Non-Fiction: Fun Night with My Best Friend

zaza · 07-29-2009, 12:10 PM

One night my best friend was coming over for a sleep over. Every time he comes over we talk these girls into playing truth or dare just so we can get some pictures of girl’s boobs or videos of them fingering themselves. The only catch is that when we do this together girls make us do things to each other to get the pictures or videos. So here is what happened:

Charlie walked into my house around five pm and said "Hey ready to get some videos tonight?" I responded with a "hell yea boy"

The night started off slow we were having trouble finding girls who would play but later in the night we started to get going. My first dare was to kiss my friend so I did it and being straight I did not like it much. The girl sent us a picture of her boobs for me kissing him next the girl wanted pictures of both me and my friend’s cocks I got hard easily off the excitement of the moment and my friend needed a little encouragement via porn hub but even that do the trick he just sent a picture of his flaccid penis.

The Girl was impressed my cock and replied with a DAMN when she received it. She said nothing when she got my friends picture. Up set my friend wanted a video of the girl fingering herself. he told her many times that was her next dare but she then told us that unless we liked blood it was not a good time to be seeing her do that.

We ended up giving up hope about her. We moved on to a nice girl on webcam. This girl was very funny and more like a master than a Truth or Dare Player. The only thing she would pick is truth and me and my friend picked dare most of the time. Our first dare was that we had to go shirtless the rest of the night.

We both complied with her request and took off our shirts. Then she demanded that we always be on cam together sitting as close as possible together. Her next request was something neither of us wanted to do especially the way we were forced to sit by each other. We had to take off our pants and stick our dicks through our fly in our underwear.

Although we were uncomfortable we did the Dare and my friend hand rested on my inner thigh. Her next request was worse than before but it was okay with me because I am very comfortable in my sexuality. She dared us to make out for 2 minutes with tongue. My friend very hesitantly leaned in for the kiss but once he started he became very comfortable and began to kiss me passionately. He was the best kisser I have ever had.

After we had finished she was very impressed and rewarded us by stripping down on cam. Then we choose truth instead of dare because we needed a break. She asked my friend whether he had enjoyed that kiss we gave each other.

He looked at me and then paused...

More to the story tell me if u liked it I will post the rest

LordCaspen · 07-29-2009, 07:36 PM

Hell, yes, you should continue!

I liked what I read. There are some minor problems with spelling and your pacing could use some improvement, but it's a fun story and fairly well told. Please go on!

Dicedarefan666 · 07-29-2009, 08:11 PM

I sort of doubt that... but even if it is actually non-fiction the paragraphing has serious issues, as does the grammar and spelling. The pace also seems out of place. Add in some dialogue if you want to slow it down. Also, add in more adjectives... we know almost nothing about the characters.

Komodo would probably do a far better job than I of giving you writing advice, but those are just some quick tips.

zaza · 07-29-2009, 09:46 PM

this is non fiction i swear it happened just last night

Nick · 07-29-2009, 09:51 PM

go ahead and the post the next part then!

zaza · 07-29-2009, 10:29 PM

He looked at me and then paused. He slowly gave way to a smile revealing his amazing white teeth and said, “I loved it I think I am changed a little because of it”. I gave a deep sigh of relief and happiness. The she asked me the same question. Without hesitation, I exclaimed, “Yes the best kiss I had ever had in my life”. My friend friend’s face became red with embarrassment. He thanked me and chuckled.

After a few minutes, we had both winded down from the kiss. The Girl, who by the way had 36 C’s and an amazing Body, asked my friend and me once again “Truth or dare? Boys”. My friend and I looked at each other unsure what to pick. I finally decide to speak up for the both of us “Dare” I said in a nervous voice. I mean what else could she possibly do that was worse than him and I kissing.

She paused before answering my dare request and looked at My Friend to make sure he was okay with my choice. After my friend told, her he was okay with the idea of a dare she began to think long and hard she asked us to go upstairs and bring down any sauces like chocolate sauce or whipped cream we had. Because my friend was at my house, I went up stairs to get the stuff she requested.

After a few minutes, I returned with a bottle of chocolate sauce, a bottle of whipped cream, and basic condiments like ketchup and mustard. Next, she told me to put whipped cream on his rock hard six-pack. My friend then laid on the couch we were on I sprayed a tower of whipped cream on his six-pack and waited for the next instruction. Her next instruction was for me to put chocolate sauce on the whipped cream and outline his abs in the chocolate sauce.

After I did as I was told she instructed me to clean him off using only my tongue and mouth. I looked at Charlie and then began eating the sundae I had made on his abs. The sundae tasted amazing and it took me a good ten minutes to clean off his abs. when I was done cleaning him off he was somewhat uncomfortable because he said he felt sticky.

I understood that he was uncomfortable but the game had to go on.

More to the story tell me if u liked it, I will post the rest

Also My friend and i are meeting up to do this again soon if a female master would like to dominte us pm me

maxim · 07-29-2009, 10:59 PM

I dint know if I belive thus is non-fiction!
But it's still a good story..
Has potential I would say

Dicedarefan666 · 07-29-2009, 11:36 PM

Okay, I agree with X's sentiment if not with his spelling... but... it is better than yours. Please please proof read, these are meant to be actual stories and if I turned this in to any of my LA teachers they would fail me (As well as send me to the principal's office for innapropriate story content, but you don't have to worry about that here. Running the story through word may help, but won't solve the problem completely because of things like repeating words like friend friend's so unless there's a 3rd person there, it was a typo, but one word may not catch.

Having said this, the second installment was much better than the first. You were mainly missing commas and had that word repitition I pointed out. Or at least that's all I saw in the first read-through.

jono mckenzie · 07-30-2009, 11:04 AM

brilliant, love it, please carry on.

daremaster809 · 07-30-2009, 11:48 AM

Keep typing this story!!!!! Its awsome!!!!!!

peaceloverocknroll · 07-30-2009, 11:59 AM

great story, is it honestly real? i cnt tell whether to believe you or not. i would be interestend in a session with you and your friend unfortunaely i dont own webcam and wont do photos, however feel free to pm me if you want some dares

zaza · 07-30-2009, 06:08 PM

This story is entirely true it happened just to nights ago and there is just alittle more to come

Dicedarefan666 · 07-30-2009, 06:31 PM

Well... if it is true, then I hope you guys had fun, and good luck in looking for a domme

although, it's worth noting that being a sub isn't about wanting to see a vid of the mistress fingering herself... so if you're looking for that here I'm not sure how much success you'll have.

milkdat · 07-30-2009, 08:44 PM

Honestly I feel your story is great and your typos/bad grammar should be ignored. Your story is quite readable though, not always correct grammatically. On the note of turning this in to an english teacher, this is a website for people of all ages and writing ability don't waste your time critiquing stories for their "correctness" and just enjoy them.

ctvette2003 · 07-31-2009, 08:42 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Dicedarefan666

Okay, I agree with X's sentiment if not with his spelling... but... it is better than yours. Please please proof read, these are meant to be actual stories and if I turned this in to any of my LA teachers they would fail me (As well as send me to the principal's office for innapropriate story content, but you don't have to worry about that here. Running the story through word may help, but won't solve the problem completely because of things like repeating words like friend friend's so unless there's a 3rd person there, it was a typo, but one word may not catch.

Having said this, the second installment was much better than the first. You were mainly missing commas and had that word repitition I pointed out. Or at least that's all I saw in the first read-through.

FYI - not everyone is a great speller myself included. If your looking for perfect grammar and spelling maybe you should go to a site with professional writers.

07-29-2009, 12:10 PM	#1
zaza Account Banned Join Date: Jun 2009 Posts: 26	Fun Night with My Best Friend One night my best friend was coming over for a sleep over. Every time he comes over we talk these girls into playing truth or dare just so we can get some pictures of girl’s boobs or videos of them fingering themselves. The only catch is that when we do this together girls make us do things to each other to get the pictures or videos. So here is what happened: Charlie walked into my house around five pm and said "Hey ready to get some videos tonight?" I responded with a "hell yea boy" The night started off slow we were having trouble finding girls who would play but later in the night we started to get going. My first dare was to kiss my friend so I did it and being straight I did not like it much. The girl sent us a picture of her boobs for me kissing him next the girl wanted pictures of both me and my friend’s cocks I got hard easily off the excitement of the moment and my friend needed a little encouragement via porn hub but even that do the trick he just sent a picture of his flaccid penis. The Girl was impressed my cock and replied with a DAMN when she received it. She said nothing when she got my friends picture. Up set my friend wanted a video of the girl fingering herself. he told her many times that was her next dare but she then told us that unless we liked blood it was not a good time to be seeing her do that. We ended up giving up hope about her. We moved on to a nice girl on webcam. This girl was very funny and more like a master than a Truth or Dare Player. The only thing she would pick is truth and me and my friend picked dare most of the time. Our first dare was that we had to go shirtless the rest of the night. We both complied with her request and took off our shirts. Then she demanded that we always be on cam together sitting as close as possible together. Her next request was something neither of us wanted to do especially the way we were forced to sit by each other. We had to take off our pants and stick our dicks through our fly in our underwear. Although we were uncomfortable we did the Dare and my friend hand rested on my inner thigh. Her next request was worse than before but it was okay with me because I am very comfortable in my sexuality. She dared us to make out for 2 minutes with tongue. My friend very hesitantly leaned in for the kiss but once he started he became very comfortable and began to kiss me passionately. He was the best kisser I have ever had. After we had finished she was very impressed and rewarded us by stripping down on cam. Then we choose truth instead of dare because we needed a break. She asked my friend whether he had enjoyed that kiss we gave each other. He looked at me and then paused... More to the story tell me if u liked it I will post the rest Last edited by zaza; 07-29-2009 at 09:45 PM.

07-29-2009, 07:36 PM	#2
LordCaspen getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Aug 2007 Posts: 261	Answer Hell, yes, you should continue! I liked what I read. There are some minor problems with spelling and your pacing could use some improvement, but it's a fun story and fairly well told. Please go on!

07-29-2009, 08:11 PM	#3
Dicedarefan666 getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Feb 2009 Posts: 403	actually nonfiction? I sort of doubt that... but even if it is actually non-fiction the paragraphing has serious issues, as does the grammar and spelling. The pace also seems out of place. Add in some dialogue if you want to slow it down. Also, add in more adjectives... we know almost nothing about the characters. Komodo would probably do a far better job than I of giving you writing advice, but those are just some quick tips.

07-29-2009, 09:51 PM	#5
Nick Distinguished Member Join Date: Dec 2008 Location: Ohio Posts: 835	go ahead and the post the next part then! __________________ 32/ Male/ US/ Switch Likes: Underwear, Jockstrap, Embarrassing, Webcam or Pics, Naked, Semi-public, slight risk, strip games, dice dares, wedgies, clothing/cum control, anal, light humiliation Dislikes: Piss, Body Writing, messy Limits:Really public, family, friends, scat, gross, pain. *Impossible:* Crossdressing. I own NO girls clothes. kik: nick.undies Skype: nick.undies SnapChat: SnapNickR

07-29-2009, 10:29 PM	#6
zaza Account Banned Join Date: Jun 2009 Posts: 26	Fun With My Best Friend Part 2 He looked at me and then paused. He slowly gave way to a smile revealing his amazing white teeth and said, “I loved it I think I am changed a little because of it”. I gave a deep sigh of relief and happiness. The she asked me the same question. Without hesitation, I exclaimed, “Yes the best kiss I had ever had in my life”. My friend friend’s face became red with embarrassment. He thanked me and chuckled. After a few minutes, we had both winded down from the kiss. The Girl, who by the way had 36 C’s and an amazing Body, asked my friend and me once again “Truth or dare? Boys”. My friend and I looked at each other unsure what to pick. I finally decide to speak up for the both of us “Dare” I said in a nervous voice. I mean what else could she possibly do that was worse than him and I kissing. She paused before answering my dare request and looked at My Friend to make sure he was okay with my choice. After my friend told, her he was okay with the idea of a dare she began to think long and hard she asked us to go upstairs and bring down any sauces like chocolate sauce or whipped cream we had. Because my friend was at my house, I went up stairs to get the stuff she requested. After a few minutes, I returned with a bottle of chocolate sauce, a bottle of whipped cream, and basic condiments like ketchup and mustard. Next, she told me to put whipped cream on his rock hard six-pack. My friend then laid on the couch we were on I sprayed a tower of whipped cream on his six-pack and waited for the next instruction. Her next instruction was for me to put chocolate sauce on the whipped cream and outline his abs in the chocolate sauce. After I did as I was told she instructed me to clean him off using only my tongue and mouth. I looked at Charlie and then began eating the sundae I had made on his abs. The sundae tasted amazing and it took me a good ten minutes to clean off his abs. when I was done cleaning him off he was somewhat uncomfortable because he said he felt sticky. I understood that he was uncomfortable but the game had to go on. More to the story tell me if u liked it, I will post the rest Also My friend and i are meeting up to do this again soon if a female master would like to dominte us pm me

07-29-2009, 09:46 PM	#4
zaza Account Banned Join Date: Jun 2009 Posts: 26	this is non fiction i swear it happened just last night

07-29-2009, 10:59 PM	#7
maxim Account Banned Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: UNITED STATES Posts: 1,121 Blog Entries: 33	I dint know if I belive thus is non-fiction! But it's still a good story.. Has potential I would say __________________ [SIGPIC][/SIGPIC]

07-29-2009, 11:36 PM	#8
Dicedarefan666 getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Feb 2009 Posts: 403	Okay, I agree with X's sentiment if not with his spelling... but... it is better than yours. Please please proof read, these are meant to be actual stories and if I turned this in to any of my LA teachers they would fail me (As well as send me to the principal's office for innapropriate story content, but you don't have to worry about that here. Running the story through word may help, but won't solve the problem completely because of things like repeating words like friend friend's so unless there's a 3rd person there, it was a typo, but one word may not catch. Having said this, the second installment was much better than the first. You were mainly missing commas and had that word repitition I pointed out. Or at least that's all I saw in the first read-through.

07-30-2009, 11:04 AM	#9
jono mckenzie getDare Ladder Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: Suffolk Posts: 122	brilliant, love it, please carry on. __________________ JONOTHAN MCKENZIE - male. seventeen. I love Psyduck! XD

07-30-2009, 11:48 AM	#10
daremaster809 Account Banned Join Date: Sep 2007 Posts: 11	Keep typing this story!!!!! Its awsome!!!!!!

07-30-2009, 11:59 AM	#11
peaceloverocknroll Member Join Date: May 2009 Posts: 57	great story, is it honestly real? i cnt tell whether to believe you or not. i would be interestend in a session with you and your friend unfortunaely i dont own webcam and wont do photos, however feel free to pm me if you want some dares __________________ IWalkInTheRainSoYouCantSeeMyTears ...NoMatterWhatWeGoThrough...WeGoThroughItTogether ...NoMatterHowFarApartWeMayGo...EveryBreathITake.. AndEveryBeatOfMyHeart...ItsJustForYou..AndThatWill NeverChange...BecauseICouldNeverTrulyLeaveYou...just remeber this...remember i love you...and im so truly sorry...i love you... *Check out my dares and stories, including, the reluctant slave(STORY, truth and dare down the park(STORY),Group dare game(DARE),Erotic Time Capusle(DARE)*

07-30-2009, 06:08 PM	#12
zaza Account Banned Join Date: Jun 2009 Posts: 26	This story is entirely true it happened just to nights ago and there is just alittle more to come

07-30-2009, 06:31 PM	#13
Dicedarefan666 getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Feb 2009 Posts: 403	Well... if it is true, then I hope you guys had fun, and good luck in looking for a domme although, it's worth noting that being a sub isn't about wanting to see a vid of the mistress fingering herself... so if you're looking for that here I'm not sure how much success you'll have.

07-30-2009, 08:44 PM	#14
milkdat Member Join Date: May 2008 Posts: 84	Honestly I feel your story is great and your typos/bad grammar should be ignored. Your story is quite readable though, not always correct grammatically. On the note of turning this in to an english teacher, this is a website for people of all ages and writing ability don't waste your time critiquing stories for their "correctness" and just enjoy them.