Fiction: MXM Love Is Too Much

pothuthic · 12-22-2010, 06:51 AM

Introduction
Ollie
Age: 14
Hair Colour: Dark Blonde
Body: Just Right...

Kieran
Age: 14
Hair colour: Black
Body: Six Pack...

Chapter One
Both Kieran And Ollie had been attracted to each other for quite a bit, They Both were in the same ICT class but Ignored the other due to how much they loved eachother.

They loved each other... Without a doubt, They were Addicted to each other and thats where it started.

Kieran's house was round the corner from the school and he invited Ollie to come round to play Black Ops, Ollie did not like Black Ops one single bit but just wanted to spend time with Kieran.

Kieran had tried to bring a friend round but no one would do the dirty deed.

Ollie got round there after school ended and told Kieran that he would have to go at 6 because he has to walk home and it might get to dark for him, Kieran Quickly suggested that he stayed round his house that weekend and go to school on Monday straight on... Without Hesitation Ollie said Yes...
This was going to be a fun weekend

Extreme · 12-22-2010, 12:49 PM

Can't wait for more ;D

pothuthic · 12-22-2010, 02:53 PM

Chapter Two
The Tension was rising, It was getting to much for them, Which One Would make a move?

"Hey so you wanna go swimming?" Kieran said
"Aah sorry only got limited money, And Can't be asked to walk to Wateredge." Ollie replied
"Erm Look in my garden!"
"OMG! you got your own pool!"
"Yeah! You like?"
"Yeah! I aint got no trunks though."
"Nor have I, Wanna go without them?"
"Er...."
"I know you love me Ollie"
"What!" Ollie went red"
"I love you aswell."
"Im not going Naked!"
"We are going Naked whether you like it or not!"
"Oh Wait I had swimming today, I do have trunks!"
"Oh So do I!"
"But I'm Not going to use them! You better not peek!"
"I won't peek!"
Ollie got undressed, He was in his Boxers.
"I don't think I can do it." Ollie said
"Why not, You look sexy Enough."
"No Other Boy has ever seen my down below."
"I have."
"OMG WHEN?"
"Now"
Then Kieran Pulled down Ollie's boxers, and knelt down.
"No Dont Kieran Please Dont."
Kieran carried on and started Blowing off Ollie
"Actually this feels good." Ollie quickly made clear.
The beginning has only just started

kinky · 12-29-2010, 06:19 PM

I lol'd at how it got to the blowjob part on the first chapter but carry on, it's got potential.

Noquestions · 12-29-2010, 06:27 PM

Seems kind of rushed...

pothuthic · 12-29-2010, 07:40 PM

Sorry for the delay.... If you didnt know christmas has just passed XD

Chapter 3 - Is the blowie a start of something?

Ollie was still getting over the fact his crush had just sexually assualted him!
Ollie: What was that for
Kieran: i cant resist you!
Ollie: Funny you should say that.
Kieran: Your getting sexier every word you say.
Ollie: I would say that about you but you cant get any more sexier.
Kieran: Are we going Swimming then?
Ollie: Up to you
Kieran: I think I should Shower down first
Ollie: Ok I Will wait here
Kieran: Your not off the hook your cumming with me!
Ollie: Stop turning me on! Do you know how embarrasing it is getting an erection in front of your crush... (Shit I just said it!)
Kieran: What was that
Ollie: Nothing
Kieran: Someone said im their crush and its only me and you in the house so im guessing it was you
Ollie: Ok! It was me!!
Kieran: Your gonna pay for lying, Naughty boy for lying Now get on my bed strip down and get ready to get tied up!
Ollie: Yes Sir!
Kieran: Wow that was easy! took me 5 months to say that!!

Chapter 4 coming soon, Feedback much appreciated!

soldar15 · 12-29-2010, 07:44 PM

goin good but don't rush it.....im on like the fourth chapter of my story and things are just gettin into it....don't rush and i think writing in longer blocks would keep ur readers with you more

pothuthic · 12-30-2010, 07:35 PM

More will come but im on a break for the mo im studying!

immaeatu · 12-31-2010, 03:52 PM

this is waaaaaay too rushed
i cant really get into the story :S

12-22-2010, 06:51 AM	#1
pothuthic Member Join Date: Feb 2010 Posts: 72 Blog Entries: 6	MXM Love Is Too Much Introduction Ollie Age: 14 Hair Colour: Dark Blonde Body: Just Right... Kieran Age: 14 Hair colour: Black Body: Six Pack... Chapter One Both Kieran And Ollie had been attracted to each other for quite a bit, They Both were in the same ICT class but Ignored the other due to how much they loved eachother. They loved each other... Without a doubt, They were Addicted to each other and thats where it started. Kieran's house was round the corner from the school and he invited Ollie to come round to play Black Ops, Ollie did not like Black Ops one single bit but just wanted to spend time with Kieran. Kieran had tried to bring a friend round but no one would do the dirty deed. Ollie got round there after school ended and told Kieran that he would have to go at 6 because he has to walk home and it might get to dark for him, Kieran Quickly suggested that he stayed round his house that weekend and go to school on Monday straight on... Without Hesitation Ollie said Yes... This was going to be a fun weekend

12-22-2010, 12:49 PM	#2
Extreme Junior Member Join Date: Nov 2010 Location: United Kingdom, Lancashire. Posts: 28 Blog Entries: 2	Can't wait for more ;D __________________ eddie *...and the love kick starts again♥* Male Sixteen Bi-sexual

12-29-2010, 06:19 PM	#4
kinky getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: England! Posts: 300	I lol'd at how it got to the blowjob part on the first chapter but carry on, it's got potential. __________________ 16 / Male / UK PM me as many truths as you like, I'll answer them no matter what Edit: (22/05/2016) - Last activity was in 2013. I've grown up now :O Edit edit: 23/01/2018 - Wow, happy to see the forum still alive. Amazing nostalgia and how young I was.

12-29-2010, 06:27 PM	#5
Noquestions Member Join Date: May 2009 Posts: 37	Seems kind of rushed... __________________ 27/F/Mistress Interested in... Sluts. Anal. CBT. Orgasm Control. Edging. Clit play. Spanking. Training. Toys. Masturbating. Bondage. Boobs. Not as interested in... Poo/Pee -play. Too much mess. Time wasters. Best with webcam or pics!

12-29-2010, 07:44 PM	#7
soldar15 Member Join Date: Dec 2010 Posts: 62	goin good but don't rush it.....im on like the fourth chapter of my story and things are just gettin into it....don't rush and i think writing in longer blocks would keep ur readers with you more __________________ is it a problem that i like singing cuz if it is then why isnt hillary clinton president as yall see im a no borders person when it comes to creativity so live live peeps pm me any truths you have and ill answer soory yall no cam no dareslave im a desert cuz im empty....and they say that maybe YOU can fill me up!!

12-22-2010, 02:53 PM	#3
pothuthic Member Join Date: Feb 2010 Posts: 72 Blog Entries: 6	Chapter Two The Tension was rising, It was getting to much for them, Which One Would make a move? "Hey so you wanna go swimming?" Kieran said "Aah sorry only got limited money, And Can't be asked to walk to Wateredge." Ollie replied "Erm Look in my garden!" "OMG! you got your own pool!" "Yeah! You like?" "Yeah! I aint got no trunks though." "Nor have I, Wanna go without them?" "Er...." "I know you love me Ollie" "What!" Ollie went red" "I love you aswell." "Im not going Naked!" "We are going Naked whether you like it or not!" "Oh Wait I had swimming today, I do have trunks!" "Oh So do I!" "But I'm Not going to use them! You better not peek!" "I won't peek!" Ollie got undressed, He was in his Boxers. "I don't think I can do it." Ollie said "Why not, You look sexy Enough." "No Other Boy has ever seen my down below." "I have." "OMG WHEN?" "Now" Then Kieran Pulled down Ollie's boxers, and knelt down. "No Dont Kieran Please Dont." Kieran carried on and started Blowing off Ollie "Actually this feels good." Ollie quickly made clear. The beginning has only just started

12-29-2010, 07:40 PM	#6
pothuthic Member Join Date: Feb 2010 Posts: 72 Blog Entries: 6	Sorry for the delay.... If you didnt know christmas has just passed XD Chapter 3 - Is the blowie a start of something? Ollie was still getting over the fact his crush had just sexually assualted him! Ollie: What was that for Kieran: i cant resist you! Ollie: Funny you should say that. Kieran: Your getting sexier every word you say. Ollie: I would say that about you but you cant get any more sexier. Kieran: Are we going Swimming then? Ollie: Up to you Kieran: I think I should Shower down first Ollie: Ok I Will wait here Kieran: Your not off the hook your cumming with me! Ollie: Stop turning me on! Do you know how embarrasing it is getting an erection in front of your crush... (Shit I just said it!) Kieran: What was that Ollie: Nothing Kieran: Someone said im their crush and its only me and you in the house so im guessing it was you Ollie: Ok! It was me!! Kieran: Your gonna pay for lying, Naughty boy for lying Now get on my bed strip down and get ready to get tied up! Ollie: Yes Sir! Kieran: Wow that was easy! took me 5 months to say that!! Chapter 4 coming soon, Feedback much appreciated!

12-30-2010, 07:35 PM	#8
pothuthic Member Join Date: Feb 2010 Posts: 72 Blog Entries: 6	More will come but im on a break for the mo im studying!

12-31-2010, 03:52 PM	#9
immaeatu Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2010 Location: Unicorn Village <3 Posts: 147	this is waaaaaay too rushed i cant really get into the story :S __________________ i wish i had a tentacle beard... props to you Davy Jones ;o Newly in a relationship with my David <3