Fiction: 3 boys sleepover

NatureBoy · 06-20-2010, 09:09 PM

I'll start of with a little about the three boys

Nick: 14 years old, athletic, has a girlfriend

Marc: 14 years old, athletic, has a girlfriend

Troy: 14 years old, althetic, likes a girl

CHAPTHER 1

Everyone arrives at Nick's house for the sleepover. They start off by swimming. After that they play video games for about an hour. They soon get board and start thinking of things to do. Marc suggests they play truth or dare In the living room.
Troy says " Sure I don't care what we do."
Nick says " Yeah I'll play."
Marc says " ok,who starts."
Nick says " I will ."
It starts off with boaring easy truth or dares like what kind of underwear do you wear, what is the farthest that you ever went with a girl and stuff like that. But then thinks get more interresting.
Marc said " We should make this more interresting." It was Troys turn to be dared.
" Troy I dare you to switch underwear with Nick." said Marc. Troy and Nick looked at eachother.
They both said "ok." Nick went into the dinning room and troy went into the front room. Marc switched the underwear for them and handed Troy's to Nick and Nick's to Troy. This was wierd for them because Troy wears boxerbriefs and Nick wears boxers. Now it was Marc's turn to get dared. "Since my parents are not home I dare you to jump in the pool naked." said Nick. Marc's eyes got wider. He said nervously " ok ."

To Be Continued....

nuditydudity · 06-20-2010, 09:26 PM

This has some potential. Writing style reminds me of The English Patient with everything in the present tense, like as it is happening (he walks to the window, etc).

Pretty classic start, will be interested to see where you take this.

Keep writing!

NatureBoy · 06-21-2010, 08:27 PM

Chapter 2

Marc starts taking off his clothes as the other two boys watch. Marc ran outside and into the pool. It was freezing cold and he quickly got out and dried off. After Marc got dressed it was Nick's turn.
"Measure your penis infront of us." said Marc.
Nick said "do i have to?"
"Its a dare you have to."said Marc. Nick went into the other room to get a ruler. He came back and pulled his pants down and got erect. Nick put the ruler next to his penis.
"Its about 5 and a half inches. Now it was Troys turn.
" I dare you to measure your penis."
"ok" said troy and Nick handed him the ruler.
Troy siad " Its about 7 inches."
"Marc Now I dare you to measure your penis" said Troy.
Marc said "Its about 6 inches."

To Be Continued....

glue · 06-22-2010, 01:24 AM

I usually love these stories but this is just too rushed, its lacking a little explanation and detail to it. to continue i would say it really needs to be a longer chapter and to have the longer explanations

3/10

will9022 · 06-22-2010, 10:09 AM

I agree. It seems like it has much potential, but it is rushed and does not have any details

NatureBoy · 06-23-2010, 07:45 PM

Chapter 3

After everyone measured their dicks they continued the game.
"Nick truth or dare" said Marc.
Nick said "Dare."
"I dare you to get naked for the rest of the night." said Marc.
"Thats not fair if I get nake dand you guys aren't." said Nick.
Troy said " Fine I'll get naked to."
Marc said " i guess i will to." So all the boys got naked and continued to play.
Nick said " Troy I dare you to give me a handjob."
Troy yelled " NO I'm not gay!"
Nick said " None of us are but it's a dare you have to do it."
Troy said " If I have to, then i'll do it." Troy began to give Nick a hand job and Nick really enjoyed it. After that Troy Said
" That wasn't that bad, I dare you and Nick to do 69."
Nick and Marc " Do we have to."
Yeah because I had to give Nick a hadjob."
Nick and Marc " Fine."
Nick and Marc did 69 for a minute and they both enjoyed it a lot.

To Be Continued....

Dare Man · 06-23-2010, 07:59 PM

Enjoying the story. Would give it a higher rating than3/10, but I agree with the fact that it should be slowed down, given more detail, and maybe show peoples thoughts and emotions a bit more...... But keep writing it!

Jellybones · 06-23-2010, 09:23 PM

I am sorry to say but I agree with Glue. There is no detail, its way to rushed and when they all give each other the same things its boring.

06-20-2010, 09:09 PM	#1
NatureBoy Junior Member Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Pennsylvania Posts: 9	3 boys sleepover I'll start of with a little about the three boys Nick: 14 years old, athletic, has a girlfriend Marc: 14 years old, athletic, has a girlfriend Troy: 14 years old, althetic, likes a girl CHAPTHER 1 Everyone arrives at Nick's house for the sleepover. They start off by swimming. After that they play video games for about an hour. They soon get board and start thinking of things to do. Marc suggests they play truth or dare In the living room. Troy says " Sure I don't care what we do." Nick says " Yeah I'll play." Marc says " ok,who starts." Nick says " I will ." It starts off with boaring easy truth or dares like what kind of underwear do you wear, what is the farthest that you ever went with a girl and stuff like that. But then thinks get more interresting. Marc said " We should make this more interresting." It was Troys turn to be dared. " Troy I dare you to switch underwear with Nick." said Marc. Troy and Nick looked at eachother. They both said "ok." Nick went into the dinning room and troy went into the front room. Marc switched the underwear for them and handed Troy's to Nick and Nick's to Troy. This was wierd for them because Troy wears boxerbriefs and Nick wears boxers. Now it was Marc's turn to get dared. "Since my parents are not home I dare you to jump in the pool naked." said Nick. Marc's eyes got wider. He said nervously " ok ." To Be Continued.... Last edited by NatureBoy; 06-21-2010 at 08:27 PM.

06-20-2010, 09:26 PM	#2
nuditydudity Distinguished Member Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: USA Posts: 573	This has some potential. Writing style reminds me of The English Patient with everything in the present tense, like as it is happening (he walks to the window, etc). Pretty classic start, will be interested to see where you take this. Keep writing! __________________ 9 Years on getDare!! Sing like you know the lyrics Dance like no one is watching Live like you were dying Love like you've never been hurt before

06-22-2010, 01:24 AM	#4
glue Distinguished Member Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Oxford, UK Posts: 735 Blog Entries: 6	I usually love these stories but this is just too rushed, its lacking a little explanation and detail to it. to continue i would say it really needs to be a longer chapter and to have the longer explanations 3/10 __________________ WATCH OUT FOR A GLUE RATING OUT OF TEN glue would like to tell everyone reading this to stay sticky as life is to short to become unstuck I'm the Simon Cowell of GetDare Please add me at: Skype: Glue101 8 Years On Getdare!!!!!!

06-23-2010, 07:59 PM	#7
Dare Man Member Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Ontario, Canada Posts: 60	Response Enjoying the story. Would give it a higher rating than3/10, but I agree with the fact that it should be slowed down, given more detail, and maybe show peoples thoughts and emotions a bit more...... But keep writing it! __________________ This is Dare Man, so give me a dare. Likes: Dice, Ice, Mild X-dressing, Messy Hate: Pain, Masturbation, Public, Gay, Family, Friends Feel free to chat with me I'll give you some dares and always ready for some dares from you.

06-23-2010, 09:23 PM	#8
Jellybones Member Join Date: Dec 2009 Posts: 61	I am sorry to say but I agree with Glue. There is no detail, its way to rushed and when they all give each other the same things its boring. __________________ 22/m/US

06-21-2010, 08:27 PM	#3
NatureBoy Junior Member Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Pennsylvania Posts: 9	Chapter 2 Marc starts taking off his clothes as the other two boys watch. Marc ran outside and into the pool. It was freezing cold and he quickly got out and dried off. After Marc got dressed it was Nick's turn. "Measure your penis infront of us." said Marc. Nick said "do i have to?" "Its a dare you have to."said Marc. Nick went into the other room to get a ruler. He came back and pulled his pants down and got erect. Nick put the ruler next to his penis. "Its about 5 and a half inches. Now it was Troys turn. " I dare you to measure your penis." "ok" said troy and Nick handed him the ruler. Troy siad " Its about 7 inches." "Marc Now I dare you to measure your penis" said Troy. Marc said "Its about 6 inches." To Be Continued....

06-22-2010, 10:09 AM	#5
will9022 Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2009 Location: New York, USA Posts: 156	I agree. It seems like it has much potential, but it is rushed and does not have any details

06-23-2010, 07:45 PM	#6
NatureBoy Junior Member Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: Pennsylvania Posts: 9	Chapter 3 After everyone measured their dicks they continued the game. "Nick truth or dare" said Marc. Nick said "Dare." "I dare you to get naked for the rest of the night." said Marc. "Thats not fair if I get nake dand you guys aren't." said Nick. Troy said " Fine I'll get naked to." Marc said " i guess i will to." So all the boys got naked and continued to play. Nick said " Troy I dare you to give me a handjob." Troy yelled " NO I'm not gay!" Nick said " None of us are but it's a dare you have to do it." Troy said " If I have to, then i'll do it." Troy began to give Nick a hand job and Nick really enjoyed it. After that Troy Said " That wasn't that bad, I dare you and Nick to do 69." Nick and Marc " Do we have to." Yeah because I had to give Nick a hadjob." Nick and Marc " Fine." Nick and Marc did 69 for a minute and they both enjoyed it a lot. To Be Continued....