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i really injoy your writing!!
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Again, thank you for all the comments on this story. This genuinely was my first attempt at writing a story, and when I started I didn't know how the story would progress - I literally "made it up as I went along".
Your feedback has been fantastic, and that is what kept the story going ! |
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i love your wrighting!!!
One little sujestion... can you make a new charakter named... Rene' ? (my freinds name is this!) Can she be Eds,.... girl freind??
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I do have to point something out ShinyDemon...
You said a while back that you have given no clue as to where the characters live, or even what country.. Yet if you read the first part, Steve is given £50 to get food... which pretty much, or even completely locates it to UK. To avoid isolation to a specific country, you could have said: ... was given a reasonable amount of money for food... That avoids the characters being isolated to UK.. Other than that, Brilliant story!! |
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When I wrote the first couple of chapters, which was a couple of years ago now, writing fiction was new to me. At the time, I had not even thought about a totally generic story, and this only came to me a short time afterwards. Looking back through the story, I had not noticed this before and if I could change it now I would have put something similar to what you had suggested. Thanks again for your comments which are, as always, appreciated.
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Well, I did post that quite late... and yes, it could have been other currencies aswell.
I don't mean to keep on about this suject.. but when the "£" symbol is used, 80% of the time, it refers to GBP.. |
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Thanks, what an amazing story!
You really did please everyone with that story! |
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Great story,
glad to see a continuation |
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Great story!
I think you went just a little bit too far sometimes though. |
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I'll admit now i read the sequel first but ur writing was simply amazing Enoch that I could read the sequel then the prequel
I am an older member but not as adventurous as most here and this story really cemented my love of getdare Thx shiny
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dude, your freakin nasty...i mean, this would be a great story if there wasnt all that gay crap...no offense but its kinda obvious that u r like 45 years old with no life at all, sittin around writin bout little girls fuckin their brothers and dudes suckin eachothers dicks...i mean come on man, write about a chick in college or a hot waitress, not a 12 year old who fucks her bro and a 16 year old cum guzzler...this is complete bull shit. This is too far-fetched of a story
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This story is among the best on this site, and you're seemingly the only one who thinks otherwise. If you want a crude, cheap story; look somewhere else. Nevertheless, it is your opinion - which you are entitled to. However, don't feel like you have the right to insult someone much more talented than yourself. Last edited by hello_moto; 01-24-2011 at 08:51 AM. |
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If you don't like something then don't read it. |
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