Boys Dare To Dare [Fiction]

[HypoMonkey]

It was a Friday night and Thomas' big 15th birthday party, the it was his birhday yesterday, he had loads of expensive and woundeful presents for his 15th yet the best one was the fact that his parents and his brother and sister were going away for the weekend leaving him home alone with Daniel, Charley and Sam. It was the first time Thomas' had been trusted this much, and it was the first time his friends wanted to play a serious game of Truth or Dare.
Thomas had palyed simply kiddie versions of the game regually and this was how it started as soon as Thomas' family left. Sam suggested as it was Thomas' birthday he would give the first dare and pick the first person.
"Charley" Thomas said with meaning and determination, yet his eyes told the boys he didn't know what to say. He paused, uncertain, for an uncomfortable 5minutes, "I dare you..." said a sudden voice that left Thomas' mouth causing everyone to jump, "I dare you too suck Daniels toe for 5minutes non-stop." Daniel played alot of rugby, and today was his big match, Daniel was one nown not to shower afterwards and was still in his sweaty rugby socks. Daniel pulled of his sock, a heavy putid smell thick in the air. His big toe nail was black and his skin dry and pealing. Daniel waved his foot in Charley's face, wriggling his toes. Charley looked disgusted, but slowly lowered his mouth around the minging toe. Daniel giggled instantly while Sam freaked out. Charley moaned disgusted at the taste of the peeeling object in his mouth.

[cj123]

wasn't bad, could be better, would like to hear more

3/10

[glue]

i really like this

the spelling maybe just quick typing

but i hope this continues

7.5/10

[pdj1877]

Good I think you should write more