Fiction: The Surprise

slutpup · 09-02-2011, 05:13 PM

All comments are much appreciated. I had RACHIE help me with the grammer,spelling,and a few changes to the whole story.

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THE SURPRISE

It was 10am when Lily got a text from her best friend, Nikki. Reading it Lily got this tingly feeling, what could her best friend want? “meet me at my house in 20 min” it read. Texting back as quick as she could she typed “k ill be there”.

She got changed into a bright pink bra, pink tank top, pink shorts, and a pink thong. As she was changing she examined herself in the mirror. She was about 4 foot 5. She was a little overweight but not too much. She had long black hair that is always in a pony tail. She wears glasses and has freckles.

When she was dressed she told her mom she was going out and left.

Thankful that Nikki's house was only 2 blocks away, she got on her bike still wondering why her friend had sent the mysterious message.

Arriving at Nikki’s house she crept up to Nikki's room.

Nikki is 4 foot 7. She is a little underweight, but not much. She has short blonde hair and a lot of people think she is dumb, but she is actually very smart. She has perfect vision and no freckles what so ever.

"What's up? Why did you want me to come here?" asked a puzzled Lily.

"Because we are going to play truth or dare" Nikki said with an evil grin on her face.

"NO WAY! You know I hate that evil game. Last time I played I had to run around naked outside and I was seen by 3 people!"

"Well, actually, you kind of have to play."

"No I don't. My life, my choice. I'm leaving, bye" replied Lily

"Fine leave, if you want these pictures to go on the internet."

Lily stopped dead in her tracks. "What pictures?" Lily asks.

"The pictures I have of you naked and masturbating." Nikki said with the widest smile ever on her face.

"W...Where did you get those????" She half yelled.

"Well, remember last week when I told you I was coming over at 5pm but never showed?"

"Yeah, why?" asked Lily still puzzled at what this had to do with her being naked.

"Well I came at 4:30. I walked into your room and you were naked. Your back was facing me so you never saw me. I started to leave when I realized the opportunity that I walked right into. I decided to go back and open your door just a crack and took a picture of you. Then, you turned around and I got one with your face." Nikki explained grinning.

"I...I don't believe you." She gasped.

"Fine I'll show them to you." Nikki told her hoping everything was going to plan.

TO BE CONTINUED …………..
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What will happen next?

Has Nikki actually got any photo's?

Keep reading "The Surprise" to find out

Rachie · 09-02-2011, 06:37 PM

Lovely Part keep up the story, and if you need any help feel free to ask

Love Rachie
x x x x

slutpup · 09-02-2011, 06:48 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Rachie

Lovely Part keep up the story, and if you need any help feel free to ask

Love Rachie
x x x x

Thanks

I will haha.

J.M.N · 09-04-2011, 12:24 PM

Very descriptive ! And i like how you explained how Nikki got the pictures ! Plus it was a believeable story !

Great grammer and spelling of course

And there are so many ways you can go with this ! And teasing the reader with a unexplained past event

Yeah i like it

slutpup · 09-04-2011, 01:46 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by J.M.N

Very descriptive ! And i like how you explained how Nikki got the pictures ! Plus it was a believeable story !

Great grammer and spelling of course

And there are so many ways you can go with this ! And teasing the reader with a unexplained past event

Yeah i like it

Thanks

Yeah, I could actually think it could happen. I had Rachie's help with that so don't give me all the credit. LOL. I'm so glad you like it.

hadesnyberg · 09-06-2011, 08:46 PM

nice begining please do continue

09-02-2011, 05:13 PM	#1
slutpup Distinguished Member Join Date: Dec 2010 Location: MN Posts: 703 Blog Entries: 8	The Surprise All comments are much appreciated. I had RACHIE help me with the grammer,spelling,and a few changes to the whole story. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~~~~~~~ THE SURPRISE It was 10am when Lily got a text from her best friend, Nikki. Reading it Lily got this tingly feeling, what could her best friend want? “meet me at my house in 20 min” it read. Texting back as quick as she could she typed “k ill be there”. She got changed into a bright pink bra, pink tank top, pink shorts, and a pink thong. As she was changing she examined herself in the mirror. She was about 4 foot 5. She was a little overweight but not too much. She had long black hair that is always in a pony tail. She wears glasses and has freckles. When she was dressed she told her mom she was going out and left. Thankful that Nikki's house was only 2 blocks away, she got on her bike still wondering why her friend had sent the mysterious message. Arriving at Nikki’s house she crept up to Nikki's room. Nikki is 4 foot 7. She is a little underweight, but not much. She has short blonde hair and a lot of people think she is dumb, but she is actually very smart. She has perfect vision and no freckles what so ever. "What's up? Why did you want me to come here?" asked a puzzled Lily. "Because we are going to play truth or dare" Nikki said with an evil grin on her face. "NO WAY! You know I hate that evil game. Last time I played I had to run around naked outside and I was seen by 3 people!" "Well, actually, you kind of have to play." "No I don't. My life, my choice. I'm leaving, bye" replied Lily "Fine leave, if you want these pictures to go on the internet." Lily stopped dead in her tracks. "What pictures?" Lily asks. "The pictures I have of you naked and masturbating." Nikki said with the widest smile ever on her face. "W...Where did you get those????" She half yelled. "Well, remember last week when I told you I was coming over at 5pm but never showed?" "Yeah, why?" asked Lily still puzzled at what this had to do with her being naked. "Well I came at 4:30. I walked into your room and you were naked. Your back was facing me so you never saw me. I started to leave when I realized the opportunity that I walked right into. I decided to go back and open your door just a crack and took a picture of you. Then, you turned around and I got one with your face." Nikki explained grinning. "I...I don't believe you." She gasped. "Fine I'll show them to you." Nikki told her hoping everything was going to plan. TO BE CONTINUED ………….. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~~~~~~~~ What will happen next? Has Nikki actually got any photo's? Keep reading "The Surprise" to find out __________________ PM me dares! I will try any dare that gets sent that *doesn't* have anything to do with *any* of my limits! I need help figuring out my likes, dislikes and some limits! Dare me! Likes: Mouth soaping, writing lines, spanking, anal, slight pain, certain public things Dislikes: ??? Limits: Certain public things, permanent, major pain, any type of sex, family, friends If you think I deserve a punishment for not updating my story, punish me.

09-02-2011, 06:37 PM	#2
Rachie I am the cutest butterfly ever Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: In my Bed, Posts: 6,606 Blog Entries: 2	Lovely Part keep up the story, and if you need any help feel free to ask Love Rachie x x x x __________________ RACHIE'S GETDARE USER GUIDE / MANUAL STRIP POKER WITH A TWIST (Story) BED HABITS LOLA.FOX WISHES SHE WAS MY FAVORITE USER <3

09-04-2011, 12:24 PM	#4
J.M.N Getdare's Head Whore Join Date: Jun 2011 Location: UK Posts: 1,401 Blog Entries: 14	Very descriptive ! And i like how you explained how Nikki got the pictures ! Plus it was a believeable story ! Great grammer and spelling of course And there are so many ways you can go with this ! And teasing the reader with a unexplained past event Yeah i like it __________________ [20:16:43] Jameser: ‹@J.M.N› don't worry you're definitely one of the lads here [22:05:21] 1Pupil: Best moderator of getDare to me One day when the light is glowing I’ll be in my castle golden But until the gates are open I just wanna feel this moment "Bdsm. That's were u get spanked!" I love weiners and nuts. "JMN is the one that most the tweenagers want to see in a kilt"

09-06-2011, 08:46 PM	#6
hadesnyberg Account Banned Join Date: Apr 2011 Location: where you die i will be the last thing you see but until then i am in your worst nightmares Posts: 53	nice begining please do continue __________________ 15 male Iowa United States From Your scariest Nightmare I hunger for the flesh of man i can be contacted at [email protected] but pm me first if your going and wait for me to pm back to so i have a heads up i look forward to hearing from you Hades DarkBlade