Not An Averge Game of S/M [fiction]

coolcat11 · 06-02-2009, 02:46 AM

i hade to remove this post and put it somewhere else. look for it in mature stories.

Officelover · 06-02-2009, 03:25 AM

I'm sorry but that was the worst story I've read on this site. It was short, grammatically incorect, implausible, belongs in Mature Stories for mention of rape, and disgusting to think of S/M as a 'game'.

It is a lifestyle.

coolcat11 · 06-02-2009, 03:14 PM

Thanks for the feed back. I will take your suggestions into consideration.

Coyote · 06-02-2009, 03:18 PM

well heres a few tips. Dont divide it up like that, use paragraphs just like most people. Try to ease into things. Build up some suspense and be more descriptive. The climax is the best part but what makes it the climax is the suspense that is built up beforehand. Btw i put Bad in the poll.

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06-02-2009, 02:46 AM	#1
coolcat11 Account Banned Join Date: Mar 2009 Posts: 4	Not An Averge Game of S/M [fiction] i hade to remove this post and put it somewhere else. look for it in mature stories. __________________ [SIGPIC][/SIGPIC]coolcat *Nothing better then being cool with cat-like reflexes!* Last edited by coolcat11; 06-02-2009 at 03:31 PM. Reason: I didn't put it in the right place it was a total accedent

06-02-2009, 03:25 AM	#2
Officelover Truth or Dare Enthusiast Join Date: May 2008 Location: New England Posts: 2,602 Blog Entries: 107	I'm sorry but that was the worst story I've read on this site. It was short, grammatically incorect, implausible, belongs in Mature Stories for mention of rape, and disgusting to think of S/M as a 'game'. It is a lifestyle. __________________ 20 Trans Femme Nonbinary Ass Collector Writes Poetry On Aluminum Foil with Gold Gel Pens Fills Mason Jar with Vodka I'm Doing A Cleanse White Kid with Black Nails

06-02-2009, 03:14 PM	#3
coolcat11 Account Banned Join Date: Mar 2009 Posts: 4	Thanks for the feed back. I will take your suggestions into consideration. __________________ [SIGPIC][/SIGPIC]coolcat *Nothing better then being cool with cat-like reflexes!*

06-02-2009, 03:18 PM	#4
Coyote getDare Addict Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: USA Posts: 2,110 Blog Entries: 14	well heres a few tips. Dont divide it up like that, use paragraphs just like most people. Try to ease into things. Build up some suspense and be more descriptive. The climax is the best part but what makes it the climax is the suspense that is built up beforehand. Btw i put Bad in the poll.