Fiction: Next-Level Training - Page 3

Kira · 06-25-2013, 12:35 AM

I like it so far (halfway through part 4 now) but I've got some problems with the way you're describing Valerie. You are describing her as not attractive because she's fat, and as if she is less of a person because of this. That kind of stuff offends me even though the rest of the story is interesting and well written.

skjelner · 09-04-2013, 08:06 PM

The story is told from David's point of view. He is indeed not very attracted to Valerie because of her weight, so the writing reflects this. However, Amber knows this too, which is one of the reasons she chose to "rent" him to Valerie as his ultimate training.

Personally, I find all types and shapes of women attractive. No offense meant.

06-25-2013, 12:35 AM	#31
Kira Account Banned Join Date: Jun 2010 Location: On the internet Posts: 118 Blog Entries: 3	I like it so far (halfway through part 4 now) but I've got some problems with the way you're describing Valerie. You are describing her as not attractive because she's fat, and as if she is less of a person because of this. That kind of stuff offends me even though the rest of the story is interesting and well written. __________________ \| 21 \|\| Female \| Currently wearing: nothing Bra size E cup EU, partially shaven pussy Likes* pain, humiliation, orgasm control Limits illegal, scat, family Toys http://www.getdare.com/bbs/blog.php?b=68189

09-04-2013, 08:06 PM	#32
skjelner Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2009 Posts: 141	The story is told from David's point of view. He is indeed not very attracted to Valerie because of her weight, so the writing reflects this. However, Amber knows this too, which is one of the reasons she chose to "rent" him to Valerie as his ultimate training. Personally, I find all types and shapes of women attractive. No offense meant. __________________ My stories ~ Erin's Hell [IN PROGRESS] (kidnapping, forced slavery, anal, rape, group sex, mutilation, brutality, underaged, watersports, scat, torture, bondage) Bellevue Dare Club: Anal Night [IN PROGRESS] (dares, anal, group sex, underaged, watersports, bondage) Next-Level Training [FINISHED] (S&M, BDSM, slave torture, group sex, anal, public humiliation)