Fiction: an obedient slave boy

bitchboy247 · 01-01-2013, 07:54 PM

Hi guy, this is my first attempt at a story so i would love feedback from you guys about how you think it is, thanks

Chapter 1

Matt stared at the clock, 5 minutes until he finished work and was able to go home to his beautiful mistress.As soon as it was time to head home he rushed to his car and sped home ,anxiously awaiting what his mistress had planned for him.He got home fast and made his way to the front door.He made his way to the front door quickly and rang the doorbell.The door opened and he saw his mistress,he could feel his cock getting hard staight away as soon as he saw her, she was tall with long red hair and she had massive boobs,that were nearly exploding out of the black latex dress she was wearing and her knee lenght high heel boots only made his cock harder, Sarah was her name and he worshipped the ground she walked on.He had hoped that she might have been a bit happy to see him but he was wrong."Your late slut"she said as she grabbed a handful of his hair and pulled him inside."Clothes,take them off"she said in a loud angry voice,he did as he was told and stripped down to his underwear, "lose the underwear aswell you stupid slut"!!He did as he was told,not wanting to anger him further."Haha , god every time i see your pathetic dick i cant help but laugh" she laughed ,"do you think that tiny thing would satisfy a woman like me,or any other woman for that matter?Hah its pathetic just like you slave now get on your knees and hands and lck my boots like the dog you are!!He obey his mistress and got down and began to lick her boots clean."I've got a very special night planned for us tonight slave.Matt didnt know wether to be excited or scared of what his mistress had in mind for the evening.....

OwnMe8 · 01-01-2013, 08:43 PM

Hey, it's a good start. Just don't rush it. Take your time and really work through what you want to say until it flows. And proofread! :P I look forward to the next chapter.

imaslaveboy · 01-20-2013, 03:27 PM

Like where this is going...

Dareholic · 01-20-2013, 03:29 PM

Nice start to the story.

01-01-2013, 07:54 PM	#1
bitchboy247 getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Aug 2012 Posts: 317	an obedient slave boy Hi guy, this is my first attempt at a story so i would love feedback from you guys about how you think it is, thanks Chapter 1 Matt stared at the clock, 5 minutes until he finished work and was able to go home to his beautiful mistress.As soon as it was time to head home he rushed to his car and sped home ,anxiously awaiting what his mistress had planned for him.He got home fast and made his way to the front door.He made his way to the front door quickly and rang the doorbell.The door opened and he saw his mistress,he could feel his cock getting hard staight away as soon as he saw her, she was tall with long red hair and she had massive boobs,that were nearly exploding out of the black latex dress she was wearing and her knee lenght high heel boots only made his cock harder, Sarah was her name and he worshipped the ground she walked on.He had hoped that she might have been a bit happy to see him but he was wrong."Your late slut"she said as she grabbed a handful of his hair and pulled him inside."Clothes,take them off"she said in a loud angry voice,he did as he was told and stripped down to his underwear, "lose the underwear aswell you stupid slut"!!He did as he was told,not wanting to anger him further."Haha , god every time i see your pathetic dick i cant help but laugh" she laughed ,"do you think that tiny thing would satisfy a woman like me,or any other woman for that matter?Hah its pathetic just like you slave now get on your knees and hands and lck my boots like the dog you are!!He obey his mistress and got down and began to lick her boots clean."I've got a very special night planned for us tonight slave.Matt didnt know wether to be excited or scared of what his mistress had in mind for the evening..... __________________ Likes:being verbally abused,extreme bondage,being cuckold,forced bi,forced orgasam,being gagged,light cbt,nipple torture,edging,selfbondage,cei,anal Limits permanent,pictures ,videos,public,family

01-01-2013, 08:43 PM	#2
OwnMe8 Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2011 Location: US - Cali Posts: 225	Hey, it's a good start. Just don't rush it. Take your time and really work through what you want to say until it flows. And proofread! :P I look forward to the next chapter. __________________ 22/m/gay *looking for a man to be my keyholder* Stories: College Roommates (unfinished) Aquarius (unfinished) While He's Away (unfinished) A New Friend Likes: edging, being controlled, cbt, denial, serving, watersports, anal, underwear Toys: acryllic ball press. Ace plug. Dildo. Cb6000

01-20-2013, 03:27 PM	#3
imaslaveboy Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2012 Location: Northern Ireland Posts: 163	Like where this is going... __________________ Likes: CBT, Pee, Shaving, Messy, Underwear and Lycra, Condoms, Hidden Public/Risk, Dice Dares. Limits: Full Public, friends, family, anal, pet play etc. Some toys i have - Ball Stretchers, Cock Rings, Condoms, Icyhot, Toothpaste, Candles Amazon Wishlist - https://www.amazon.co.uk/hz/wishlist...?ref_=wl_share 27/M Kik: imaslaveboy

01-20-2013, 03:29 PM	#4
Dareholic getDare Addict Join Date: Jun 2012 Location: 3rd Rock from Sun Posts: 2,329 Blog Entries: 37	Nice start to the story. __________________ Brian (布莱恩) - Bi-Male (双男性) - Edge Master (边缘大师) RETIRED: THANKS getDare, I HAD FUN. OH, JUST REMEMBER: "Life is not fun, unless you are having fun." - Dareholic "Adam was but human - this explains it all. He did not want the apple for the apple's sake, he wanted it only because it was forbidden. The mistake was not forbidding the serpent; then he would have eaten the serpent." - Mark Twain Yamask