Fiction: The Lost Girl

dantejay · 11-06-2009, 08:41 PM

delete thread please

chubbsman7 · 11-07-2009, 10:18 AM

This has potential. An... intersting beginning, I'm going to have to agree. You definitely need to incorporate the girls name soon, as you should know you just couldn't be calling her "the lost girl" this whole time (I suppose you could, but think of what people could say.). Keep this up. I think this has potential. But be careful on how you progress with the story. Don't rush to fast. Great grammar and spelling, interesting story line... Could be great story!

madison.larimore · 11-07-2009, 10:22 AM

Intresting start, hope to read more

nich · 11-10-2009, 01:50 PM

this was a good start, why did it get deleted?

11-06-2009, 08:41 PM	#1
dantejay Baby Member Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: New York Posts: 1	The Lost Girl delete thread please Last edited by dantejay; 11-09-2009 at 03:41 PM.

11-07-2009, 10:18 AM	#2
chubbsman7 Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: Kingdom of Talossa Territory, Antarctica. Posts: 231	This has potential. An... intersting beginning, I'm going to have to agree. You definitely need to incorporate the girls name soon, as you should know you just couldn't be calling her "the lost girl" this whole time (I suppose you could, but think of what people could say.). Keep this up. I think this has potential. But be careful on how you progress with the story. Don't rush to fast. Great grammar and spelling, interesting story line... Could be great story! __________________ ...And So Summer Starts (Sean's View) ...And So Summer Starts (Lauren's View) With these stories, I'll try to update every Monday or so. It depends on my work schedule, really. But I'll post as often (as appropriate, definitely not everyday!) as I can! Also: A side project of mine: The In The Black Fedora

11-07-2009, 10:22 AM	#3
madison.larimore Member Join Date: Nov 2009 Location: Uk Posts: 71 Blog Entries: 4	Intresting start, hope to read more __________________ Live each day like it's the last, Have fun and enjoy what it has to offer I am what they class a PURE Lesbian! Means no Guys to Im me asking to Dom them!

11-10-2009, 01:50 PM	#4
nich Junior Member Join Date: Jun 2009 Posts: 21	this was a good start, why did it get deleted?