily truthfully "Okay. That's good to know then." "Why is it good to know?" Lily asked suspiciously. "I don't have to tell you!" Lily knew what question she was going to ask Nikki next. That is, if she picked truth. "Nikki, truth or dare?" "Truth" "Why is it good to know that I wasn't going to play unless you blackmailed me?" Lily asked with a large smirk on her face. "Well, umm, because I know how to get you to play next time." Nikki said, embarrassed. "NIKKI!!! After all this your still going to blackmail me?" "Lily, calm down. I'll tell you later. So, truth or dare?" Nikki asked. "Dare. I want this over with." "Fine. Lily, I dare you to give me all your back-outs!!!" Nikki said with the biggest grin on her face. TO BE CONTINUED ……. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~~~~~~~~ Will Lily give up all her back-outs? Will Lily get pay back? Keep reading 'The Surprise' to find out!! __________________ PM me dares! I will try any dare that gets sent that *doesn't* have anything to do with *any* of my limits! I need help figuring out my likes, dislikes and some limits! Dare me! Likes: Mouth soaping, writing lines, spanking, anal, slight pain, certain public things Dislikes: ??? Limits: Certain public things, permanent, major pain, any type of sex, family, friends If you think I deserve a punishment for not updating my story, punish me.

09-07-2011, 11:16 AM	#7
mistermagoo69 Junior Member Join Date: Sep 2011 Location: England Posts: 3	Very nice. I like this

09-11-2011, 06:05 PM	#10
jeff10145 Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2010 Location: us Posts: 206 Blog Entries: 5	omg great ending to tht part i cant wait to see what happens next great story! __________________ Likes: Humiliation, Control/TPE, Tease and Denial (edging) a little anal, mild pain, chastity, maybe a little public Pet play, degradation, teasing (meaning fun name calling Etc),Nipple play, bondage, gags, whips and crops Dislikes: cum play, too much anal, toothpaste, corner time, writing line or essays Limits: extreme pain, scat, family too public (hidden is fine), Blood, Permanent Damage Messy (some is okay)

09-12-2011, 04:40 AM	#11
Rachie I am the cutest butterfly ever Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: In my Bed, Posts: 6,606 Blog Entries: 2	Brilliant part honey, keep up the good work, looking forward to reading the next exciting part of the surprise. Love Rachie x x x x __________________ RACHIE'S GETDARE USER GUIDE / MANUAL STRIP POKER WITH A TWIST (Story) BED HABITS LOLA.FOX WISHES SHE WAS MY FAVORITE USER <3

09-12-2011, 05:34 AM	#12
thefunman getDare Succubus Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Florida, USA Posts: 1,766	Well this is good so far, keep up the good work.

09-12-2011, 09:08 AM	#13
hadesnyberg Account Banned Join Date: Apr 2011 Location: where you die i will be the last thing you see but until then i am in your worst nightmares Posts: 53	evil plan i like it either way she loses at least one back out __________________ 15 male Iowa United States From Your scariest Nightmare I hunger for the flesh of man i can be contacted at [email protected] but pm me first if your going and wait for me to pm back to so i have a heads up i look forward to hearing from you Hades DarkBlade

01-24-2012, 09:18 PM	#15
slutpup Distinguished Member Join Date: Dec 2010 Location: MN Posts: 703 Blog Entries: 8	Part 3 Special Thanks to Rachie for helping me edit the parts!! Thanks for the positive comments jeff10145, Rachie, thefunman, and hadesnyberg! \ ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ PART 3 of The Surprise!! "Fine. Lily, I dare you to give me all your back-outs!!!" Nikki said with the biggest grin on her face. "Nikki! Are you serious?" Lily asked, scared of what the answer will be. "Yes. I'm completly serious." "I can't believe after blackmailing me you would try to end the game so soon. But I could always say no and only lose 1 back-out." "Crap. I forgot about that." Nikki said sadly. "I'm going to use my back-out." Lily said with a devilish smile. Lily hands Nikki the back-out. "Truth or dare, Nikki?" "Ummmm, dare. I'll be brave." "I dare you to....... strip to your underwear!" As we were both 14, nobody has seen us without our clothes on at all. Except maybe our parents but that is a different story. Nikki slowly stood up and started stripping. First, she takes off her nice white T-shirt. Afte she chucks her shirt on the floor, she slowly strips off her shorts. She just stands there in her white bra and matching thong. "Wow, Nikki. You have a nice body!" "Thanks." Nikki said, blushing. Nikki sits back down and asks, "Lily, truth or dare?" "Dare." "Time to make things interesting. I dare you to strip to your underwear and then take off either your bra or panties!" Lily said, laughing. "Ummmmm, do I have to?" "You could give me a back-out." Lily has 4 and Nikki has 6. "No." Lily slowly stands up and takes off her pink tank top, chucking it on the floor. Now it was time for her sweats. Looking up pleadingly Lily realised it was the big moment. Should she take off her bra or panties. After a few seconds she slowly reaches for...... TO BE CONTINUED..... ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ What will Lily take off? Will Lily get pay back? Keep reading The Surprise to find out!! __________________ PM me dares! I will try any dare that gets sent that *doesn't* have anything to do with *any* of my limits! I need help figuring out my likes, dislikes and some limits! Dare me! Likes: Mouth soaping, writing lines, spanking, anal, slight pain, certain public things Dislikes: ??? Limits: Certain public things, permanent, major pain, any type of sex, family, friends If you think I deserve a punishment for not updating my story, punish me. Last edited by slutpup; 01-27-2012 at 02:57 PM. Reason: Fix my spelling