Fiction: First story: Hannah's Week

Tydi2 · 09-24-2012, 01:07 AM

This is my first story, so tell me if you want me to continue!

PROLOUGE:

Blog entry:
Hannah
6:54 AM, Monday July 13

After what happened last week I think I might keep my head down, for a year.

CHAPTER 1: 7 days earlier

Hannah got dressed, nothing formal just normal clothse, plus a jacket. Hannah tried to contain her excitement, her first job! Sure it was fast food, but still a job! She texted her friend Cathy saying she was ready. 5 minutes later Cathy showed up looking tired and warn out. "Well, you look amazing!" Hannah said, eyeing over Cathy. "Oh yah I bet your week has been better than mine!" Cathy responded. "I'm sure it has my PE teacher had us running laps for hours" Hannah said, faking tiredness. "I bet yours was much easier!" Cathy got a malevolent, crafty look in her eyes like she was known for, "Are you willing to put that to the test?" she said smiling warmly. "Um, sure." Hannah knew something was wrong, but not wanting to make a hasty judgment, agreed. "Ok" Cathy said, "Just go to this address at 5:45 AM sharp tomorrow. Don’t be late." Hannah went through the day knowing it wasn’t Cathy’s address, and all she could get out of Cathy was 3 Words "M & S"

END OF CHAPTER 1

LOOK AHEAD

Blog entry
5:25 AM, Tuesday July 7th

Still not sure what to expect, and Cathy’s been no help, well can’t be that bad wish me luck!

nude.for.life · 09-24-2012, 02:14 PM

Please continue soon, sounds...interesting

frogman91234 · 09-24-2012, 03:35 PM

Good hook just enough to make it interesting please go on

Tydi2 · 09-24-2012, 03:38 PM

I promise to make the next entry more interesting and much longer, also I might add an option to choose what Hannah does!

frogman91234 · 09-24-2012, 03:42 PM

Sweet!! That would be awesome!

Tydi2 · 09-24-2012, 04:05 PM

Heres the next part. sorry no chance to choose her way yet. Also if theres any mistakes plz tell me so i can make this better! Next part may come out later today or tomorrow!

Chapter 2

The day was cold and stormy; Hannah had walked to the house because none of her friends would have let her go to a stranger’s house alone. Just as she reached the house the light drizzle of rain increased exponentially. She quickly ran on to the porch and rang the doorbell. A man about the age of 25 (3 years older than herself) answered the door. “Hello?” he said slowly. “Um, Hi” Hannah said. “My friend Cathy said to come here.” The Man smiled coldly and said “Come on in, your 10 minutes late.”

The man’s house seemed nice enough from what she could tell. The man led her into a windowless room and said “Do you know why you are here?” Hannah responded “No, Cathy wouldn’t tell me.” The man thought for a minute before continuing. “Ok, let’s start with the basics, Please go stand on the scale.” Hannah thought this was weird but it WAS just a scale. As the scale displayed her weight he said “Hmm I guess you enjoy indulging yourself don’t you.” Hannah, deeply offended started to make a comment but was interrupted. “Now how tall are you?” “6, 3 why?” Just wanting to make sure everything was correctly fitted. “Now some ground rules; in my presence you will address me as master.” Hannah knew something was off “Why the hell would I do that?” “Next you will refer to yourself as it in my presence.” He continued as if she hadn’t talked at all. “Lastly, no matter how unimportant it is you will ask for my permission.” After about 30 minutes of training she was allowed to go home. She called Cathy hoping for an explanation. “What the hell Cathy, that man is crazy.” Cathy responded “maybe but for the next week get used to it, It gets better.” As Cathy hung up Hannah leaned back dreding the next day.

END OF CHAPTER 2

LOOK AHEAD

Hannah looked into the man’s eyes as all her thoughts drained away from her “what was he doing to her?” She tried to stand up but found it harder and harder to think, or speak, or move.

frogman91234 · 09-24-2012, 06:36 PM

Don't force your self into making the decisions they will just come as you go! That seemed great to me!

Tydi2 · 09-24-2012, 07:02 PM

Thanks the next chapter will come in about 5-6 hours.

Tydi2 · 09-24-2012, 07:43 PM

Chapters will now have titles and this one came out a bit early. I will just keep typing till I have to go to bed, so expect more frequent shorter entrys PM me with any ideas for where the story should go!

CHAPTER 3

The day started out perfectly, Hannah woke up watched the news and made breakfast. “Today is going to be a good day.” How far away from the truth she was. About 45 minutes later she realized it was already 6:00 and ‘He’ would be waiting. She quickly ran over and rang the doorbell. “Your over 30 minutes late.” He said. “I know sir I’m sorry.” He looked even more displeased “So your 30 minutes late and you called me sir!” He said angrily. “Seems as if you need some ‘training’”. She followed him into the back room where 2 chairs had been set up looking at each other. “Sit” He commanded. She sat in the chair looking towards the door. He started out in a soft droning voice, “All I want you to do is relax.” Hannah leaned back, “Just relax and focus on my voice.” The repeating f this went on for 20 minutes. “Now I am going to give you and you WILL accept them.” Hannah looked into the man’s eyes as all her thoughts drained away from her “what was he doing to her?” She tried to stand up but found it harder and harder to think, or speak, or move. The man gave her instructions for about 2 hours until he said “Good, now when I count to 5 you will wake up not remembering anything of your old life. After 7 days all your memories will come back. But until then all you will remember are the guide lines I have given you. 1, 2, 3, 4, 5. It suddenly stood up and looked at master. It didn’t remember anything except basic skills and the rules master had given it.

End of Chapter 3

Chapter 4 look ahead: The New Life

It woke up on master’s floor at 5:00 exactly and began its daily service without any thoughts of individuality.

frogman91234 · 09-24-2012, 08:31 PM

Woah! nice! Havent read anything with hypnotism!

Tydi2 · 09-24-2012, 08:41 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by frogman91234

Woah! nice! Havent read anything with hypnotism!

Thanks! I tryed to make it so i can write in others input into the story without it being illogical for Hannah to do the thing.

Tydi2 · 09-24-2012, 09:01 PM

Im at a stand still on how to keep the story rolling, please message me (dont post it as a comment so it wont ruin the next part for everyone) with ideas for how to continue or new story ideas!

Tydi2 · 09-24-2012, 11:35 PM

Still a shorter part Next one will go up around this time tomorrow. Trust me this WILL get better.

Chapter 4: New Life

It woke up on master’s floor at 5:00 exactly and began its daily service without any thoughts of individuality. As far as it could tell it had been a slave for its entire life. It quickly began its chores. Stepping out of the story some differences between Hannah and it. First Hannah had long hair whereas it had short barely visible hair. Next, Hannah has alert, green eyes whereas it had subdued eyes and grey contacts. Later that day master made It go to the store insisting it wore minimal clothing. It disagreed with master but had no choice. That night it was worn out and as it walked towards the bed master said “No, all you are deserving of is a cage.” It agreed and crawled into the cage. During the night Hannah controlled the mind and was able to examine herself. The first thing she noticed was the band of metal around her neck. “Oh god, why am I wearing a collar!” Then she felt a pain whenever it applied pressure to the right shoulder blade. Hannah remembered in the middle of the previous night going to a strange building where they- “NO I have a tattoo, oh Shit!” Hannah tried with all her might to control its body but as it started to wake up Hannah was losing control it woke up and made Masters breakfast. It knew this was the last day of service; and it was sad. At 4:35 PM Hannah woke up seeing the collar next to her and took out the contacts although it burned. Hannah quickly found the clothes that had been put out and putting them on ran home. Hannah tried to remember the week but couldn’t. But she did remember 1 command that she was given. This came into effect as she was talking to her friend Tyler. “Hey Hannah you look pretty worn out are you ok?” “Yeah, hey my friend needs some help moving do you think you could help him?” “Sure!” Hannah got a distant look in her eyes as she handed him a card with an address on it. ”Just come here at 5:45 AM tomorrow I’ll be there to help you.”

END OF PART 1

PART 2 look ahead

Tyler was getting a serious vibe, why had Hannah made him do this and what was this piece of metal around his neck? Sadly for him he was having these thoughts as he was cuffed to a chair with a man sitting opposite to him, the man started out in a soft droning voice, “All I want you to do is relax.” …

nude.for.life · 09-24-2012, 11:44 PM

HOLY CRAP YOUR WRITING IS AMAZING!!!!!!! I can't wait for more!!

Tydi2 · 09-24-2012, 11:50 PM

Thanks nude.for.life for commenting it! I hope to continue it but am trieing to find a good way to continue it.

09-24-2012, 01:07 AM	#1
Tydi2 Junior Member Join Date: Sep 2012 Posts: 16	Fiction: First story: Hannah's Week This is my first story, so tell me if you want me to continue! PROLOUGE: Blog entry: Hannah 6:54 AM, Monday July 13 After what happened last week I think I might keep my head down, for a year. CHAPTER 1: 7 days earlier Hannah got dressed, nothing formal just normal clothse, plus a jacket. Hannah tried to contain her excitement, her first job! Sure it was fast food, but still a job! She texted her friend Cathy saying she was ready. 5 minutes later Cathy showed up looking tired and warn out. "Well, you look amazing!" Hannah said, eyeing over Cathy. "Oh yah I bet your week has been better than mine!" Cathy responded. "I'm sure it has my PE teacher had us running laps for hours" Hannah said, faking tiredness. "I bet yours was much easier!" Cathy got a malevolent, crafty look in her eyes like she was known for, "Are you willing to put that to the test?" she said smiling warmly. "Um, sure." Hannah knew something was wrong, but not wanting to make a hasty judgment, agreed. "Ok" Cathy said, "Just go to this address at 5:45 AM sharp tomorrow. Don’t be late." Hannah went through the day knowing it wasn’t Cathy’s address, and all she could get out of Cathy was 3 Words "M & S" END OF CHAPTER 1 LOOK AHEAD Blog entry 5:25 AM, Tuesday July 7th Still not sure what to expect, and Cathy’s been no help, well can’t be that bad wish me luck! Last edited by Tydi2; 09-24-2012 at 01:12 AM. Reason: Wrong Titke, Sorry!

09-24-2012, 02:14 PM	#2
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Tydi2 Junior Member Join Date: Sep 2012 Posts: 16	Thanks for the responses! I promise to make the next entry more interesting and much longer, also I might add an option to choose what Hannah does!

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09-24-2012, 04:05 PM	#6
Tydi2 Junior Member Join Date: Sep 2012 Posts: 16	Part 2 Heres the next part. sorry no chance to choose her way yet. Also if theres any mistakes plz tell me so i can make this better! Next part may come out later today or tomorrow! Chapter 2 The day was cold and stormy; Hannah had walked to the house because none of her friends would have let her go to a stranger’s house alone. Just as she reached the house the light drizzle of rain increased exponentially. She quickly ran on to the porch and rang the doorbell. A man about the age of 25 (3 years older than herself) answered the door. “Hello?” he said slowly. “Um, Hi” Hannah said. “My friend Cathy said to come here.” The Man smiled coldly and said “Come on in, your 10 minutes late.” The man’s house seemed nice enough from what she could tell. The man led her into a windowless room and said “Do you know why you are here?” Hannah responded “No, Cathy wouldn’t tell me.” The man thought for a minute before continuing. “Ok, let’s start with the basics, Please go stand on the scale.” Hannah thought this was weird but it WAS just a scale. As the scale displayed her weight he said “Hmm I guess you enjoy indulging yourself don’t you.” Hannah, deeply offended started to make a comment but was interrupted. “Now how tall are you?” “6, 3 why?” Just wanting to make sure everything was correctly fitted. “Now some ground rules; in my presence you will address me as master.” Hannah knew something was off “Why the hell would I do that?” “Next you will refer to yourself as it in my presence.” He continued as if she hadn’t talked at all. “Lastly, no matter how unimportant it is you will ask for my permission.” After about 30 minutes of training she was allowed to go home. She called Cathy hoping for an explanation. “What the hell Cathy, that man is crazy.” Cathy responded “maybe but for the next week get used to it, It gets better.” As Cathy hung up Hannah leaned back dreding the next day. END OF CHAPTER 2 LOOK AHEAD Hannah looked into the man’s eyes as all her thoughts drained away from her “what was he doing to her?” She tried to stand up but found it harder and harder to think, or speak, or move. Last edited by Tydi2; 09-24-2012 at 07:01 PM.

09-24-2012, 06:36 PM	#7
frogman91234 getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Jan 2012 Posts: 258	Don't force your self into making the decisions they will just come as you go! That seemed great to me! __________________ 18 M Likes: Masturbation, Humiliation & nudity in private, Mild public, Ice, Anal, Light Pain, Orgasm Control, Outside Maybe: Public, Pain Limits: Family, Friends, Cum, Poo, Permanent, Blood, Piss, Toothpaste etc., Diapers,

09-24-2012, 07:02 PM	#8
Tydi2 Junior Member Join Date: Sep 2012 Posts: 16	Thanks the next chapter will come in about 5-6 hours.

09-24-2012, 07:43 PM	#9
Tydi2 Junior Member Join Date: Sep 2012 Posts: 16	Chapter 3: Remolding Chapters will now have titles and this one came out a bit early. I will just keep typing till I have to go to bed, so expect more frequent shorter entrys PM me with any ideas for where the story should go! CHAPTER 3 The day started out perfectly, Hannah woke up watched the news and made breakfast. “Today is going to be a good day.” How far away from the truth she was. About 45 minutes later she realized it was already 6:00 and ‘He’ would be waiting. She quickly ran over and rang the doorbell. “Your over 30 minutes late.” He said. “I know sir I’m sorry.” He looked even more displeased “So your 30 minutes late and you called me sir!” He said angrily. “Seems as if you need some ‘training’”. She followed him into the back room where 2 chairs had been set up looking at each other. “Sit” He commanded. She sat in the chair looking towards the door. He started out in a soft droning voice, “All I want you to do is relax.” Hannah leaned back, “Just relax and focus on my voice.” The repeating f this went on for 20 minutes. “Now I am going to give you and you WILL accept them.” Hannah looked into the man’s eyes as all her thoughts drained away from her “what was he doing to her?” She tried to stand up but found it harder and harder to think, or speak, or move. The man gave her instructions for about 2 hours until he said “Good, now when I count to 5 you will wake up not remembering anything of your old life. After 7 days all your memories will come back. But until then all you will remember are the guide lines I have given you. 1, 2, 3, 4, 5. It suddenly stood up and looked at master. It didn’t remember anything except basic skills and the rules master had given it. End of Chapter 3 Chapter 4 look ahead: The New Life It woke up on master’s floor at 5:00 exactly and began its daily service without any thoughts of individuality.

09-24-2012, 08:31 PM	#10
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09-24-2012, 09:01 PM	#12
Tydi2 Junior Member Join Date: Sep 2012 Posts: 16	Some help please Im at a stand still on how to keep the story rolling, please message me (dont post it as a comment so it wont ruin the next part for everyone) with ideas for how to continue or new story ideas!

09-24-2012, 11:35 PM	#13
Tydi2 Junior Member Join Date: Sep 2012 Posts: 16	Still a shorter part Next one will go up around this time tomorrow. Trust me this WILL get better. Chapter 4: New Life It woke up on master’s floor at 5:00 exactly and began its daily service without any thoughts of individuality. As far as it could tell it had been a slave for its entire life. It quickly began its chores. Stepping out of the story some differences between Hannah and it. First Hannah had long hair whereas it had short barely visible hair. Next, Hannah has alert, green eyes whereas it had subdued eyes and grey contacts. Later that day master made It go to the store insisting it wore minimal clothing. It disagreed with master but had no choice. That night it was worn out and as it walked towards the bed master said “No, all you are deserving of is a cage.” It agreed and crawled into the cage. During the night Hannah controlled the mind and was able to examine herself. The first thing she noticed was the band of metal around her neck. “Oh god, why am I wearing a collar!” Then she felt a pain whenever it applied pressure to the right shoulder blade. Hannah remembered in the middle of the previous night going to a strange building where they- “NO I have a tattoo, oh Shit!” Hannah tried with all her might to control its body but as it started to wake up Hannah was losing control it woke up and made Masters breakfast. It knew this was the last day of service; and it was sad. At 4:35 PM Hannah woke up seeing the collar next to her and took out the contacts although it burned. Hannah quickly found the clothes that had been put out and putting them on ran home. Hannah tried to remember the week but couldn’t. But she did remember 1 command that she was given. This came into effect as she was talking to her friend Tyler. “Hey Hannah you look pretty worn out are you ok?” “Yeah, hey my friend needs some help moving do you think you could help him?” “Sure!” Hannah got a distant look in her eyes as she handed him a card with an address on it. ”Just come here at 5:45 AM tomorrow I’ll be there to help you.” END OF PART 1 PART 2 look ahead Tyler was getting a serious vibe, why had Hannah made him do this and what was this piece of metal around his neck? Sadly for him he was having these thoughts as he was cuffed to a chair with a man sitting opposite to him, the man started out in a soft droning voice, “All I want you to do is relax.” …

09-24-2012, 11:44 PM	#14
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09-24-2012, 11:50 PM	#15
Tydi2 Junior Member Join Date: Sep 2012 Posts: 16	Thank you Thanks nude.for.life for commenting it! I hope to continue it but am trieing to find a good way to continue it.