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tori what im leaving the collage why because i do not need education i inharited a lot of money and i guess i will come visit you across the steet some day.ok see you around selina.
What the heck's that? Two people talking?
"Tori?"
"What?"
"I'm leaving the college."
"Why?"
"Because I do not need education."
And that start is boring and unimaginative. There's no weight, no emotion, absolutely nothing. It doesn't feel like actual speech.
And the rest needs to be put through a spell-check.
If you need, maybe get a proof-reader/editor/helper.
Hope that helps.Posted 08-31-2010 at 01:53 PM by Slenderman - Doctor 
