Pubity

new timer · 08-23-2009, 04:46 AM

This story is going to be about a teenage boy going through pubity and his life during this time. I hope you enjoy it!

Background Info:

Ben(main character)
age: 11
sex: male
country: australia
hair: brown
skin: tanned
body: slightly muscled

Sean(ben`s friend)
age:11
sex:male
country:australia
hair:blonde
skin:tanned
body:slightly muscled

Officelover · 08-23-2009, 06:08 AM

*hep hem* Do you mean puberty?

(Officelover is now Google)

milkdat · 08-23-2009, 12:38 PM

I cant help but feel maybe 11 is a little young for characters on a story on here but we will have to see where it goes to really make that judgment :|

glue · 08-23-2009, 03:06 PM

yeah i agree 13 would be a little more like the age

but good start 4/10

new timer · 08-24-2009, 04:56 AM

It was Monday morning when I saw the first hair, it was just above my dick. I was embaressed that it was there as I didn`t think any one in the year had hair down there. I thought hair only grew on your head! So I went over to my desk and grabbed my sissors. I put the sissors at the bottom of the hair and cut it off. I pulled my pants back up and headed off to school.

When I got home I called my best friend sam to come over, he agreed happily and said he would be over in five.

'DingDong' I raced to the front door and standing there was my best friend Sam. "Hey, Sam" I said. "Hey Ben, do you want to go play truth or dare in your room?" he asked. "Sure, I will race you to my room." I said. "Fine, but last one there goes first for truth or dare." Sam put in. "Ok, Go" I yelled. We raced down the hallway and ran up the stairs two at a time. Unluckley I came last meaning I was going to be first for truth or dare. I walked into my room and shut the door behind me so my parents would not see what we were doing. "Truth or Dare" asked Sam. "Truth" I answered. "Have you ever mesured your dick?" Sam asked. "Of corse not" I answered, "Truth or Dare". "Truth" said Sam. "Have you ever mesured your dick" I asked. "Yes" said Sam sheepishly. "How long was it?" I questioned. "5 and a half inches long" He said "Truth or Dare". "Dare" I answered. "I dare you to pull down you pants and undies and mesure your dick" Sam said. "Fine" I agreed as I pulled down my pants and undies revealing my hard dick. It was tanned and slightly curved. It was bare skin with not a hair in sight. I picked up a ruller and layed it against my dick. It was cool to the skin. It said my dick was 6 inches long meaning it was longer than Sams. Secretly I was quite happy with that. "How long?" asked Sam. "6 inches" I replied. "Truth or Dare". "Dare" replied Sam." I dare you to pull down you pants and lift up your t-shirt!" I said So Sam pulled down his pants and lifted up his t-shirt.

Picasso · 08-25-2009, 03:08 AM

Do not see this as critisism, as I would not be able to set up such stories,
but I just wonder: why do some off you use such young main characters?
When I was eleven I played soldier and stuff, not truth or dare and girls were far off my interests (or maby I was just a little bit immature xD )

BucsFan · 08-25-2009, 03:31 AM

You need to work on your structure. USE paragraphs. It makes it easier to read. and don't rush your story, the characters are moving way too fast.

and i really don't like the ages that you chose, and where does sam live compared to ben to be allowed to walk to his house when he is only eleven.. further more, wasn't sam's name supposed to be sean?

mattie · 08-25-2009, 12:36 PM

and how many eleven year olds are 6in?

Dylan xX · 08-25-2009, 04:08 PM

seriously to the above to comments.....

Spelling 1/10

Background 3/10

Writing mechanics 2/10

6/30 or 1/5 tisk tisk dude.

callofduty4 · 08-25-2009, 06:04 PM

good story keep up add longer parts please

iTunes · 08-25-2009, 11:44 PM

Have to agree with mattie but good story other then that, please proceed

08-23-2009, 04:46 AM	#1
new timer Junior Member Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: australia Posts: 2	Pubity This story is going to be about a teenage boy going through pubity and his life during this time. I hope you enjoy it! Background Info: Ben(main character) age: 11 sex: male country: australia hair: brown skin: tanned body: slightly muscled Sean(ben`s friend) age:11 sex:male country:australia hair:blonde skin:tanned body:slightly muscled __________________ 14/M/AUS/GAY Feel Free To Dare Me.

08-23-2009, 06:08 AM	#2
Officelover Truth or Dare Enthusiast Join Date: May 2008 Location: New England Posts: 2,602 Blog Entries: 107	hep hem Do you mean puberty? (Officelover is now Google) __________________ 20 Trans Femme Nonbinary Ass Collector Writes Poetry On Aluminum Foil with Gold Gel Pens Fills Mason Jar with Vodka I'm Doing A Cleanse White Kid with Black Nails

08-23-2009, 03:06 PM	#4
glue Distinguished Member Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Oxford, UK Posts: 735 Blog Entries: 6	yeah i agree 13 would be a little more like the age but good start 4/10 __________________ WATCH OUT FOR A GLUE RATING OUT OF TEN glue would like to tell everyone reading this to stay sticky as life is to short to become unstuck I'm the Simon Cowell of GetDare Please add me at: Skype: Glue101 8 Years On Getdare!!!!!!

08-24-2009, 04:56 AM	#5
new timer Junior Member Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: australia Posts: 2	Chapter 1: First Signs It was Monday morning when I saw the first hair, it was just above my dick. I was embaressed that it was there as I didn`t think any one in the year had hair down there. I thought hair only grew on your head! So I went over to my desk and grabbed my sissors. I put the sissors at the bottom of the hair and cut it off. I pulled my pants back up and headed off to school. When I got home I called my best friend sam to come over, he agreed happily and said he would be over in five. 'DingDong' I raced to the front door and standing there was my best friend Sam. "Hey, Sam" I said. "Hey Ben, do you want to go play truth or dare in your room?" he asked. "Sure, I will race you to my room." I said. "Fine, but last one there goes first for truth or dare." Sam put in. "Ok, Go" I yelled. We raced down the hallway and ran up the stairs two at a time. Unluckley I came last meaning I was going to be first for truth or dare. I walked into my room and shut the door behind me so my parents would not see what we were doing. "Truth or Dare" asked Sam. "Truth" I answered. "Have you ever mesured your dick?" Sam asked. "Of corse not" I answered, "Truth or Dare". "Truth" said Sam. "Have you ever mesured your dick" I asked. "Yes" said Sam sheepishly. "How long was it?" I questioned. "5 and a half inches long" He said "Truth or Dare". "Dare" I answered. "I dare you to pull down you pants and undies and mesure your dick" Sam said. "Fine" I agreed as I pulled down my pants and undies revealing my hard dick. It was tanned and slightly curved. It was bare skin with not a hair in sight. I picked up a ruller and layed it against my dick. It was cool to the skin. It said my dick was 6 inches long meaning it was longer than Sams. Secretly I was quite happy with that. "How long?" asked Sam. "6 inches" I replied. "Truth or Dare". "Dare" replied Sam." I dare you to pull down you pants and lift up your t-shirt!" I said So Sam pulled down his pants and lifted up his t-shirt. __________________ 14/M/AUS/GAY Feel Free To Dare Me.

08-25-2009, 03:31 AM	#7
BucsFan Member Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Pencilvania Posts: 94	You need to work on your structure. USE paragraphs. It makes it easier to read. and don't rush your story, the characters are moving way too fast. and i really don't like the ages that you chose, and where does sam live compared to ben to be allowed to walk to his house when he is only eleven.. further more, wasn't sam's name supposed to be sean? __________________ Likes~~Crossdressing, Humiliation, Degrading, Climax Control, Bladder Control, Semi-Public Limits~~NO Public, NO Poo, NO Pain (slight might be ok) NO Heavy Anal, NO Illegal/Permenant/Defacing, NO Family Please keep in mind that I live with my family. If you wish to dare me, please respect this and base the dares around my family to where I can do them when I am alone, or able to do it in my room.

08-23-2009, 12:38 PM	#3
milkdat Member Join Date: May 2008 Posts: 84	I cant help but feel maybe 11 is a little young for characters on a story on here but we will have to see where it goes to really make that judgment :\|

08-25-2009, 03:08 AM	#6
Picasso Junior Member Join Date: Jul 2009 Posts: 15	Do not see this as critisism, as I would not be able to set up such stories, but I just wonder: why do some off you use such young main characters? When I was eleven I played soldier and stuff, not truth or dare and girls were far off my interests (or maby I was just a little bit immature xD )

08-25-2009, 12:36 PM	#8
mattie Member Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Yorkshire Uk Posts: 56	and how many eleven year olds are 6in?

08-25-2009, 04:08 PM	#9
Dylan xX Distinguished Member Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: U.S.A Posts: 934 Blog Entries: 7	seriously to the above to comments..... Spelling 1/10 Background 3/10 Writing mechanics 2/10 6/30 or 1/5 tisk tisk dude. __________________ Gone

08-25-2009, 06:04 PM	#10
callofduty4 Member Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: dont worry Posts: 76	good story keep up add longer parts please

08-25-2009, 11:44 PM	#11
iTunes Junior Member Join Date: Mar 2009 Posts: 17	Have to agree with mattie but good story other then that, please proceed