09-22-2009, 08:02 AM | #16 |
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Overall not to bad. A great concept, but the writting style is putting me off. You set it up as if Emma would be reluctant towards paying off the bet, but she goes into it pretty easily. Also, you tend to write what just happened in details, almost to summerize it. I mean, it works in your head, I get that, but I think written out it just comes across as a review. Like when she takes a piss outside naked, he tells her how to do it and then immediatly after that part you summerize it again for the readers.
I'd like to read some more, to see where this is going. I really want to see what happens when the others show up. Decent work though, keep it up.
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09-23-2009, 01:27 PM | #19 |
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Part 7
Emma: Andrew I can't do this anymore, can i please get dressed Andrew: What but i thought you were enjoying this Emma: No I'm not, I don't care how much it costs, i want out Andrew: Jen would you excuse us for a moment Andrew: Emma come upstairs with me Emma: Okay fine *Emma and Andrew go upstairs to Emma's Bedroom* Andrew: Okay Andrew: Here's the thing Andrew: This is priceless to me, you can't pay me back with any sum of money Emma: Okay Andrew: But you do need to be punished now cause you just don't seem to understand Emma: Ah Andrew: Bend over Emma: But master Andrew: NOW Emma: Okay *Emma bends over* Andrew: Okay good *Andrew smacks Emma's bottom* *Emma screams* Emma: Did you have to go so hard? Andrew: Yes and trust me this is only the start *Andrew smacks Emma's bottom four more times* Andrew: How do you feel? Emma: Okay i guess Andrew: Hmmm *Andrew takes off belt and smacks Emma with it ten times* Emma: Okay okay okay Emma: I'll obey Emma: I swear master Andrew: Okay very good *doorbell rings* Andrew: Now greet our next guest Emma: Okay master To Be Continued
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09-24-2009, 04:16 PM | #20 |
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great story!! Did this actually happen?
utd won unfairly though..
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09-25-2009, 08:41 AM | #22 |
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no it's fiction of course it didn't happen and united were the better team and out played city so they deserved to win
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09-25-2009, 12:33 PM | #23 |
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Part 8
*Emma goes downstairs to answer door* Emma: Hi Heather: What the hell Emma? Emma: What? Heather: When did you become a nudist? Emma: Em i'm not a nudist Heather: Well it looks like you are Emma: Oh right yeah *Emma explains the bet* Heather: Damn why did you agree to that? Emma: I dunno Heather: God you can be so stupid sometimes, you know that right? Emma: Yes, yes i know Emma: So you gonna argue with me over this or are you gonna come in? Heather: Fine i'll come in Andrew: Hi heather *Heather gives him an evil look* Andrew: Damn someone woke up on the wrong side of the bed Heather: Why are you such an ass? Andrew: She lost, fair and square Heather: Yeah but you could have some class Andrew: Whatever Andrew: Anyone up for food? Everyone: Yes please Andrew: Cool, i know a place to order from *Andrew rings to order food* Emma: I'm sorry Heather Heather: Whatever, whats done is done Andrew: Okay they said it would be about 20 minutes Andrew: Emma you better get dressed Emma: Really? Andrew: Yes but i want to choose what you wear Emma: Okay Emma: Be right back *Andrew and Emma go upstairs* Andrew: Okay this is what i want you to wear, your highest heels and tube top, thats it Emma: What? no underwear? Andrew: Don't start disobeying me again, you know what will happen otherwise Emma: Okay master To Be Continued
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09-25-2009, 03:23 PM | #25 |
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Part 9
Andrew: Okay show me what tops you have Emma: Yes master Andrew: Okay try on this one *Emma puts on top* Andrew: Hmmm a little too revealing Emma: Just a bit master Andrew: Do you have anything that could go below your bum but only just Emma: Em i think so master Emma: How about this? Andrew: Hmmm looks good, put it on Emma: How does it look master? Andrew: Looks fine, covers bum but if you bent over you would give people a good view Andrew: Now for some heels Emma: Yes master Emma: How about these master? Andrew: Hmmm they are okay but do you have anything higher? Emma: Yes but might not match Andrew: Show me *Emma takes out shoes* Andrew: Ah it's not that bad, pink heels with a black dress that will work Andrew: Put them on Emma: Okay master *Puts on heels* Andrew: Now lets show everyone your outfit Emma: Yes master *Emma and Andrew go downstairs* Andrew: So what do you all think of Emma's new outfit? Jennifer: Nice Heather: Thats better, at least she is wearing clothes *doorbell rings* Andrew: Oh that must be the food Andrew: Emma? Wanna get that for us? Emma: Yes master *Emma answers door* Delivery Guy: Hi Emma: Hi Delivery Guy: That will be €15.50 Emma: Okay cool *hands over money* Delivery Guy: So you going out tonight? Emma: Em no probably not Delivery Guy: Ha okay you just look like your going out Emma: Well maybe later i might Delivery Guy: Okay bye Emma: Bye To Be Continued
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09-27-2009, 04:21 PM | #26 |
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Nice continuation!!
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09-27-2009, 04:52 PM | #27 |
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thank you, anybody want me to continue?
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09-27-2009, 06:33 PM | #28 |
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yes please continue im liking it so far
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09-27-2009, 06:59 PM | #29 |
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ya contine, this is like my dream
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09-28-2009, 07:15 AM | #30 |
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Part 10
Andrew: Awesome food Heather: Yeah I'm starving too Andrew: Oh hey Emma was just saying to the girls, Paul just text me saying he is having a party over at his Andrew: The girls and me are gonna go and since your my slave your coming Emma: Okay can i get changed then? Andrew: No you go in what you wearing Emma: But what if slips, could be embarrassing *Andrew gives her look that says that she will go as she is* *The group have their food* Andrew: Okay time to go to Paul's Andrew: Heather can you drive? Heather: *sigh* fine *Andrew and Emma sit in back and Jen sits up front with Heather* Heather: Off we go *Andrew whispers to Emma* Andrew: Slip your dress above your pussy Emma: What? Andrew: Do it *Emma moves dress* Andrew: Now play with yourself till we get to Paul's Emma: I thought you would never ask he he Andrew: Are you starting to enjoy this? Emma: Just a bit *giggles*
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