The Mobile Disaster (FICTION)

[lokelake]

The Mobile Disaster

Background: This story is about a catestropic Hurricane that hits Mobile, Alabama.

Chapter 1: The Introduction

----Mobile, Alabama, a city a long the Gulf Coast, which is prone to tropical weather. It is home to more than 100,000 people. Bob, Lork, Chiuop, and Zent all lived through 3 past hurricanes. Bob and Lork, are meteorologists at the National Weather Service in Mobile, Alabama, and Chiuop and Zent are in charge of evacuating the city when a natural disaster is forecast to hit the city.
----Mobile, Alabama, was the first city to help ease Global Warming, by banning all vehicles to drive in the city, from the city and out, and from out of the city to the inside of the city. The people now have to ride horse and buggy. The Mayor is starting to have regrets about doing this, because the difficulty of evacuations from a hurricane is greatly increased.

The End of Chapter 1

[Coyote]

Well this is a pretty good start,however, you should make the posts longer. Try dviding up into paragraphs. You also might want to slow down

[lokelake]

Originally Posted by Coyote

Well this is a pretty good start,however, you should make the posts longer. Try dviding up into paragraphs. You also might want to slow down

Thanks. And thanks for the tips.