Fiction: Kristy’s new school – you choose her fate - Page 32

zac · 01-01-2012, 08:43 AM

amazing!

what a great story!

slutjuice · 01-01-2012, 09:42 AM

Great job! I am very impressed on how this story worked out. Also, the fact that you put two endings, made it a good ending for everyone!
Thank you!

SeeNaked · 01-01-2012, 11:08 AM

Wow Shy, I know you said two endings, and you promised me a good one either way...but now, how the hell am I supposed to choose between the two!?

I've not voted yet, but I shall when I get done with this post and managed to figure out which I'm going to choose :P...

I'm just going to throw my own comment in here as I have before, on my thoughts about our two 'choices' and what I see going for and against each one.

I find it hard to choose because...well...I love Sean and Kristy, and both of them end up with them together. The first is a more romantic ending, implying that they will be in a good relationship, bonded by love. The second tells you that Sean isn't the innocent that you thought he was this whole time...which adds an element of distrust and an 'uhoh' moment when you realize he may have just been playing her to get on her good side and in her trust, but it still ends with him having her.

The First ending, at first glance, appears to be 'better' for Kristy. But if you think about it, is she ever really going to be 'over' this? Didn't she get some enjoyment? Isn't it possible that she and Sean would have further adventures, just the two of them, with dares and such with him as the dominant one? I can certainly see that happening, but with her full consent.

With the second one, it implies that all that will be happening for sure, but it casts Sean in a more evil light...he did all this stuff just to get her as his own, as another 'pet'. He could force her back into all of this again, without her consent. However, I like to think that Sean would be a good master to her, not a heartless bastard, and I don't think that his love was all false...I think he actually cares for her. So I really can't say that there is anything WRONG with the second ending.

Feel free to discuss the points I've brought up, if you want :P...I'm going to vote now.

Oh, and I wanted to Thank Sky, so very much, for thanking Me in her afterword. I only got into this story rather near the end, not all that long ago, and just did my best to be helpful. So, Thank you Shy...

Nebeel · 01-01-2012, 11:17 AM

Aaaaa i finaly got the time to read the rest of the story and i must say that this is really good

Good job

And i am curious on what you will do next.

So Happy New Year and hope to see more soon

Hunterman36 · 01-02-2012, 01:33 AM

Great job, well done, amazingly written Im sad to see the story end it was so great. I hope that you continue to write and keep producing masterpieces like this. Thank you for the great story from start to finish.

shynessincarnate · 01-03-2012, 12:02 PM

Oh! *attempts to not push the view poll results button* Hehe, couldn't stop myself. 60:40 I wonder which one will win in the end. Keep 'em coming! I'm actually surprised I've resisted the urge to vote myself so far. But I've decided to leave it entirely up to you guys!

Again: thank you for all the wonderful feedback. I've already started working on a second (very different) story.

EvilBunny · 01-03-2012, 07:32 PM

Awwwww, I got a shoutout. How nice.

I think the first ending is stronger, but ends things kind of abruptly. It would be nice to see a sort of "epilogue", to see where everyone ends up after all of this.

Nice story, really neat idea.

female-from-denmark · 01-04-2012, 12:06 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by EvilBunny

I think the first ending is stronger, but ends things kind of abruptly. It would be nice to see a sort of "epilogue", to see where everyone ends up after all of this.

Nice story, really neat idea.

I agree. An epilogue would be nice

shynessincarnate · 01-04-2012, 01:02 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by EvilBunny

Awwwww, I got a shoutout. How nice.

I think the first ending is stronger, but ends things kind of abruptly. It would be nice to see a sort of "epilogue", to see where everyone ends up after all of this.

Nice story, really neat idea.

Quote:

Originally Posted by female-from-denmark

I agree. An epilogue would be nice

Hum, a fair request. I shall think about it.

shynessincarnate · 01-09-2012, 04:54 AM

Well, it would seem as though the first ending is the one to have pulled through. I must admit myself surprised, at first it looked like it would win by a landslide however, in the end the votes were close. I'm just about to send a request that the story gets placed in the completed section. I've decided not to write an epilogue as I prefer you guys imagine what has happened to everyone involved in the end.

'till next time!

Shy

12356416514a · 01-11-2012, 04:14 PM

The second ending is better, the first one makes me want to punch in their faces.

Aliciai<3u · 01-29-2012, 10:09 AM

I missed vote since my iPod locked me out for about a month and my pc sill broken

daremaster 1 · 01-29-2012, 10:11 AM

Dangit, I wanted the 2nd one.

Oh well, it will still be good.

ffgamer · 02-17-2012, 08:51 PM

damn i cant believe i missed on voting for the ending all cause my laptop was absent

still it was a great story just sad it had to end i saw an ending where kirsty joined the gang would have been better myself

shynessincarnate · 02-18-2012, 06:35 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Aliciai<3u

I missed vote since my iPod locked me out for about a month and my pc sill broken

Quote:

Originally Posted by daremaster 1

Dangit, I wanted the 2nd one.

Oh well, it will still be good.

Quote:

Originally Posted by ffgamer

damn i cant believe i missed on voting for the ending all cause my laptop was absent

still it was a great story just sad it had to end i saw an ending where kirsty joined the gang would have been better myself

Wow, I hadn't seen that some replies had come in since the story got into the completed section.

Too bad your laptops/ipods spazzed out on you. The votes were really close though and unfortunately, if there's a winning side, there will be a losing side.

A new story is in progress though (ok I am working on two right now, but I need to kick myself in the ass to sit down and write now that I don't have threat of punishment looming over my head if I don't get a part posted in time).

I expect that one of the two will be posted soonish and there will be reader participation once again.

The second one, I need to actually finish before I post...

Thanks again for your support and participation!

Shy

View Poll Results: Which ending should I keep for this story?
Suggested ending #1	24	53.33%
Suggested ending #2	21	46.67%
Voters: 45. You may not vote on this poll

01-01-2012, 09:42 AM	#467
slutjuice Distinguished Member Join Date: Apr 2011 Location: USA Posts: 523	Great job! I am very impressed on how this story worked out. Also, the fact that you put two endings, made it a good ending for everyone! Thank you! __________________ FAVORITE!: lesbian stuff (I have lovely female roommate to help) Likes: pain, friends, public, holding items, long term, ruined orgasms, bondage. Limits: illegal, some permanent, pics, cam. PM me anything you want me to write with sharpie on my body.

01-01-2012, 11:08 AM	#468
SeeNaked Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: Illinois Posts: 170	Amazing, Awesome, just plan crazily good! :D Wow Shy, I know you said two endings, and you promised me a good one either way...but now, how the hell am I supposed to choose between the two!? I've not voted yet, but I shall when I get done with this post and managed to figure out which I'm going to choose :P... I'm just going to throw my own comment in here as I have before, on my thoughts about our two 'choices' and what I see going for and against each one. I find it hard to choose because...well...I love Sean and Kristy, and both of them end up with them together. The first is a more romantic ending, implying that they will be in a good relationship, bonded by love. The second tells you that Sean isn't the innocent that you thought he was this whole time...which adds an element of distrust and an 'uhoh' moment when you realize he may have just been playing her to get on her good side and in her trust, but it still ends with him having her. The First ending, at first glance, appears to be 'better' for Kristy. But if you think about it, is she ever really going to be 'over' this? Didn't she get some enjoyment? Isn't it possible that she and Sean would have further adventures, just the two of them, with dares and such with him as the dominant one? I can certainly see that happening, but with her full consent. With the second one, it implies that all that will be happening for sure, but it casts Sean in a more evil light...he did all this stuff just to get her as his own, as another 'pet'. He could force her back into all of this again, without her consent. However, I like to think that Sean would be a good master to her, not a heartless bastard, and I don't think that his love was all false...I think he actually cares for her. So I really can't say that there is anything WRONG with the second ending. Feel free to discuss the points I've brought up, if you want :P...I'm going to vote now. Oh, and I wanted to Thank Sky, so very much, for thanking Me in her afterword. I only got into this story rather near the end, not all that long ago, and just did my best to be helpful. So, Thank you Shy... __________________ 22/Male/Dominant with a streak of sub that pops up every once in a while. -Personal Likes: Discreet body writing, very light Anal, some pics/cam, light spanking....others depend on my mood. -Personal Limits: Blood, Permanent, Family/friends (Custom rules apply...PM me for details), Animals, Children (Duh!) I am looking for a female slave, My NEW AND IMPROVED ad is Here....that page also has my likes and limits for what I will do with slaves....along with tons of other info. Last edited by SeeNaked; 01-01-2012 at 11:13 AM.

01-03-2012, 12:02 PM	#471
shynessincarnate Distinguished Member Join Date: Jun 2011 Location: Eastern Canada Posts: 612 Blog Entries: 1	Oh! attempts to not push the view poll results button Hehe, couldn't stop myself. 60:40 I wonder which one will win in the end. Keep 'em coming! I'm actually surprised I've resisted the urge to vote myself so far. But I've decided to leave it entirely up to you guys! Again: thank you for all the wonderful feedback. I've already started working on a second (very different) story. __________________ Quirky, fun & happy 32/F/bicurious/sub Likes and stuff My stories: Kristy's New School (completed), The Dungeon of Dark Desires (in progress) By the way, did you know that you can now Ask Me (Almost) Anything? Please read carefully before sending me a PM: I don't do pics or vids, I don't have kik, I am not looking for a Dom or sub, I don't want to play TorD and I don't wish to give you a punishment. If you ask any of these, I promise that I won't answer nicely.

01-09-2012, 04:54 AM	#475
shynessincarnate Distinguished Member Join Date: Jun 2011 Location: Eastern Canada Posts: 612 Blog Entries: 1	The final tally Well, it would seem as though the first ending is the one to have pulled through. I must admit myself surprised, at first it looked like it would win by a landslide however, in the end the votes were close. I'm just about to send a request that the story gets placed in the completed section. I've decided not to write an epilogue as I prefer you guys imagine what has happened to everyone involved in the end. 'till next time! Shy __________________ Quirky, fun & happy 32/F/bicurious/sub Likes and stuff My stories: Kristy's New School (completed), The Dungeon of Dark Desires (in progress) By the way, did you know that you can now Ask Me (Almost) Anything? Please read carefully before sending me a PM: I don't do pics or vids, I don't have kik, I am not looking for a Dom or sub, I don't want to play TorD and I don't wish to give you a punishment. If you ask any of these, I promise that I won't answer nicely.

01-01-2012, 08:43 AM	#466
zac getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Nov 2010 Location: under your bed. Posts: 265	amazing! what a great story!

01-01-2012, 11:17 AM	#469
Nebeel Member Join Date: Sep 2011 Location: Norway Posts: 40	Aaaaa i finaly got the time to read the rest of the story and i must say that this is really good Good job And i am curious on what you will do next. So Happy New Year and hope to see more soon

01-02-2012, 01:33 AM	#470
Hunterman36 Distinguished Member Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: the moon Europa Posts: 646 Blog Entries: 2	Great job, well done, amazingly written Im sad to see the story end it was so great. I hope that you continue to write and keep producing masterpieces like this. Thank you for the great story from start to finish.

01-03-2012, 07:32 PM	#472
EvilBunny Member Join Date: Feb 2011 Posts: 45	Awwwww, I got a shoutout. How nice. I think the first ending is stronger, but ends things kind of abruptly. It would be nice to see a sort of "epilogue", to see where everyone ends up after all of this. Nice story, really neat idea.

01-11-2012, 04:14 PM	#476
12356416514a getDare Devil Join Date: Jul 2009 Posts: 1,190	The second ending is better, the first one makes me want to punch in their faces. __________________ [Game]Guess the song name Yes I'm a BOY!!! Stop asking me

01-29-2012, 10:09 AM	#477
Aliciai<3u Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2011 Location: England(you know the place where out football sucks) Posts: 113	I missed vote since my iPod locked me out for about a month and my pc sill broken __________________ Sex: male country: England innocence: none sexuality: bi I am not currently looking for a master or a slave I am epic fail Please say yes to grammer Thank you Sean Viking- DEATH OR GLORY Me/you- death please mister

01-29-2012, 10:11 AM	#478
daremaster 1 getDare God Join Date: Apr 2011 Location: <3 Posts: 3,032	Dangit, I wanted the 2nd one. Oh well, it will still be good.

02-17-2012, 08:51 PM	#479
ffgamer getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Mar 2011 Posts: 287	damn i cant believe i missed on voting for the ending all cause my laptop was absent still it was a great story just sad it had to end i saw an ending where kirsty joined the gang would have been better myself __________________ Likes: Age play, Pet play, orgasm denial,Cross dressing,pee maybe more. dislikes: Public, pain, family, anal, scat, messy