Secrets at a boarding school [fiction]

xxjeadorexx19 · 11-20-2008, 02:21 PM

I was inspired today to write a story. Forgive me if I make some grammatical errors or if it isn't that good. Also it's a bit short, but more is to come!

Chapter 1: The introduction

My name is Carrie and I’m 18 years old. I’m about 5’6 and have dirty blonde hair and blue eyes. I play field hockey and lacrosse so I have a nice athletic body. I go to one of the many elite and prestigious boarding schools located in New England. The school I go to has about 350 students. Everyone at this school knows everyone’s business as well as everyone’s secrets. In the past four years I have gone there I have managed to keep one secret from everyone. This small secret consumes me. I love humiliating and degrading myself and I would occasionally dare myself small dares to complete. One day during study hall, everything changed.

I found myself sitting on my couch in my room casually doing my homework. All of a sudden an IM window popped up that caught my eye.

Billy08 · 11-20-2008, 02:22 PM

I'm liking the sound of this one.

Please continue...

HottayFerSure · 11-20-2008, 04:18 PM

sounds so good! continue!

interesting · 11-20-2008, 04:21 PM

This is what we call a tease.

And I don't want to rain on anyone's parade, but I think it is still early to call this one. I do like the fact that your presentation is clean and your grammar is good. It is short, as you mentioned, but you shouldn't be sorry about it.

One thing I've learned from doing performance art is that you never apologize for what you do. Your post is short - so be it. It's too winded - fair enough. It lacks humor - tough it up.

You only apologize if what you do offends people to a point that the work itself falls short of the offense taken. And I don't think you're offending anyone yet. Keep it up. I'm pulling for you here.

x.Emma.x · 11-21-2008, 10:24 AM

Ditto interesting. I have to share your sentiments.

xxjeadorexx19 · 11-21-2008, 09:13 PM

alright so a much much longer segment will be coming tomorrow night ( i go on thanksgiving break)

and thanks for the encouraging comments so far.

EmotionDynamic · 11-22-2008, 01:52 PM

Could be a good story, will wait and see

xxjeadorexx19 · 11-22-2008, 09:53 PM

Carrie looked up at her computer and noticed the IM was from a screen name she was not quite familiar with. Intrigued, she opened the IM and was surprised. The IM was a response to a personal ad she had placed on a website some months ago over the summer that had completely slipped her mind. She looked closely and read, "I read your post from awhile ago and found myself interested. If you are still interested in a master then respond to this message. Then I will send you a list of preliminary tasks. I would like you to complete these tasks and e-mail me afterwards.”
Carrie was shocked yet very, very interested. She replied hesitantly, “I would like to be your slave.” She tapped her fingers on the keyboard while she waited for a response. After what felt like hours, another IM from this mysterious person appeared asking if she was sure of what she was getting herself into. Without hesitation this time Carrie responded yes. Within a second a long response came up, “* Task no.1 : Wear a thong backwards for a whole day, making sure its riding you nicely. Only after 10pm may you take it off and hold the wet part in your mouth for 10 minutes. * Rules: Do not remove the thong, A skirt must be worn throughout the day, You must talk to/visit at least 10 people, and You must go shopping dressed like this.
* Punishment: If at any time you back out, you must sit on the toilet with your panties on and wet yourself. Then you must wear them for 30 minutes.” “Make sure to e-mail me at the end of the day with a picture of you with the thong in your mouth. I will be on tomorrow evening. Goodnight dear.”
She read through the IM and decided to do it. She went to bed barely able to contain her excitement for the upcoming day.

Next segment will be longer.

dared to perfection · 11-23-2008, 10:34 AM

i might have to make a note of this and come bk when there is alot more to read ...

otherwise i'll get disappointed and keep wanting more haha
good story

EmotionDynamic · 11-23-2008, 04:03 PM

As above, sounds promising but comes to us quite slowly

the_boy · 11-25-2008, 10:53 AM

as said before, sounds like a good start, if a little impractical, I just cant see her sending the person a pic of her face on the first day. It sounds like a stereotypical start to a blackmail story, but like interesting said, a good start to a blackmail story.

Justamale · 11-25-2008, 11:09 AM

Good start, Keep it flowing

flinton · 11-25-2008, 01:27 PM

keep it up im interested look forward to more.
good work

coolio5 · 11-25-2008, 02:39 PM

sounds good so far

only thing is you changed from first person to third person. choose which one you like and stick with it. otherwise it gets confusing.

other then that, great story

xxjeadorexx19 · 11-27-2008, 06:15 PM

thanks i didn't notice that....

well my next segment needs to be completed and then it'll be up... it's been a very busy thanksgiving vacation...

11-20-2008, 02:21 PM	#1
xxjeadorexx19 Account Banned Join Date: Jul 2008 Location: usa Posts: 13	Secrets at a boarding school [fiction] I was inspired today to write a story. Forgive me if I make some grammatical errors or if it isn't that good. Also it's a bit short, but more is to come! Chapter 1: The introduction My name is Carrie and I’m 18 years old. I’m about 5’6 and have dirty blonde hair and blue eyes. I play field hockey and lacrosse so I have a nice athletic body. I go to one of the many elite and prestigious boarding schools located in New England. The school I go to has about 350 students. Everyone at this school knows everyone’s business as well as everyone’s secrets. In the past four years I have gone there I have managed to keep one secret from everyone. This small secret consumes me. I love humiliating and degrading myself and I would occasionally dare myself small dares to complete. One day during study hall, everything changed. I found myself sitting on my couch in my room casually doing my homework. All of a sudden an IM window popped up that caught my eye.

11-20-2008, 02:22 PM	#2
Billy08 Junior Member Join Date: Oct 2008 Location: UK (South East) Posts: 12	I'm liking the sound of this one. Please continue... __________________ I Want To Play A Game Limits: Pain, Friends & Family (I'm ok with Piss & Poo but I can't eat or drink the stuff.) Other than that, let the games begin!

11-20-2008, 04:18 PM	#3
HottayFerSure Account Banned Join Date: Jul 2008 Location: NJ Posts: 73	sounds so good! continue! __________________ It's man devouring man, my dear, and who are we to deny it in here?- Sweeney Todd.

11-21-2008, 10:24 AM	#5
x.Emma.x Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: UK Posts: 223	Ditto interesting. I have to share your sentiments. __________________ Luv George Sampson sooo much!!! George Sampson & Eoghan Quigg are fittt!! 18/F mistress from England! Xx Looking to mistress any guys or girls that are together. So I'd dare two guys, two girls, or one guy and one girl. If there's two of you and you're interested, let me know! I'd LUVV to mistress you!

11-22-2008, 01:52 PM	#7
EmotionDynamic Junior Member Join Date: Nov 2008 Posts: 10	Could be a good story, will wait and see __________________ Atmosphere electric

11-20-2008, 04:21 PM	#4
interesting getDare Succubus Join Date: Sep 2008 Location: Somewhere between here and there, in Quebec, Canada... Posts: 1,662 Blog Entries: 27	This is what we call a tease. And I don't want to rain on anyone's parade, but I think it is still early to call this one. I do like the fact that your presentation is clean and your grammar is good. It is short, as you mentioned, but you shouldn't be sorry about it. One thing I've learned from doing performance art is that you never apologize for what you do. Your post is short - so be it. It's too winded - fair enough. It lacks humor - tough it up. You only apologize if what you do offends people to a point that the work itself falls short of the offense taken. And I don't think you're offending anyone yet. Keep it up. I'm pulling for you here.

11-21-2008, 09:13 PM	#6
xxjeadorexx19 Account Banned Join Date: Jul 2008 Location: usa Posts: 13	alright so a much much longer segment will be coming tomorrow night ( i go on thanksgiving break) and thanks for the encouraging comments so far.

11-22-2008, 09:53 PM	#8
xxjeadorexx19 Account Banned Join Date: Jul 2008 Location: usa Posts: 13	Carrie looked up at her computer and noticed the IM was from a screen name she was not quite familiar with. Intrigued, she opened the IM and was surprised. The IM was a response to a personal ad she had placed on a website some months ago over the summer that had completely slipped her mind. She looked closely and read, "I read your post from awhile ago and found myself interested. If you are still interested in a master then respond to this message. Then I will send you a list of preliminary tasks. I would like you to complete these tasks and e-mail me afterwards.” Carrie was shocked yet very, very interested. She replied hesitantly, “I would like to be your slave.” She tapped her fingers on the keyboard while she waited for a response. After what felt like hours, another IM from this mysterious person appeared asking if she was sure of what she was getting herself into. Without hesitation this time Carrie responded yes. Within a second a long response came up, “* Task no.1 : Wear a thong backwards for a whole day, making sure its riding you nicely. Only after 10pm may you take it off and hold the wet part in your mouth for 10 minutes. * Rules: Do not remove the thong, A skirt must be worn throughout the day, You must talk to/visit at least 10 people, and You must go shopping dressed like this. * Punishment: If at any time you back out, you must sit on the toilet with your panties on and wet yourself. Then you must wear them for 30 minutes.” “Make sure to e-mail me at the end of the day with a picture of you with the thong in your mouth. I will be on tomorrow evening. Goodnight dear.” She read through the IM and decided to do it. She went to bed barely able to contain her excitement for the upcoming day. Next segment will be longer.

11-23-2008, 10:34 AM	#9
dared to perfection getDare Devil Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: the best parts of the UK Posts: 1,090 Blog Entries: 1	i might have to make a note of this and come bk when there is alot more to read ... otherwise i'll get disappointed and keep wanting more haha good story __________________ If I receive a PM saying 'frustrate' I will wear my chastity belt for a duration of their choice. OR if no duration is stated, just for the remainder of that day. I'm on FetLife too - ask and I will tell!

11-23-2008, 04:03 PM	#10
EmotionDynamic Junior Member Join Date: Nov 2008 Posts: 10	As above, sounds promising but comes to us quite slowly __________________ Atmosphere electric

11-25-2008, 10:53 AM	#11
the_boy Senior Member Join Date: May 2008 Location: Canada Posts: 106	as said before, sounds like a good start, if a little impractical, I just cant see her sending the person a pic of her face on the first day. It sounds like a stereotypical start to a blackmail story, but like interesting said, a good start to a blackmail story. __________________ I Am The Boy person one: "cake i said, Let them have Cake!!!!!" person two: The cake is lie. The cake is lie!!!!! Last edited by the_boy; 11-26-2008 at 11:07 AM.

11-25-2008, 11:09 AM	#12
Justamale Member Join Date: Nov 2008 Location: Wales, Uk Posts: 87 Blog Entries: 4	Good start, Keep it flowing __________________ Limits Loves Anal Play Bondage stockings High Heels Chains Whips Nipple tourture Orgasm denial Wax play Breath Play Hair pulling And Many Many more Limits Hates Sick and Scat Incest

11-25-2008, 01:27 PM	#13
flinton Junior Member Join Date: Aug 2008 Posts: 5	keep it up im interested look forward to more. good work

11-25-2008, 02:39 PM	#14
coolio5 Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: Pennsylvania, U.S. Posts: 223 Blog Entries: 1	sounds good so far only thing is you changed from first person to third person. choose which one you like and stick with it. otherwise it gets confusing. other then that, great story

11-27-2008, 06:15 PM	#15
xxjeadorexx19 Account Banned Join Date: Jul 2008 Location: usa Posts: 13	thanks i didn't notice that.... well my next segment needs to be completed and then it'll be up... it's been a very busy thanksgiving vacation...