Tyler's Project

[ThatGuy821]

Hey guys, this is my first story here, definitely could use some feedback, I'm no English major so any tips and ideas are helpful. Anyways I hope you enjoy.

Tyler's Project
Part 1: Introduction

*RIIIIINNNNGGG*
“Ugghhh” Tyler says as he smacks his alarm off. Tyler is 20 years old and living with his parents while attending a local college.
“Good morning honey”, his mom says cheerfully.
“Good morning Mom”, Tyler says while giving her a kiss on the cheek.
“Me and Dad are going to the cabin tonight, we will be back late sunday, you can have people over if you would like but no drinking and don’t be too loud, please try not to upset the neighbors.” she says half joking.
“I’m probably only going to have some people from my class over, we have a group project due on Tuesday so we aren’t going to be doing much anyway.” he says with an eye roll. “Alrighty, i gotta go or i’m going to be late, love you.”
“Love you too, i’ll see you when i get back.”
Tyler makes it to the parking lot and is about to walk towards his class when he spots her, Ashley. Ashley is Tyler’s crush they had met earlier in the semester thanks to her sitting right in front of him and she was stunning. She is 19 years old, brunette, relatively small tits but an amazing ass. They share American History and thanks to his professor they have been put in the same group. He could stare at her all day-
“TYLER!” shouted his professor. Tyler had a habit of zoning out of his class. Next to him sat his best friend Shawn, laughing at him for getting caught spacing out again. “We don’t have all day sir what is the answer?”
“Uhhhh C?”
“So the answer to what President saved us from the Great Depression is C?”
“Yes,” Tyler said confidently.
“IT’S NOT EVEN A MULTIPLE CHOICE QUESTION!” shouted Professor Turnrite
Ashley and Shawn were both struggling to hold in their laughter as Tyler’s face went beet red. “It’s FDR sir….” said Tyler embarrassed.
“Thank you for paying attention, now to the rest of you please try to stay awake for the last few minutes” *RIIIIIINNNNGGGG* “Or maybe not, make sure you work on your projects this weekend, your presentations are due Tuesday, Tyler stay back I would like to talk with you.”
Everyone starts to make their way out, Ashley and Shawn tell Tyler they’ll wait right outside for him. Tyler goes up to the professor, “What’s up?”
“Tyler you're a smart kid but you have been falling behind a lot and if you fail this class you will have to retake it in the spring, you need to do good on this presentation. It's your last chance before the final to get your grades up.”
“It’ll be fine sir,” Tyler says, “My group will be working on it all weekend.”
Professor Turnrite shakes his head, “Why did I think it was a good idea to put you and Shawn in the same group?”
“It will be great sir, don't you worry.”
“I can’t wait to hear it, your group is going first by the way.”
“Glad to hear it.” Tyler says as he makes his way towards the door.
Outside Ashley and Shawn see Tyler approaching, “About time” said Shawn.
“Everything okay?” asked Ashley.
“Everything is fine, we just really need to do good on this project.”
“Don’t worry we have the whole weekend,” said Ashley.
“My house is free this weekend so we can work on it there.”
“Cool, I’ll text the rest of the group, what time should we head over?” asked Shawn.
“Head over around 3:00 we’ll get pizza for dinner,” Tyler says. “I’m gonna go. I have one more class today, I’ll text you guys later.”
“See ya later,” they both say as they make their way to the cars.
Tyler starts walking across campus towards his next class, hoping that time just speeds up so he can just be done for the day already and focus on the history project.

[ThatGuy821]

Part 2: The Start

Tyler’s last class for the day ends and makes his way home. He enters the house and it’s quiet, Tyler realizes that his parents have already left. Tyler texts the group chat “hey guys got the house to myself, wanna come over now so we can start working on the presentation?” Everyone in the group chat acknowledges and says they’ll start making their way over.
There are six people in the group in total, Tyler, Shawn, Ashley, John, Marissa, and Emma. The first two to arrive were Shawn and Ashley, Emma showed up a few minutes after them, John showed up about a minute later, and Marissa showed up about ten minutes after John. Tyler ordered the group pizza as they worked on the presentation.
“I don’t know about you guys but I’m already exhausted from this, do you guys want to take a break?” asked Marissa. Everyone else was exhausted and agreed to take a mental break from the project.
“Do you have any alcohol bro?” asked Shawn.
“Yeah i got some tequila and beers” said Tyler, he and Shawn went and got them.
Everyone started drinking and were just talking shit and having a good time. “You guys want to play a game?” asked Emma. “I’m down, what game?” said Shawn. “Truth or dare?” said Emma, everyone seemed to like the idea and was up to play.
“So truth or dare?” asked Emma to Shawn.
“Truth”
“Who’s your celebrity crush?”
“Easy Margot Robbie” “Truth or dare Ashley” Ashley takes a sip of her drink, “Truth”
“When did you lose your virginity?” asked Shawn.
“Wow not holding back okay, 18 during after prom.” stated Ashley. “What about you?”
Shawn smirked, “I don't have to say anything, it's not my turn.”
“Fine” groaned Ashley. “Marissa truth or dare?”
“Dare” said Marissa confidently.
“I dare you to flash your tits.”
Marissa was taken back to say the least, she would expect that from one of the guys not Ashley. “Really do I have to?”
“A dares a dare” said John which earned him a slap on the back of the head from Marissa.
“Fine asshole” she lifted her shirt and bra for the group to see. Marissa was proud of her chest; she had nothing to be ashamed of in that department. All the guys were more than happy with Ashley’s choice of dare for her. “Happy?”
“Very” said Ashley with a smile.
“Tyler truth or dare?” asked Marissa.
“Truth” said Tyler not wanting to test the waters knowing how amped up she was.
“When and how did you lose your virginity?”

[ThatGuy821]

Gonna start working on this story some more, I have the next part ready but I think I'm gonna post a part once a week. If you have anything you want to see let me know. Or if this gets enough replies and interactions I might try to release two parts a week instead.

[redtiger]

First, you are unusually good at writing dialogue. I recommend you tell as much of the story in that format as possible.

You have a few grammar errors but nothing horrific an most of them make the dialogue sound me genuine.

One suggestion: spaces between paragraphs. Facing a solid wall of unbroken text extending from the top of my monitor to well past the bottom is, to say the least, intimidating.

[ThatGuy821]

I'll definitely focus on dialogue as much as I can, and I like the idea of spaces in between the paragraphs. I appreciate the advice.

[ThatGuy821]

Part 3:

Now Tyler was pretty self conscious of the fact he was still a virgin, while he had a crush on Ashley nothing ever happened between the two of them. The only one who knew about him being a virgin and his crush was his best friend Shawn. They have been friends for years before college and then Ashley joined their group the first year of college. With the way things were going with this game he was hoping that might change.

“I’m still a virgin,” Tyler said.

“There’s no way,” said Marissa.

“Can confirm it’s true,” said Shawn.
The group was mostly surprised but kept it to themselves, it's not like he was a bad looking dude, he worked out and was relatively outgoing. Marissa had the most confused reaction out of all of them, she had a crush on him for years but never had the guts to say anything to him out of fear of losing their friendship. Marissa realized that this game might be her chance to make something happen between the two of them if she played her cards right.

“Truth or dare John,” asked Tyler hoping to get the attention back onto the game.

“Dare,” said John.

“Dare you to make out with Emma for one minute.”

“Easy,” said John, “Is that cool with you?”

“Yeah go for it,” said Emma.

They started making out as the others watched. It started to get steamy as their hands started to roam over each other's bodies. They started really getting into it, John started to get an erection and Emma felt it, hell she was dripping, not that anyone else knew.

“Time,” said Tyler, kinda wishing he said longer than a minute.

“Appreciate that one,” said John.

“Yeah not too bad at all,” said Emma.

“Emma truth or dare?” asked John.

“Truth,” said Emma.

“How wet are you?”

“I’d say pretty wet, I really liked that dare, you're one heck of a kisser.” she said.
John seemed pretty pleased with himself after that answer, even the other girls were hoping that maybe they would get a chance later.

“Truth or dare Ashley?” said Emma.

“After that I feel like I have to choose dare,” Ashley said.

“Okay I dare you to stay in your bra and panties for the rest of the game.”

“Easy enough,” responded Ashley. She stood up and started taking her clothes off, she made sure to give the boys a show as she stripped and bent over to give them a good view of her ass. As she sat back down Tyler could’ve sworn he saw a wet spot on her panties, he looked over at Shawn and Shawn gave him a nod to say that he saw the same thing too.

“Tyler truth or dare?” asked Ashley.

Tyler broke out of the trance that Ashley put him in and responde, “Dare.”
Ashley was hoping that he would choose that and had carefully thought of a dare to break him out of his comfort and keep the game rolling. “ I dare you to strip to your boxers, run around your house then stay like that for the rest of the game.”
Tyler was pretty shocked by that dare, he knew the game was getting up there but to do something where he might get seen he wasn’t too sure about that.

“What if someone sees me come on, is there something else I can do?” pleaded Tyler.

Ashley thought about it for a second then said, “Okay if you don’t want to do that you can strip completely naked and stay that way for the rest of the game.”

“Okay running around the house it is,” Tyler said, not too happy with the choices. He stripped down to his boxers and gave one pleading look to the group. He got motioned to go and Tyler started. Of course with Tyler’s luck the second he opened his door someone was walking their dog in front of his house. He started sprinting around the house to get this dare done as soon as possible. As Tyler was running he could’ve sworn he saw his neighbor through the window but didn’t think anything of it and kept running around. He finally made it back inside slightly out of breath.

“How was it?” asked Ashley.

“Minus the dog walker and possibly my neighbor seeing me I need to start doing more cardio at the gym.” he said slightly panting. That got a nice chuckle from the group. What the group didn’t know was while they were laughing at Tyler, at the house next to them Tyler’s neighbor had seen them and was watching and waiting to see where this game would go.