Fiction: Katie's Punishment

Hmm · 11-11-2009, 08:15 PM

Hey guys. Thanks for the comments and suggestions - I couldn't find any other place to post it before. But I have re-posted it int the R18 section as Katie's Punishment (Reposted)

Come by http://getdare.com/bbs/showthread.php?t=35411 and visit it there. I may be adding more in the near future.

Thanks.

owned · 11-11-2009, 09:05 PM

W...well it was really creepy since this is basically about her father brutally raping her and then beating her until she was most Likely bleeding and would have scars for weeks....maybe if you changed it to her boyfriend or someone besides her dad and made it a little less severe...

Hmm · 11-11-2009, 10:21 PM

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Originally Posted by owned

W...well it was really creepy since this is basically about her father brutally raping her and then beating her until she was most Likely bleeding and would have scars for weeks....maybe if you changed it to her boyfriend or someone besides her dad and made it a little less severe...

I switched it up a bit. Is that better? Let me know how you like it.

chubbsman7 · 11-13-2009, 06:12 PM

Kind of creepy. Hee hee.

But this definitely isn't appropriate for just anybody to look at. This needs to be moved into the R18 (for rape) because of all the... well, face it. This is just brutally rape.

Please, a Mod (not saying that they have to, or telling anybody what to do.) should move this into the R18 Section.

Officelover · 11-13-2009, 08:24 PM

I have to say I actually liked it. I thought it was well written. But what are you guys talking about, her father?

chubbsman7 · 11-13-2009, 08:36 PM

Previously (before she/he edited it) she had her father walk into the room, not a guy named non-chalantly "Dick", hee hee. I don't think it's necessarily bad, but it probably needs to be moved into the R18 Section, and is one of the more brutal writings I've read.

molten man · 11-14-2009, 02:37 PM

is there something missing here??

Hmm · 11-14-2009, 03:01 PM

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Originally Posted by molten man

is there something missing here??

yeah, but you found it: the story - I reposted it under R18

ok

molten man · 11-14-2009, 03:08 PM

is it that much only..

was it cut paste from here??

Hmm · 11-15-2009, 08:18 PM

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Originally Posted by molten man

is it that much only..

was it cut paste from here??

Yes it was. See my reply to you there. Again, thanks for the comments.

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11-11-2009, 08:15 PM	#1
Hmm Account Banned Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: mars Posts: 30	Katie's punishment IS Now under section R18 Hey guys. Thanks for the comments and suggestions - I couldn't find any other place to post it before. But I have re-posted it int the R18 section as Katie's Punishment (Reposted) Come by http://getdare.com/bbs/showthread.php?t=35411 and visit it there. I may be adding more in the near future. Thanks. Last edited by Hmm; 11-14-2009 at 03:03 PM. Reason: maybe not the right area

11-13-2009, 06:12 PM	#4
chubbsman7 Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: Kingdom of Talossa Territory, Antarctica. Posts: 231	Kind of creepy. Hee hee. But this definitely isn't appropriate for just anybody to look at. This needs to be moved into the R18 (for rape) because of all the... well, face it. This is just brutally rape. Please, a Mod (not saying that they have to, or telling anybody what to do.) should move this into the R18 Section. __________________ ...And So Summer Starts (Sean's View) ...And So Summer Starts (Lauren's View) With these stories, I'll try to update every Monday or so. It depends on my work schedule, really. But I'll post as often (as appropriate, definitely not everyday!) as I can! Also: A side project of mine: The In The Black Fedora

11-13-2009, 08:24 PM	#5
Officelover Truth or Dare Enthusiast Join Date: May 2008 Location: New England Posts: 2,602 Blog Entries: 107	I have to say I actually liked it. I thought it was well written. But what are you guys talking about, her father? __________________ 20 Trans Femme Nonbinary Ass Collector Writes Poetry On Aluminum Foil with Gold Gel Pens Fills Mason Jar with Vodka I'm Doing A Cleanse White Kid with Black Nails

11-13-2009, 08:36 PM	#6
chubbsman7 Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: Kingdom of Talossa Territory, Antarctica. Posts: 231	Previously (before she/he edited it) she had her father walk into the room, not a guy named non-chalantly "Dick", hee hee. I don't think it's necessarily bad, but it probably needs to be moved into the R18 Section, and is one of the more brutal writings I've read. __________________ ...And So Summer Starts (Sean's View) ...And So Summer Starts (Lauren's View) With these stories, I'll try to update every Monday or so. It depends on my work schedule, really. But I'll post as often (as appropriate, definitely not everyday!) as I can! Also: A side project of mine: The In The Black Fedora

11-11-2009, 09:05 PM	#2
owned Account Banned Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: usa Posts: 182 Blog Entries: 1	W...well it was really creepy since this is basically about her father brutally raping her and then beating her until she was most Likely bleeding and would have scars for weeks....maybe if you changed it to her boyfriend or someone besides her dad and made it a little less severe...

11-14-2009, 02:37 PM	#7
molten man Distinguished Member Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Mumbai, India Posts: 946	is there something missing here?? __________________ MMan 26/m/straight Skype: molten_man007 Kik: molten_man

11-14-2009, 03:08 PM	#9
molten man Distinguished Member Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Mumbai, India Posts: 946	is it that much only.. was it cut paste from here?? __________________ MMan 26/m/straight Skype: molten_man007 Kik: molten_man