Jack tale. My attempt at a story, I hope you like it.

[Kerrigan]

This is my first attempt at a story, Naturally, as its the beginning, nothing much happens, but I think the rest is set up nicely. Please feel free to leave comments and constructive criticism, and perhaps sugestions for the story, I look forward to writing chapter two.

Chapter 1:
Kai and his gang

Jack is a usual kind of guy, nothing really special about him, apart from his rather boyish look, he is 15, brown hair not too long, a bit of a fringe though it jut drops short of his eyes, he has a handsome face which would stand out from his rather bland looking classmates. He has a moderately good build, slim and slightly athletic, and wears his school uniform which was a dull shade of green, which on a dark day could look black, he had a blazer and trousers in this colour, and a white shirt, with the same green tie, he wore it in a baggy and slightly scruffy way, with his shirt never tucked in and a bag thrown lazily over his right shoulder.

It was a rather sunny day, Which was for the best considering jack had P.E today, so shortly after he finished his toast, he was well on the way to his school, St Jeophries Secondary School.
On the way he noticed some of the, what would be called 'cool' kids walking behind him, paying rather more notice to him then usual, He recognised them, The one on the middle was Kai, he was quite wealthy, his father was a doctor and his mother a rather good lawyer, He was a strange one though, he never seems to acknowledge anyone as friends, yet he had a small gang he never seemed to fond of, Kai was a rather handsome looking 16 year old, He had the same uniform and scruffy look as jack buy had pulled it off with more style, his hair was slightly longer then jacks, but has wax in it, and it stood up in a stylishly spiky manor to the left. The two next to him where rather unremarkable, slightly overweight, muscular and brainless, and it showed in their faces.

The school day was as any other, it seemed very dull, seemed like the few hours he was at school where like days, Drifting off in lessons, and P.E with Mr Dawsons, an ex army drill master, was as usual, an unnecessarily hard workout. At 3pm, came the welcome sound of the bell the signalled the end of the day. And jack, gathered his things, and began to make his way home, he expected this evening to be as any other, go on Facebook, pointless profile updates, someone he doesn't care about any more is going out with someone he doesn't know, and someone got drunk at a sleepover. It was always the same routine. He was passing the old warehouses, the only detail he picked up, which he saw the same morning was that one of the warehouses was no longer to let, someone must have rented the old place out.

Just as Jack was expecting the old routine a very large pain seared in the back of his head, he was thrown over and landed on all fours clutching the back of his head, which was now hurting immensely, everything seemed slightly blurred. He heard the familiar voice of Kai saying rather coolly 'Jeff, you where meant to knock him out with the first swing.' a lumbering a rather stupid voice replied 'Um.. Sowy Kai.' Before Jack knew what was going on, two large figures had grabbed him and put a bag over his head, barely conscious and unable to shout or yell, he was overpowered and dragged helplessly by the two figures, the last thing he saw before the bag went over his head, was Kai standing, rather coolly, smirking at him with his arms folded.

To Be Continued.