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Now we're in the showers. The guy that pushed me down (lets call him john) took my cloths and towel. While in the shower the guys got out some spray D.O and sprayed it all over me. Then they pulled me out of the shower and pinned me down. They one guy pushed my but crack open and john put shaving cream in it. The feeling of this cold stuff was horible running down my but hole. Then john tied my hands to a shower head so i could get off. Let it be known i was still naked and had the shaving cream in my but. They turned the water on the hottest it will go so my hand would begin to burn on the hot metal. Finaly when the second class hit the showers, they all laughed at me and one guy kicked me in the nuts. After every one left a nice person let me down.... a girl, she heard about my situation and let me down, of course she rubed my dick on her in the process. After i was down i relized i had no close anywhere. So now i would need to sneak into shop class to steal those things that cut open locks
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i loved part 2 can not wait for Part 3 the revenge.
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nice writing, but try to take more time, because you re making much not-needed spelling mistakes.
Anyway nice writing and keep it up, maybe you could let john demand his clothes back, so this guy has to get to johns house (or something) Cant wait for part 3 |
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let it be know that I CAN NOT SPELL and i will not write part 3 till there are more responses
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Very nice Entertaining! No one can spell these days lol. So dont get fussed over nothing....
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The story is the important thing, not the spelling. Keep going.
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why is every story writer demanding replys before he/she writes another part, if you ask me it is a bit arrogance because most of the people who react dont say more then GOOD and KEEP IT UP. and they only react this way because the story writers demand that.
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It's a very good story so far. If you have spelling problems, I suggest writing the story in Word or another program with spell check, that should catch most of the obvious ones. It's also smarter that way something happens before you hit the "Post" button and the story is erased, you don't have to retype it. Also, you might want to try breaking the story into paragraphs to make it flow easier.
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You have to keep the story going. I am looking through some of the stories (including this one) to try and compile some Non-fiction stuff, so if I fail it will be your fault
![]() Crazzylver, hello, welcome to the getdare forums, that's not exactly what these forums are about, but you never know. Have you tried the master/slave area to see if you can hook up with people on MSN or something (as slave/master relationship at first)
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i'll write part three tomarrow, or today if i feel like it
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O.K. that was a good story. If it was a real story I would drive to your state and beat up those punks. I would pronobly snap there rists(no joke).
Good story man. |
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A very good story, but the grammar does detract from the reading of it. I love the idea, though it is pretty un-realistic (a girl getting a naked boy down from boy's locker-room shower, hot water in a school).
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i agree its a good story but very un-reallisic...the water at our school is why people don't take showers at our school, we sick to our Deoderant
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