G.s.p. [fiction]

abbydancer626 · 03-27-2007, 12:40 PM

G.S.P.
girls
sleepover
party

Invent List

Jessica
Abby
Lauren
Heather
Brittney
Jackie

I (abby) was out side jessica's house door ready for this party
so i went in all us went in her bonus room and she locked the doors. creepy huh? so jess is like we will pick the slumber slave out of this hat she picked a name ..............It is.................

part 2 coming soon........................

Soraslight · 03-27-2007, 02:14 PM

Too short, may have potential though. Just have to wait and see.

Manbearpig · 03-27-2007, 04:03 PM

i actually like the shorter post 1st part of a story. It is normally an intro to the story and really doesn't need to get indepth, yet....

Musty 21 · 03-27-2007, 04:12 PM

it can go somewhere, except it was short. please use a diffrent color too. Good story so far.

Glutgod · 03-27-2007, 07:52 PM

Yea good story but a bit short.

TrekBoy008 · 03-28-2007, 02:29 PM

Although I am not a fan of "girl-on-girl" stories and will probably not read the next installment to this (nothing personal, just not my thing), I would suggest that you use a darker colored font so that it will be easier for others to read.

Powerstrip · 03-29-2007, 08:51 AM

Yeah, I had to highlight the text to read it.

Otherwise:

Keep it up

depp=noob=lol · 03-29-2007, 09:44 AM

i hope that there will be a new part soon so that we can judge a bit.!

Smile Guy · 03-29-2007, 12:17 PM

I've changed the colour to red, to make it more legible. Looking forward to the rest of the story!

depp=noob=lol · 03-29-2007, 12:18 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Smile Guy

I've changed the colour to red, to make it more legible.

and that is why i think that you re such a great mod.

Musty 21 · 03-29-2007, 05:34 PM

I havn't really seen smile guy post anything that is related to the site except mod stuff. I miss his wonderful posts.

Anyway

is this person even active anymore?

and thank you for changing it to red

Now its easier to read!

Manbearpig · 03-29-2007, 05:36 PM

i see her on all the time. i hope we get a story soon, if u have time

Musty 21 · 03-29-2007, 05:47 PM

maybe someone should pm her......

03-27-2007, 12:40 PM	#1
abbydancer626 Junior Member Join Date: Mar 2007 Posts: 8	G.s.p. [fiction] G.S.P. girls sleepover party Invent List Jessica Abby Lauren Heather Brittney Jackie I (abby) was out side jessica's house door ready for this party so i went in all us went in her bonus room and she locked the doors. creepy huh? so jess is like we will pick the slumber slave out of this hat she picked a name ..............It is................. part 2 coming soon........................

03-27-2007, 02:14 PM	#2
Soraslight Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2006 Posts: 161	Too short, may have potential though. Just have to wait and see. __________________ 15/m No Painful, Anal, Crossdressing, GAY or messy dares. I Enjoy Sexual + Public Dares, Especially Webcam Dares.

03-27-2007, 04:03 PM	#3
Manbearpig getDare Expert Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: The internet Posts: 3,085 Blog Entries: 211	i actually like the shorter post 1st part of a story. It is normally an intro to the story and really doesn't need to get indepth, yet.... __________________ fromo: ‹@Manbearpig› >.> quite being an arse Likes: Crossdressing/Humiliation Dares/Spanking/Whipping Will not do: Anal, Messy, Public Kik:Mbpgetdare

03-27-2007, 04:12 PM	#4
Musty 21 getDare Devil Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: Virgina Posts: 1,023 Blog Entries: 2	it can go somewhere, except it was short. please use a diffrent color too. Good story so far. __________________ Sunday, Septermber 07, 2008 at 7:55p.m. Musty21 achieved 1,000 posts. Click here to see it!

03-27-2007, 07:52 PM	#5
Glutgod getDare Devil Join Date: May 2006 Location: In your pants Posts: 1,403	Yea good story but a bit short. __________________ For us, the storm has passed. The war is over. And let us never forget those who journeyed into the howling dark, and did not return. For their decision required courage beyond measure. Sacrifice, an unshakeable conviction that their fight... our fight... was elsewhere. As we start to rebuild, this hillside will remain barren, a memorial to heroes fallen. They enobled all of us, and they shall not be forgotten

03-28-2007, 02:29 PM	#6
TrekBoy008 getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Greater Boston Area Posts: 310	Although I am not a fan of "girl-on-girl" stories and will probably not read the next installment to this (nothing personal, just not my thing), I would suggest that you use a darker colored font so that it will be easier for others to read. __________________ "Words are, in my not so humble opinion, our most inexhaustible source of magic, capable of both inflicting injury and remedying it." ~ Albus Dumbledore (Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows)

03-29-2007, 08:51 AM	#7
Powerstrip Distinguished Member Join Date: Jan 2007 Posts: 716 Blog Entries: 1	Yeah, I had to highlight the text to read it. Otherwise: Keep it up __________________ I am looking for a mistress. Please PM me if interested

03-29-2007, 09:44 AM	#8
depp=noob=lol Account Banned Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Europe Posts: 594 Blog Entries: 4	i hope that there will be a new part soon so that we can judge a bit.!

03-29-2007, 12:17 PM	#9
Smile Guy getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 440	I've changed the colour to red, to make it more legible. Looking forward to the rest of the story!

03-29-2007, 05:34 PM	#11
Musty 21 getDare Devil Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: Virgina Posts: 1,023 Blog Entries: 2	I havn't really seen smile guy post anything that is related to the site except mod stuff. I miss his wonderful posts. Anyway is this person even active anymore? and thank you for changing it to red Now its easier to read! __________________ Sunday, Septermber 07, 2008 at 7:55p.m. Musty21 achieved 1,000 posts. Click here to see it!

03-29-2007, 05:36 PM	#12
Manbearpig getDare Expert Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: The internet Posts: 3,085 Blog Entries: 211	i see her on all the time. i hope we get a story soon, if u have time __________________ fromo: ‹@Manbearpig› >.> quite being an arse Likes: Crossdressing/Humiliation Dares/Spanking/Whipping Will not do: Anal, Messy, Public Kik:Mbpgetdare

03-29-2007, 05:47 PM	#13
Musty 21 getDare Devil Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: Virgina Posts: 1,023 Blog Entries: 2	maybe someone should pm her...... __________________ Sunday, Septermber 07, 2008 at 7:55p.m. Musty21 achieved 1,000 posts. Click here to see it!