Girls night!!! hehe

UltimateDarer32 · 03-11-2008, 11:57 PM

sry my thing got hacked i didnt right that

Davros · 03-12-2008, 10:19 AM

Seems a little rushed. Maybe slow down, take your time and spread it out a little more. Otherwise, great story

MistressMarina · 03-12-2008, 11:25 AM

It sounds like a good story, but please watch your grammar. The entire thing seems like one long run-on sentence.

MM

HSsportsstar 1 · 03-12-2008, 02:34 PM

Yea grammer and you seem a little rushed. Explain everything a little more. Sounds like it is going to be great! Please write more!

F_SL · 03-12-2008, 04:12 PM

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Originally Posted by UltimateDarer32

ok so i was like 10 when this haened its kinda like the forum made by sharkleg so here it goes...

My friend and I were at home by ourselves, and we were going to be for about 5 hours. We got bored quickly, and decided to play a game of TorD. It started out on her turn first. She asked, "Truth or dare?"
Of course, I said dare. She replied, "I dare you to only wear your underwear and bra for the rest of the game."
Now my friend was kinda perverted, but I took my shirt and pj pants off. it was my turn again, and she said dare, so i said, "I dare YOU to only wear your underwear and bra for the rest of the game."
So, she stripped down completely, and I said "Hey, I said only pj pants and pj shirt off."
She said, "I know, but I feel more comfortable like this."
"O.K.", I thought... She asked, "T or D", and I said dare again. She told me to strip all the way down too, so I did after a few seconds.
"T or D", I asked, to which she replied, "T".
"OK, have you ever seen an other girls 'privates'?"
"No", she continued, "But I would like to...."
At this I felt really hot, but it was a nervous hot. It was my turn now. She said, "T or D?", and I answered dare. She dared me to be gay the rest of the night and to let her do anything to me... I complained a little then said, "Fine!"
I asked, "T or D?", and she answered "D", so i dared her to......

Here, I tried to fix it up a bit... Sorry if this offends you, mods can delete this if they deem it offensive.

MistressMarina · 03-13-2008, 07:20 AM

Actually, F_SL, you did more than edit the story. You saved it. While I do not necessarily believe that UD32's account got hacked, you did preserve the story in a better form. Kudos!

MM

Davros · 03-13-2008, 12:02 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by UltimateDarer32

sry my thing got hacked i didnt right that

Is it natural to be suspicious...?

03-11-2008, 11:57 PM	#1
UltimateDarer32 Junior Member Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: co Posts: 3	Girls night!!! hehe sry my thing got hacked i didnt right that __________________ You LintLicker!!! Last edited by UltimateDarer32; 03-12-2008 at 04:40 PM.

03-12-2008, 11:25 AM	#3
MistressMarina Junior Member Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: Aloha! Take a guess... Posts: 22 Blog Entries: 2	It sounds like a good story, but please watch your grammar. The entire thing seems like one long run-on sentence. MM Last edited by MistressMarina; 03-12-2008 at 12:07 PM.

03-12-2008, 10:19 AM	#2
Davros Account Banned Join Date: Aug 2007 Posts: 2,943	Seems a little rushed. Maybe slow down, take your time and spread it out a little more. Otherwise, great story

03-12-2008, 02:34 PM	#4
HSsportsstar 1 Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: in my house Posts: 115	Yea grammer and you seem a little rushed. Explain everything a little more. Sounds like it is going to be great! Please write more!

03-13-2008, 07:20 AM	#6
MistressMarina Junior Member Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: Aloha! Take a guess... Posts: 22 Blog Entries: 2	Actually, F_SL, you did more than edit the story. You saved it. While I do not necessarily believe that UD32's account got hacked, you did preserve the story in a better form. Kudos! MM