We're Closer Than You Think

blanket cape · 10-04-2011, 07:25 PM

Hey Guess its Billy! and here is my first story. I've been reading stories on gd for about a year now, and i think its time to right one of my own. Hopefully you guys like, I will be updating as frequently as possible.Sorry in advanced for any grammar or spelling mistakes.

We're Closer Than You think

Main Characters

Billy (Me)

Sex: M
Age: 15
Grade: 10
Hair: Darkish Brown
Height: 5'4
Body: Fit ; Six-Pack
Eyes: Brown

Dylan

Sex: M
Age: 16
Grade: 10
Hair: Brown
Height: 5'5
Body: Strong/Average ; Six-Pack
Eyes: Hazel/changing

Thomas

Sex: M
Age: 14
Grade: 9
Hair: Light Brown/Dirty Blondish
Height: 5'5
Body: Average ; Slight Six-Pack
Eyes: Brown

Connor

Sex: M
Age: 15
Grade: 10
Hair: Brown
Height: 5'5
Body: Strong/Average ; Six-Pack
Eyes: Brown/Hazel

"ahh, I totally forgot to do the homework in Mr. Benson's class."

"how? it was so easy!" Dylan said as he shoved Billy lightly. Billy was trying to find his English workbook. Dylan and Thomas were trading snacks from the lunches their parents had made.

"Hey Thomas let me have a bite of that!" Billy asked, while eyeballing Thomas' Nutella sandwich.

"Ok, but only one bite you know thats my Favorite!"

"mmm! thats tasty, thank you! Oh yeah guys, My dad wants to go on a camping trip up in Zion, and im aloud to bring three friends! If you want to come you can." Billy said excitedly.

"Yeah sure, ill text my mom right now, but who else are you going to take?" Thomas, also brought out his phone and called his dad.

"umm I wasn't quite sure who else.."

"Can Connor come?!" Dylan said with a grin on his face.

"Sure, Connor can come. You guys have quite the bromance!" Billy and Thomas started to giggle.

Thomas, Dylan, and Billy were pretty close friends, you could even say best friends. They do everything together; Go to the gym, parties, concerts, anything they could do they did it together. The only thing was they've never stayed over at each others house before, so this camping trip was something a little new. Dylan started hanging out with Connor about a week or two ago, and they have been spending a lot of time together also. The lunch bell rang and the boys got up and got their bags.

"well hey just texting me or something after school telling me if you guys can go!"

"Yeah will do! Connor is in my next class, so I'll ask him if he wants to come then." Dylan explained as he walked away. Thomas gave Billy a hand shake and walked to his class. Dylan walked into his 6th period and saw Connor, he signaled him to come over.

"Hey babe, whats up?" Connor said with a smile on his face.

"Oh well Me Thomas and Billy are going on a camping trip with Billy's dad, and we wanted to know if you could come. It will be a lot of fun!"

"Oh I bet it will! Where are we going so i can tell my mom?"

"We are going to Zion for the weekend, we leave after school tomorrow, and will be back sunday afternoon, maybe night."

"sounds good, I'll ask my mom when I get home." The teacher came in the room and told the students to sit down. Nothing of significance happened till later that day.

Billy was in the kitchen when he heard skype ringing on his laptop. He walked over and saw it was a conference call with Thomas and Dylan. Billy answered it right away.

"hey guys did you ask?"

"Yeah my mom said I can she just wants to talk to your dad and make sure everything is all good!"

"Same here, My dad said it was all good." On Dylan's computer screen it poped up that Connor had just got on skype.

"Hey I'm going to add Connor to the call and see if he can go!" It rang for about 20 seconds before Connor picked up. He was shirtless, and his nice butt was wrapped in a baby blue towel. Hair still wet from the shower he just got out of.

"Hey guys, sorry I just got out of the shower."

"Oh, its ok don't worry!" Dylan thought to himself, WOW my boy is looking good!

"Hey can you come with us on the trip?" Billy asked while just realizing that Connor was shirtless, his eyes widened.

"yeah I can, I guess my mom works with your dad. She called him and I'm set!"

"Ok cool! This weekend should be a lot of fun, I can't wait, well guys I'm getting off I need to do my homework." Billy said with ease. Thomas thought, Yeah it will!

"Yeah same, I have to go!" Billy and Thomas both logged off.

"Aww, baby you look so good in just a towel!" Dylan almost scram.

"haha thank you! and maybe this weekend will be a little more fun then Billy thinks."

"Yeah maybe! well I also have to do my homework, I love you!"

"Love you too. I'll see you tomorrow!"

TO BE CONTINUED!

Well I hope you guys liked the first chapter! please leave some constructive criticism, and tell me if I should continue. I love you guys, bye for now!

Dylan xX · 10-04-2011, 07:42 PM

Nice Billy

Okay just a couple things: Spelling, capitalization, and grammatical stuff.

That's it. The storyline is extremely awesome so far, and I love it, and you ;3.

(Dylan and Connor fixes:

Dylan (change these): Grade 10, 5'5, eyes: Hazel/Changing

Connor: 5'5

GOOOO BILLY! ;D

gotdared · 10-04-2011, 07:59 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Dylan xX

Nice Billy

Okay just a couple things: Spelling, capitalization, and grammatical stuff.

That's it. The storyline is extremely awesome so far, and I love it, and you ;3.

GOOOO BILLY! ;D

All the above. Can't wait for more! (:

Kewai · 10-05-2011, 10:32 AM

Great start! I can't wait to read more

Saphir · 10-17-2011, 04:38 PM

Hey I like it so far, I'd look forward to read another chapter.

Sounds like it's going to be fun.

Love
Saphir

Ps: A program for spelling/grammar (I guess you use one?) does not solve every problem tho... ^^ You should have someone edit your text.

Quote:

and im aloud to bring three friends!

Quote:

"Aww, baby you look so good in just a towel!" Dylan almost scram.

Quote:

and maybe this weekend will be a little more fun then Billy thinks."

Just quoted the ones I found now, there might be more, idk... However, nobody expects perfection, but it would erase a lot of mistakes if you have someone edit the chapters before you publish them.

Love again <3 :3

daremaster 1 · 10-17-2011, 06:09 PM

This is a great start, keep it up dude!

10-04-2011, 07:25 PM	#1
blanket cape Junior Member Join Date: May 2011 Location: US Posts: 17	We're Closer Than You Think Hey Guess its Billy! and here is my first story. I've been reading stories on gd for about a year now, and i think its time to right one of my own. Hopefully you guys like, I will be updating as frequently as possible.Sorry in advanced for any grammar or spelling mistakes. We're Closer Than You think Main Characters Billy (Me) Sex: M Age: 15 Grade: 10 Hair: Darkish Brown Height: 5'4 Body: Fit ; Six-Pack Eyes: Brown Dylan Sex: M Age: 16 Grade: 10 Hair: Brown Height: 5'5 Body: Strong/Average ; Six-Pack Eyes: Hazel/changing Thomas Sex: M Age: 14 Grade: 9 Hair: Light Brown/Dirty Blondish Height: 5'5 Body: Average ; Slight Six-Pack Eyes: Brown Connor Sex: M Age: 15 Grade: 10 Hair: Brown Height: 5'5 Body: Strong/Average ; Six-Pack Eyes: Brown/Hazel "ahh, I totally forgot to do the homework in Mr. Benson's class." "how? it was so easy!" Dylan said as he shoved Billy lightly. Billy was trying to find his English workbook. Dylan and Thomas were trading snacks from the lunches their parents had made. "Hey Thomas let me have a bite of that!" Billy asked, while eyeballing Thomas' Nutella sandwich. "Ok, but only one bite you know thats my Favorite!" "mmm! thats tasty, thank you! Oh yeah guys, My dad wants to go on a camping trip up in Zion, and im aloud to bring three friends! If you want to come you can." Billy said excitedly. "Yeah sure, ill text my mom right now, but who else are you going to take?" Thomas, also brought out his phone and called his dad. "umm I wasn't quite sure who else.." "Can Connor come?!" Dylan said with a grin on his face. "Sure, Connor can come. You guys have quite the bromance!" Billy and Thomas started to giggle. Thomas, Dylan, and Billy were pretty close friends, you could even say best friends. They do everything together; Go to the gym, parties, concerts, anything they could do they did it together. The only thing was they've never stayed over at each others house before, so this camping trip was something a little new. Dylan started hanging out with Connor about a week or two ago, and they have been spending a lot of time together also. The lunch bell rang and the boys got up and got their bags. "well hey just texting me or something after school telling me if you guys can go!" "Yeah will do! Connor is in my next class, so I'll ask him if he wants to come then." Dylan explained as he walked away. Thomas gave Billy a hand shake and walked to his class. Dylan walked into his 6th period and saw Connor, he signaled him to come over. "Hey babe, whats up?" Connor said with a smile on his face. "Oh well Me Thomas and Billy are going on a camping trip with Billy's dad, and we wanted to know if you could come. It will be a lot of fun!" "Oh I bet it will! Where are we going so i can tell my mom?" "We are going to Zion for the weekend, we leave after school tomorrow, and will be back sunday afternoon, maybe night." "sounds good, I'll ask my mom when I get home." The teacher came in the room and told the students to sit down. Nothing of significance happened till later that day. Billy was in the kitchen when he heard skype ringing on his laptop. He walked over and saw it was a conference call with Thomas and Dylan. Billy answered it right away. "hey guys did you ask?" "Yeah my mom said I can she just wants to talk to your dad and make sure everything is all good!" "Same here, My dad said it was all good." On Dylan's computer screen it poped up that Connor had just got on skype. "Hey I'm going to add Connor to the call and see if he can go!" It rang for about 20 seconds before Connor picked up. He was shirtless, and his nice butt was wrapped in a baby blue towel. Hair still wet from the shower he just got out of. "Hey guys, sorry I just got out of the shower." "Oh, its ok don't worry!" Dylan thought to himself, WOW my boy is looking good! "Hey can you come with us on the trip?" Billy asked while just realizing that Connor was shirtless, his eyes widened. "yeah I can, I guess my mom works with your dad. She called him and I'm set!" "Ok cool! This weekend should be a lot of fun, I can't wait, well guys I'm getting off I need to do my homework." Billy said with ease. Thomas thought, Yeah it will! "Yeah same, I have to go!" Billy and Thomas both logged off. "Aww, baby you look so good in just a towel!" Dylan almost scram. "haha thank you! and maybe this weekend will be a little more fun then Billy thinks." "Yeah maybe! well I also have to do my homework, I love you!" "Love you too. I'll see you tomorrow!" TO BE CONTINUED! Well I hope you guys liked the first chapter! please leave some constructive criticism, and tell me if I should continue. I love you guys, bye for now! __________________ Dylan, I love you. Last edited by blanket cape; 10-09-2011 at 12:31 AM.

10-04-2011, 07:42 PM	#2
Dylan xX Distinguished Member Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: U.S.A Posts: 934 Blog Entries: 7	Nice Billy Okay just a couple things: Spelling, capitalization, and grammatical stuff. That's it. The storyline is extremely awesome so far, and I love it, and you ;3. (Dylan and Connor fixes: Dylan (change these): Grade 10, 5'5, eyes: Hazel/Changing Connor: 5'5 GOOOO BILLY! ;D __________________ Gone Last edited by Dylan xX; 10-04-2011 at 07:45 PM.

10-05-2011, 10:32 AM	#4
Kewai getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Oct 2010 Posts: 372 Blog Entries: 8	Great start! I can't wait to read more __________________ 18/M/Bi/New Zealand

10-17-2011, 06:09 PM	#6
daremaster 1 getDare God Join Date: Apr 2011 Location: <3 Posts: 3,032	This is a great start, keep it up dude!