Little Sister Becomes a Slave

[Bangin]

Originally Posted by equilibrium

I'm sorry, but I can't read this story, when it hasn't be formatted properly.

the proper way is:

"This is a example." said John Smith.
Jane Doe looked surprised "Oh!" She exclaimed, " Look, proper English!"
"Look," John smith says, " I can even write action as well."
And with that statement, John smith leant in and pressed his lips to Jane's.

If you want, I could be your beta reader/mentor?
A beta reader reads through work and fixes problems.

"This is an example." said John Smith.
Jane Doe looked surprised. "Oh!" She exclaimed, " Look, proper English!"
"Look," John Smith said, " I can even write action as well."
And with that statement, John Smith leant in and pressed his lips to Jane's.


Everyone has a different style of writing and although this is less conventional and standard, it still works. I'm enjoying this story and am looking forward to more!