A Story That Has No Title

penguin13 · 02-11-2008, 10:19 PM

Steve was an average 16 year old who wasnt the smartest kid in school but also wasnt the dumbest. He had blonde hair, blue eyes, and was about 5 foot 9 weighing at 123 lbs.
It was a beautiful saturday in the middle of April and Steve got a text message from Kylie otherwise known as the hottest girl in the tenth grade.
K-wat r u doin
S-nm u
K-bored
S-y
K-my parents r gone for 2 weeks
S-o
K-so u want 2 come over 2night
S-k wat time
K-4

lovethenudes · 02-11-2008, 10:39 PM

i'm not gonna lie, thats a terrible story

penguin13 · 02-11-2008, 10:46 PM

S-k c ya
K-bye
So he looks at the clock and it says 300. Then he runs upstairs and takes a shower. He walks out of the shower and goes into his bedroom and he puts a pair of orange and black boxers with a plain white t-shirt, a pair of jeans, and a multicolored overshirt on. Then he walks over to the clock and it says 345. So he went into the bathroom and starts to brush his teeth. After he was done he left and started to walk over to Kylies. After about 10 minutes he reached her house.

penguin13 · 02-11-2008, 10:49 PM

thx for ur honest opion

penguin13 · 02-12-2008, 08:46 AM

should i keep going

glue · 02-12-2008, 08:53 AM

its warming up try adding alot more next time

Davros · 02-12-2008, 08:57 AM

It seems like a good idea, but looks a little messy.

Try and add more detail and more to the posts. Otherwise, good idea

shroobs · 02-12-2008, 09:07 AM

You just need some grammar and a good person to write it, and I think it'd be good.

darefreak101 · 03-02-2008, 02:46 PM

I agree, its ok, but use beter grammar

bobo · 03-14-2008, 10:45 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by darefreak101

I agree, its ok, but use beter grammar

I love when this happens

02-11-2008, 10:19 PM	#1
penguin13 Junior Member Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: America Posts: 22	A Story That Has No Title Steve was an average 16 year old who wasnt the smartest kid in school but also wasnt the dumbest. He had blonde hair, blue eyes, and was about 5 foot 9 weighing at 123 lbs. It was a beautiful saturday in the middle of April and Steve got a text message from Kylie otherwise known as the hottest girl in the tenth grade. K-wat r u doin S-nm u K-bored S-y K-my parents r gone for 2 weeks S-o K-so u want 2 come over 2night S-k wat time K-4

02-11-2008, 10:46 PM	#3
penguin13 Junior Member Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: America Posts: 22	pt 1 2/3 S-k c ya K-bye So he looks at the clock and it says 300. Then he runs upstairs and takes a shower. He walks out of the shower and goes into his bedroom and he puts a pair of orange and black boxers with a plain white t-shirt, a pair of jeans, and a multicolored overshirt on. Then he walks over to the clock and it says 345. So he went into the bathroom and starts to brush his teeth. After he was done he left and started to walk over to Kylies. After about 10 minutes he reached her house.

02-12-2008, 08:53 AM	#6
glue Distinguished Member Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Oxford, UK Posts: 735 Blog Entries: 6	its warming up try adding alot more next time __________________ WATCH OUT FOR A GLUE RATING OUT OF TEN glue would like to tell everyone reading this to stay sticky as life is to short to become unstuck I'm the Simon Cowell of GetDare Please add me at: Skype: Glue101 8 Years On Getdare!!!!!!

02-12-2008, 09:07 AM	#8
shroobs Account Banned Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Chicago (USA) Posts: 104	You just need some grammar and a good person to write it, and I think it'd be good. __________________ Always looking for good dares. I have a webcam and digi. msn - [email protected]

02-11-2008, 10:39 PM	#2
lovethenudes Member Join Date: Dec 2007 Posts: 72	i'm not gonna lie, thats a terrible story

02-11-2008, 10:49 PM	#4
penguin13 Junior Member Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: America Posts: 22	thx for ur honest opion

02-12-2008, 08:46 AM	#5
penguin13 Junior Member Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: America Posts: 22	should i keep going

02-12-2008, 08:57 AM	#7
Davros Account Banned Join Date: Aug 2007 Posts: 2,943	It seems like a good idea, but looks a little messy. Try and add more detail and more to the posts. Otherwise, good idea

03-02-2008, 02:46 PM	#9
darefreak101 Member Join Date: Mar 2008 Posts: 44 Blog Entries: 1	I agree, its ok, but use beter grammar