[Fiction] Slave:the time has come

[mijman]

Slave: the time has come
Jon Andrews was waiting. He was waiting for the unknown.
Ever since his father Mark Andrews had fallen into debt with a man known as Ricardo. The debt was of £100000. Mark had borrowed it to fund his lengthy divorce fees and to buy a new house for him and his son. He had planned to pay it off quickly but soon after he was made redundant. This had immediately led to extreme difficulties with paying off the loan. The decision Mark made was to pretend he owed no money and keep out of trouble. Sadly trouble, in the form of Ricardo, was looking for him. Then one night Ricardo arrived at Marks doorstep. A normal person would of just knocked on the door and waited. However Ricardo was no ordinary person. Being as he is Ricardo kicked the door in.
After a short struggle Ricardo and his men quickly had Mark and Jon cuffed. The strange thing was Ricardo said one thing “as soon as Jon turns 16 I will come for him, do not resist me taking him, if you so choose too, Jon will die.”
At that time Jon was 14.
However, it is now the eve of Jon’s 16th birthday. Mark had almost forgotten the significance of this particular birthday. Jon had not. As the minutes ticked by, Jon thought about the path ahead. What will happen?

[mijman]

cn sum 1 comment

[Lovesfundares]

looks good. keep going

[glue]

i think this has some breathing room and lots of progression still to be had

ok two comments now. want to continue

6/10

[dareing G]

this is a god start and i think it has lots of potential post some more

[EnigmaNZ]

I would have taken him then and there lol. Why wait until 16, both might have done a runner. As ricardo I wouldn't be worrying about age of consent. To yanks here, most of the west except you have it about 16. The more repressive countries and the US sic have it at 18+ if at all.

[mijman]

next chapter appearing soon...pm me with any ideas as i will insert the into the story

[mijman]

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There was a loud knock at the door. “Open up!!” A voice shouted. Andrew gave a long stare towards Jon. The door was shoved open. Two men walked in to the room. At first it was quite, suddenly all hell broke loose. Andrew ran in he had a crowbar in his hand, he swung....BANG. Andrew Slowly dropped to the floor, blood pouring from his stomach. Then there was silence. Ricardo was standing over Andrews’s body. “There’s no one to save you now”. Ricardo sneered to Jon. The only sound Jon could muster was a faint whimper.
“Take him to the car” Ricardo ordered to Mitch, who was one of Ricardo’s men.
Just as Mitch was about to put Jon on the back seat of the car, Ricardo shouted “do you really think that worthless runt deserves to sit on seats, put him in the trunk where he belongs?”
“No sir” Mitch replied. Mitch then opened the trunk of the Audi RS6, before putting the ragged body of Jon in the car, he placed a leather gag in his mouth, he then casually threw Jon into the trunk of the car.
Jon was awake. He looked around, all he could see was...nothing just darkness. He could hear the sound of an engine and the crunch of tyres on gravel. He tried to scream out...then he realised he was wearing a leather gag, with a ball which went in his mouth. He was confused, almost delirious.
The car stopped. Jon could hear voices.
“Take him to the processing wing” Ricardo ordered.