[Fiction] Twin Slaves (Will have incest...)

[SeeNaked]

Hey there, I’ve been reading some stories on here, and I thought that I would add my own. So here is the first part of mine… if there is enough like, I’ll write more. :P

Twin Slaves: Chapter 1

Timothy and Tina Colburn were normal kids, or maybe, normal twins would be more like it, but then again, maybe not. They were twins, both 16, both with brown hair and brown eyes. They both liked most of the same things, they had their birthday parties on the same day. They had the same friends, but they were eachother’s best friend. They told eachother just about everything. They shared a room, and had since they were old enough to get out of their crib. Oh, and they almost never fought or argued.

Although, being near identical twins, they did have their differences in appearance. The most noticable, of course, being that Tim was a guy, and Tina was a girl… Tim was 5’11” tall, three inches taller than Tina. His shoulders were wider also, his muscles had grown tremendously over the past year or two, after having spent the last two summers at their Grandparents farm, helping their grandfather. Tina on the other hand, had stayed a bit smaller, topping her growth at 5’8”. Her breasts had grown to be B cup, and her curves had developed nicely. Most of the time, she stayed around the house, helping her mum, or visited some close friends. She had attracted plenty of attention at school, but was never very outgoing or ‘boysy’ as Tim called it. She liked boys, but didn’t go out of her way to get close to them. Plus, Tim helped keep the bullies and jerks away.

One more comment about them… Although they lived together and were with eachother nearly constantly… they didn’t push anything sexual. They never even thought about the other that way. And while they were very close… it wasn’t as if they showed themselves to eachother. In fact, they hadn’t seen eachother naked since they were somewhere around 8 or 9.

They had just begun a new year of school, going into the tenth grade. Their old school had been falling apart, and in need of so many repairs that the city had built a new one, and this was the first year that they would be in the new building.

School had begun three weeks ago, and was going as usual for the twins: Get up early, grab lunches, jump on the bus and go to school. Classes before lunch, classes after lunch, Home…

The only difference that either of them noticed, or even really payed any attention to at all was that a new family had moved in across the street from them, and had a boy that was in senior high. But he kept to himself and neither of them had much to do with him aside from a “Hi” now and again.

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It was just after lunch on Monday, and both of the twins had different classes for the next period, so Tim waved as he left the lunch room with some of his friends. Tina waved back at him, finished her lunch, and headed out of the room, chatting with a girl from her class.

Tina headed straight for her locker, humming a song, she needed some books for next period, and when she got to it, she unlocked it and popped the door open. It took her only a few moments to collect the book and notebooks she needed, and she was about to close the door again when she noticed an envelope stuck through the door of her locker. With a glance around to see if anyway was looking, she took it, “hmm… I wonder what this is…”

The envelope was plain on the backside, and she flipped it over. Across the front was written, “Open when you get home…. Show me to no one” Confused, she flipped the envelope over a few times, and then, with a shrug, put it back in the locker, with her bag. Wondering what was in the envelope, she headed to next class.

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After his last class for the day, Tim headed to the shower and locker room to change his clothes for his sports practice. The room was crowded with guys changing or already changed and heading outside. Tim opened his locker and took out his uniform, then jogged into the changing room.

He stripped down quickly, his naked form revealing itself in the mirror on the wall. He slipped his shirt on and went to put his pants on when he noticed a piece of paper stuck to the inside of them with a pin. He shook his head Just another prank

On the piece of paper was a few words, “Expect a text on your phone when you get home…read it and do as it says”

Tim was confused, but he still figured it was some dumb prank that the guys were playing… he crumpled the paper up and stuffed it in his Jeans pocket, then left to practice.

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After Tim’s practice and Tina was finished with her last class, they met in front of the school, as they always did, and got on the bus for the ride home. “I got an A on the quiz from last Friday” Tina said, “I was one of only three…”

Tim high fived her, “great, but you always do well in school… I got some sort of dumb prank played on me today…”

She chuckled and looked at him, “What kind of prank?”

He laughed too, “Someone put a piece of paper in my pants for practice, said I would get a text when I got home… totally weird”

Tina nodded, and then remembered that she had the letter from her locker in her book bag. Both of them had received something… she opened her mouth to tell Tim about it, but decided not to, like the envelope said. Probably a dumb prank, like Tim’s.

[Sweet270]

Alright alright interesting, lets hear some more!

[truth]

i see where this is going and keep it up good writing

[Komodo Jones]

OK from what I've read I'm sad to say several mechanical errors. Even though I just mainly sped through it I didn't notice any spelling errors. However, despite that you have gramattical errors, it's not so bad that it takes away from the story as it's still very easy to read. Just maybe spell check it and look for gramattical errors mainly in the quotes, including commas and punctuation where they need to be.
As for content, very good. You are beginning with a good pace. You are taking the time to introduce us to the characters both physically and personality wise. You're not rushing into sexual matters right off the bat, like some of the stories on this site. So just keep going at the rate you're going and you should be fine.
Look forward to see where this thing ends up.

[SeeNaked]

Thank you for the constructive criticism Komodo... I'll try to do better with my next part, which should be up tonight.

[truth]

Originally Posted by SeeNaked

Thank you for the constructive criticism Komodo... I'll try to do better with my next part, which should be up tonight.

helz ya since i read the first part ive been checking every few hours

[misspiggy7]

Originally Posted by SeeNaked

Although, being near identical twins, [/i]

time for a biology lesson:
Fraternal twins refers to when two eggs are fertilized, though many believe it refers to when twins do not look alike.

Identical twins refers to when one egg is fertilized and it splits into two babies. (the scientific term being mono-zygotic.)

Although the term "identical" can also mean:
"exactly alike; incapable of being perceived as different", when it is in relation to twins, it means:"derived from a single egg or ovum"

Tim and Tina are opposite sexes, so they cannot be identical.

(I only know this because my older sisters are Fraternal twins, that look almost exactly alike)

[misspiggy7]

but i do like the story

[trust-no-1]

Please finish this story, its soooo good

[jb_149]

pleaase finish your story its really gooooood

[lordbob]

this story is awsome keep it up