Fiction: Mark's Babysitting Adventure

Demon Thief · 12-14-2009, 12:51 AM

So, I have been reading a lot of stories on here and figured I should try my hand at writing one myself. This story is completely fiction and exists only in my mind.

Part One

It began as a typical Monday afternoon for Mark. He had just started his first job working at a supermarket as a bagger/ stockboy. He was 16 years old and had just recieved his driver's license.
The cashier that Mark was working with was a woman named Linda. She had not mentioned her age, but Mark figured she was in her mid-thirties. She was fairly short and thin, with medium length brown hair. Mark was on the short side himself with short black hair.
At around 7:00 pm, when there were no customers, Linda looked at Mark and asked, "So, Mark, have any plans for this weekend?"
"Not really," Mark answered.
"Well, if you're free, can you help me with a problem?" she aked.
"I may be able to. What is it?"
"I have to out of town Friday night, and I won't be back until Sunday evening. The girl I hired to babysit my kids just went off to college. Do you think you can do it since you're free? Everyone else I asked is busy," she explained.
"I guess I could do it. What time should I come over?" Mark asked.
"Around 5 o'clock. You'll have to spend Friday and Saturday night there, so I'll make up the guest room for you. Would that be alright with your parents?"
"They wouldn't mind," Mark replied.
"Good. Thank you so much for doing this. I'll pay you $50 when I get back on Sunday night. Is that a deal?" Linda asked.
"It is," Mark replied.

Little did he know what he was getting himself into...

EnigmaNZ · 12-14-2009, 03:30 AM

Good start. Nicely written and easy to follow. I'm wondering what he is in for as well!

truth · 12-15-2009, 12:19 AM

good start keep it going

Demon Thief · 12-15-2009, 09:55 AM

Thank you for your kind comments.

Part Two

At around 4:40, Mark pulled in Linda's driveway, following directions she had given him the day before. He had asked his parents about babysitting Linda's kids and they said it was fine as long as he called if there were any problems.
Linda answered the door. She asked, "Any problems finding the house?"
"No," Mark replied.
"That's good. I'll call my kids and introduce you," Linda said. She walked to the foot of the stairs and called up, "Alex? Steven? Come meet the new babysitter!" The sound of pounding footsteps echoed down the stairs and suddenly two boys appeared in front of Mark. Except for a small difference in height, the two boys looked alike with both of them having light brown hair.
"Mark, I'd like you to meet my sons. The taller one is Alex, and he's 11. The other one is Steven, who's 8. Kids, this is Mark, your new babysitter."
"Hello," Mark said.
"Hi," answered Alex and Steven.
"Well kids, I must be off. Mark, the number of the hotel I'm staying at is on the fridge. The kids have already been fed and everything. They have to be in bed by 10. See you on Sunday!" She left, shutting the door behind her.
The three of them remained where they were standing until Linda's car pulled out of the driveway and down the street. Then Alex asked, "Can we go back to what we were doing, please?"
"What were you guys doing?" Mark asked.
"I was playing Halo on my XBox, and Steven was playing in his room," Alex answered.
"Mind if I do something with you guys?" Mark asked.
"You can play Halo with me," Alex offered.
"I could do that," Mark replied, as they all headed upstairs.

What do you guys think?

myswagga · 12-15-2009, 11:22 AM

this story has a lot of potential, please continue

chubbsman7 · 12-15-2009, 02:27 PM

Sorry, but this slightly reminds me of "This Babysitting Job isn't Working Out." Ha ha, but keep going. Ever writer starts somewhere.

maxim · 12-20-2009, 10:20 PM

This story has terrific potentilla if you will neither post more often or post longer posts. Anyways story line really has somewhere to go and at first I though this was going to be like the other babysitting story but it's very dvrent and would like to see this one go somewhere!

Demon Thief · 12-20-2009, 11:57 PM

Thank you all for your comments. Maxim, I'll bear that in mind.

Part 6

As Mark walked in the room, Zack handed him a piece of paper. "Here are your rules," he said.
Mark looked at the paper which read:

Mark's Rules

1. You must obey Alex and Zack at all times.
2. You must ask for permission to do anything outside of our orders.
3. If we have other kids over, you must obey them like you do us.
4. You will wear whatever clothes we pull out for you; if nothing is pulled out, wear your normal clothes.
5. Failure to follow rules will result in punishment.

Mark looked up from his rules at Alex and Zack. "What do you want me to do now?" he asked.
Both boys looked at each other. Then Alex said, "You have to play a little game with us."
"What kind of game?" Mark wanted to know.
"Truth or Dare," Alex answered.
"What are your rules?' Mark asked.
"Basically the same rules as usual," Zack answered, "but we changed one little thing. The first person to refuse to do a dare or not answer a question truthfully loses."
"It'll be us two versus you," Alex continued. "Will you play with us?"
"I will," Mark answered. As if he much say in the matter!
"Oh, before we start, I have a deal for you, Mark, and you have to agree," said Alex.
"What is it?" Mark asked.
"If you win, I'll delete the photo I have of you, and you'll be free. If we win, you have to sleep in Steven's room. wherever he wants. Agreed?"
"Agreed," Mark replied. "Who goes first?"
"You can," Zack answered.
And so the game began.

will9022 · 12-21-2009, 12:03 AM

this is getting really interesting! cant wait for the next part!!

dan1mal · 12-21-2009, 07:55 AM

more more plz! this is really good

DragonofDares · 12-16-2009, 02:59 PM

Please continue!! really good

Mr. Green · 12-16-2009, 04:53 PM

This is spool great please continue

Demon Thief · 12-16-2009, 11:48 PM

Working on it...

Part 4

Mark stared at Alex holding his camera phone for a fraction of a second. Then he ran across the room toward Alex, meaning to take the phone away from him and delete the photo.
"Not so fast," Alex said with a small laugh. Mark came to a stop about halfway across the room. "If you come any closer, I'll send this to my mom.
"What do you want from me?" Mark asked.
"You to do my bidding for the rest of the time my mom's away," Alex answered.
"I thought that if I did that one thing for you, you'd let me off the hook!" Mark protested.
"Yeah, but there was nothing that would hold you to your word."
Mark thought, He's right! I shouldv'e just done what he wanted for the rest of the night. Now he has me for as long as he wants. If I can get that phone somehow...
Alex interrupted Mark's train of thought: "Now go back to my mom's room and take that off. Come back in your underwear and I'll see if I can find a few things for you to do."
Mark obeyed without question. He hoped he could find a way out of this situation. He hurried back to Alex's room to await his next orders.
"Now Mark, I want you to-" when he was interrupted by a loud ringing sound.
The doorbell! Mark thought.

xava · 12-17-2009, 03:32 AM

i like it so far

u have me checking every few hours hoping u have posted more lol so keep it up x

DareMad · 12-17-2009, 11:11 AM

please continue it's great!

12-14-2009, 12:51 AM	#1
Demon Thief getDare Devil Join Date: Dec 2009 Location: In the US Posts: 1,012	Mark's Babysitting Adventure So, I have been reading a lot of stories on here and figured I should try my hand at writing one myself. This story is completely fiction and exists only in my mind. Part One It began as a typical Monday afternoon for Mark. He had just started his first job working at a supermarket as a bagger/ stockboy. He was 16 years old and had just recieved his driver's license. The cashier that Mark was working with was a woman named Linda. She had not mentioned her age, but Mark figured she was in her mid-thirties. She was fairly short and thin, with medium length brown hair. Mark was on the short side himself with short black hair. At around 7:00 pm, when there were no customers, Linda looked at Mark and asked, "So, Mark, have any plans for this weekend?" "Not really," Mark answered. "Well, if you're free, can you help me with a problem?" she aked. "I may be able to. What is it?" "I have to out of town Friday night, and I won't be back until Sunday evening. The girl I hired to babysit my kids just went off to college. Do you think you can do it since you're free? Everyone else I asked is busy," she explained. "I guess I could do it. What time should I come over?" Mark asked. "Around 5 o'clock. You'll have to spend Friday and Saturday night there, so I'll make up the guest room for you. Would that be alright with your parents?" "They wouldn't mind," Mark replied. "Good. Thank you so much for doing this. I'll pay you $50 when I get back on Sunday night. Is that a deal?" Linda asked. "It is," Mark replied. Little did he know what he was getting himself into... __________________ "How many seconds in eternity?" And the shepherd's boy says, "this is a mountain of pure diamond. It takes an hour to climb it and an hour to go around it. Every hundred years a little bird comes and sharpens its beak on the diamond mountain. And when the entire mountain is chiseled away then the first second of eternity will have passed." You must think that's a hell of a long time. Personally, I think that's a hell of a bird. 14 years on GetDare!

12-14-2009, 03:30 AM	#2
EnigmaNZ getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Auckland, New Zealand Posts: 367 Blog Entries: 32	Good start. Nicely written and easy to follow. I'm wondering what he is in for as well! __________________

12-15-2009, 09:55 AM	#4
Demon Thief getDare Devil Join Date: Dec 2009 Location: In the US Posts: 1,012	Thank you for your kind comments. Part Two At around 4:40, Mark pulled in Linda's driveway, following directions she had given him the day before. He had asked his parents about babysitting Linda's kids and they said it was fine as long as he called if there were any problems. Linda answered the door. She asked, "Any problems finding the house?" "No," Mark replied. "That's good. I'll call my kids and introduce you," Linda said. She walked to the foot of the stairs and called up, "Alex? Steven? Come meet the new babysitter!" The sound of pounding footsteps echoed down the stairs and suddenly two boys appeared in front of Mark. Except for a small difference in height, the two boys looked alike with both of them having light brown hair. "Mark, I'd like you to meet my sons. The taller one is Alex, and he's 11. The other one is Steven, who's 8. Kids, this is Mark, your new babysitter." "Hello," Mark said. "Hi," answered Alex and Steven. "Well kids, I must be off. Mark, the number of the hotel I'm staying at is on the fridge. The kids have already been fed and everything. They have to be in bed by 10. See you on Sunday!" She left, shutting the door behind her. The three of them remained where they were standing until Linda's car pulled out of the driveway and down the street. Then Alex asked, "Can we go back to what we were doing, please?" "What were you guys doing?" Mark asked. "I was playing Halo on my XBox, and Steven was playing in his room," Alex answered. "Mind if I do something with you guys?" Mark asked. "You can play Halo with me," Alex offered. "I could do that," Mark replied, as they all headed upstairs. What do you guys think? __________________ "How many seconds in eternity?" And the shepherd's boy says, "this is a mountain of pure diamond. It takes an hour to climb it and an hour to go around it. Every hundred years a little bird comes and sharpens its beak on the diamond mountain. And when the entire mountain is chiseled away then the first second of eternity will have passed." You must think that's a hell of a long time. Personally, I think that's a hell of a bird. 14 years on GetDare! Last edited by Demon Thief; 12-16-2009 at 11:30 PM. Reason: Formatting

12-15-2009, 11:22 AM	#5
myswagga Member Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: usa Posts: 92	good potential this story has a lot of potential, please continue __________________ Male USA

12-15-2009, 02:27 PM	#6
chubbsman7 Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: Kingdom of Talossa Territory, Antarctica. Posts: 231	Sorry, but this slightly reminds me of "This Babysitting Job isn't Working Out." Ha ha, but keep going. Ever writer starts somewhere. __________________ ...And So Summer Starts (Sean's View) ...And So Summer Starts (Lauren's View) With these stories, I'll try to update every Monday or so. It depends on my work schedule, really. But I'll post as often (as appropriate, definitely not everyday!) as I can! Also: A side project of mine: The In The Black Fedora

12-15-2009, 12:19 AM	#3
truth Member Join Date: Nov 2009 Posts: 76	good start keep it going

12-20-2009, 10:20 PM	#7
maxim Account Banned Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: UNITED STATES Posts: 1,121 Blog Entries: 33	This story has terrific potentilla if you will neither post more often or post longer posts. Anyways story line really has somewhere to go and at first I though this was going to be like the other babysitting story but it's very dvrent and would like to see this one go somewhere! __________________ [SIGPIC][/SIGPIC]

12-20-2009, 11:57 PM	#8
Demon Thief getDare Devil Join Date: Dec 2009 Location: In the US Posts: 1,012	Thank you all for your comments. Maxim, I'll bear that in mind. Part 6 As Mark walked in the room, Zack handed him a piece of paper. "Here are your rules," he said. Mark looked at the paper which read: Mark's Rules 1. You must obey Alex and Zack at all times. 2. You must ask for permission to do anything outside of our orders. 3. If we have other kids over, you must obey them like you do us. 4. You will wear whatever clothes we pull out for you; if nothing is pulled out, wear your normal clothes. 5. Failure to follow rules will result in punishment. Mark looked up from his rules at Alex and Zack. "What do you want me to do now?" he asked. Both boys looked at each other. Then Alex said, "You have to play a little game with us." "What kind of game?" Mark wanted to know. "Truth or Dare," Alex answered. "What are your rules?' Mark asked. "Basically the same rules as usual," Zack answered, "but we changed one little thing. The first person to refuse to do a dare or not answer a question truthfully loses." "It'll be us two versus you," Alex continued. "Will you play with us?" "I will," Mark answered. As if he much say in the matter! "Oh, before we start, I have a deal for you, Mark, and you have to agree," said Alex. "What is it?" Mark asked. "If you win, I'll delete the photo I have of you, and you'll be free. If we win, you have to sleep in Steven's room. wherever he wants. Agreed?" "Agreed," Mark replied. "Who goes first?" "You can," Zack answered. And so the game began. __________________ "How many seconds in eternity?" And the shepherd's boy says, "this is a mountain of pure diamond. It takes an hour to climb it and an hour to go around it. Every hundred years a little bird comes and sharpens its beak on the diamond mountain. And when the entire mountain is chiseled away then the first second of eternity will have passed." You must think that's a hell of a long time. Personally, I think that's a hell of a bird. 14 years on GetDare! Last edited by Demon Thief; 12-20-2009 at 11:57 PM. Reason: Spelling Mistake

12-21-2009, 12:03 AM	#9
will9022 Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2009 Location: New York, USA Posts: 156	this is getting really interesting! cant wait for the next part!!

12-21-2009, 07:55 AM	#10
dan1mal Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2009 Posts: 144	more more plz! this is really good

12-16-2009, 02:59 PM	#11
DragonofDares Junior Member Join Date: Feb 2007 Posts: 20	continue Please continue!! really good

12-16-2009, 04:53 PM	#12
Mr. Green Junior Member Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: Canada B.C. Posts: 24	This is spool great please continue

12-16-2009, 11:48 PM	#13
Demon Thief getDare Devil Join Date: Dec 2009 Location: In the US Posts: 1,012	Working on it... Part 4 Mark stared at Alex holding his camera phone for a fraction of a second. Then he ran across the room toward Alex, meaning to take the phone away from him and delete the photo. "Not so fast," Alex said with a small laugh. Mark came to a stop about halfway across the room. "If you come any closer, I'll send this to my mom. "What do you want from me?" Mark asked. "You to do my bidding for the rest of the time my mom's away," Alex answered. "I thought that if I did that one thing for you, you'd let me off the hook!" Mark protested. "Yeah, but there was nothing that would hold you to your word." Mark thought, He's right! I shouldv'e just done what he wanted for the rest of the night. Now he has me for as long as he wants. If I can get that phone somehow... Alex interrupted Mark's train of thought: "Now go back to my mom's room and take that off. Come back in your underwear and I'll see if I can find a few things for you to do." Mark obeyed without question. He hoped he could find a way out of this situation. He hurried back to Alex's room to await his next orders. "Now Mark, I want you to-" when he was interrupted by a loud ringing sound. The doorbell! Mark thought. __________________ "How many seconds in eternity?" And the shepherd's boy says, "this is a mountain of pure diamond. It takes an hour to climb it and an hour to go around it. Every hundred years a little bird comes and sharpens its beak on the diamond mountain. And when the entire mountain is chiseled away then the first second of eternity will have passed." You must think that's a hell of a long time. Personally, I think that's a hell of a bird. 14 years on GetDare!

12-17-2009, 03:32 AM	#14
xava Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2008 Posts: 146	i like it so far u have me checking every few hours hoping u have posted more lol so keep it up x __________________ 18/m bi - feel free to pm me if u want to chat/ask me anything check out my story! and let me know if u think i should post another 1 http://www.getdare.com/bbs/showthread.php?t=32755 likes: masturbation, risky, cum, nudity, wedgie, a little humiliation and some anal dislikes: poo, messy, family, cross dressing, very public

12-17-2009, 11:11 AM	#15
DareMad Account Banned Join Date: May 2009 Location: UK Posts: 24	please continue it's great!