09-05-2010, 05:38 PM | #16 |
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Your actually doing fine. However the only reason why I commented like I did was because, yes you gave out what the notes were, but now what? A little bit more coninuation before a break would have been good. The suggestion I guess I'm making is, watch the length and where you break your chapters out.
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09-05-2010, 10:28 PM | #17 |
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Looking forward for more. Its looking good.
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09-05-2010, 11:16 PM | #18 |
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Ah, thank you very much for the tip KisuneSoldier. I understand what you are saying, and i'll try to watch that next time. After I posted i felt like i should have added more, but i didn't have the time to Edit it...
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09-05-2010, 11:35 PM | #19 |
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no offense but if you don't have the time to edit don't post it. You want you readers drawn in and you want them yearning for the next post. I guess im agreeing with Kisunesoldier in a way but not in a way too ... i would have broken before you did not try to make it longer ... it would have been a cliff hanger something to make them want to come back to see what was on the note or on the cell phone for that matter ... just take your time and write how you want but if your gonna break it up into chunks do so with the intent of leaving that last little bit unknown.
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09-06-2010, 11:06 AM | #20 |
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Really good continue! this story is getting on the right track
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09-07-2010, 07:08 AM | #21 |
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this is a great story, really developing into something good
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09-07-2010, 02:47 PM | #22 |
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GOOD!!!! post more!
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09-08-2010, 11:56 AM | #23 |
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please go on want to here more
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09-14-2010, 12:30 AM | #24 |
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more more more more more
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10-02-2010, 11:13 AM | #25 |
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Amazing can't wait for another chapter
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10-02-2010, 09:44 PM | #26 |
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Please continue. It's a great story!
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10-07-2010, 10:57 AM | #27 |
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Guess this story is discontinued
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10-07-2010, 07:25 PM | #28 |
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My guess. That's quite sad. This was a great story and definitely had a lot going for it. Oh well. I won't be mad if you continue by the way XD!
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10-07-2010, 08:06 PM | #29 |
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Your wrong!!
This isn't discontinued! I've just had so much going on, I havn't had a chance to finish the next section... don't worry! it's coming! |
10-08-2010, 06:32 AM | #30 |
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