Fiction: The Lost Girl

dantejay · 11-06-2009, 08:41 PM

delete thread please

chubbsman7 · 11-07-2009, 10:18 AM

This has potential. An... intersting beginning, I'm going to have to agree. You definitely need to incorporate the girls name soon, as you should know you just couldn't be calling her "the lost girl" this whole time (I suppose you could, but think of what people could say.). Keep this up. I think this has potential. But be careful on how you progress with the story. Don't rush to fast. Great grammar and spelling, interesting story line... Could be great story!

madison.larimore · 11-07-2009, 10:22 AM

Intresting start, hope to read more

nich · 11-10-2009, 01:50 PM

this was a good start, why did it get deleted?

11-06-2009, 08:41 PM	#1
dantejay Junior Member Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: New York Posts: 1	The Lost Girl delete thread please Last edited by dantejay; 11-09-2009 at 03:41 PM.

11-07-2009, 10:18 AM	#2
chubbsman7 Member Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: Nowhere. Posts: 93	This has potential. An... intersting beginning, I'm going to have to agree. You definitely need to incorporate the girls name soon, as you should know you just couldn't be calling her "the lost girl" this whole time (I suppose you could, but think of what people could say.). Keep this up. I think this has potential. But be careful on how you progress with the story. Don't rush to fast. Great grammar and spelling, interesting story line... Could be great story! __________________ The Facility: http://www.getdare.com/bbs/showthread.php?t=33916 If you want to contact me for any reason, please do so by emailing me here: eroticismliterature@gmail.com . Thank-You, and have a nice day. Funny, I have two pesonalities! I found out a few weeks ago. Personality A is the normal way I act. Personality Two swings the door a little to far. If you understand me.

11-07-2009, 10:22 AM	#3
madison.larimore Member Join Date: Nov 2009 Location: Uk Posts: 65 Blog Entries: 4	Intresting start, hope to read more __________________ Live each day like it's the last, Have fun and enjoy what it has to offer I am what they class a PURE Lesbian! Means no Guys to Im me asking to Dom them!

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11-10-2009, 01:50 PM	#4
nich Junior Member Join Date: Jun 2009 Posts: 15	this was a good start, why did it get deleted?