Fiction: The Church Retreat

tordman · 09-06-2011, 08:07 PM

Hello GetDare Members,
This is my first attempt at writing a story. I've been reading them for a few years now and I think it's time I tried it for myself. So here it is...

"...in Jesus' name, amen."
Finally, morning service is over. I thought it would never end.*
"We will meet back here for lunch at noon. You are free to explore the grounds until then."
This is going to be an awesome retreat. No parents and hardly any supervision all weekend.
"Hey Ben! Wanna go walk around with us?"
It's Kailee, the cutest girl in the whole church. I've had a crush on her for a few months now.
"Yeah, sure."
Her friend, Beth, is with her she's nice but not nearly as attractive as Kailee.*
"Oh, and Beth was wondering if you could invite Chris too."
"Okay, I'll go ask him."
Chris has been one of my best friends for a few years now and I'm rooming with him all weekend.
"Hey Chris, Kailee and Beth wanna go walk around with us and see what there is to do on the campgrounds."
"I don't know, Ben. I was gonna go unpack."
"Come on! You can do that later. Just do me this favor. You know I'd do the same for you."
"Alright, fine. But you owe me."
We found the girls waiting right be the door.
"Where do you guys want to check out first?" I said.
"How about the lake?" Kailee replied.
We all agreed and set off towards the lake...

Sorry it's kind of short but I want to see if people like the way I write or if there's anything I need to change. All comments and constructive criticism are appreciated.

daredevil2 · 09-07-2011, 09:55 PM

i like this keep going

tordman · 09-10-2011, 08:31 AM

I'm not the type of writer that's gonna say "I need this many replies before I post again," but a little more feedback would be nice. However, the story continues...

"Where do you guys want to check out first?" I said.
"How about the lake?" Kailee replied.
We all agreed and set off towards the lake.

The path to the lake was down a long, winding trail hidden from the rest of the campground by dense trees.
"So what do you guys think of the retreat so far?" I asked to break the silence.
"It's been alright but also kinda boring," Kailee answered.
"It's a church retreat. What did you expect?" Chris said.
"I don't know but it definitely hasn't been as good as our last one, right Beth?"
"Not even close. But you never know. It's not over yet."
"Wait, what happened on the last retreat?" Chris and I both asked.*
We hadn't been able to go because we had a big football game that weekend. Now I was starting to wish I had gone.
"Well... It wasn't so much the retreat as it was what we did in our free time," Kailee said, hardly answering our question.

By this time, we had reached the lake. The area around the lake was surrounded by tall trees and at the far end of the lake there was a little shack.
"Let's check out what's inside that shack!" Beth shouted.
We all followed her to the other side of the lake.

Inside the shack, it looked bigger than it did from the outside. It was carpeted and there were a few chairs strewn about. There was, also, two tiny windows on the sides but other than that, it was empty. We all took a seat and got comfortable. It was a pretty nice, secluded place to hangout.
"So, you wanna tell us what happened in your "free time" at the last retreat?" I asked the girls.
"Should we tell em?" Beth asked Kailee.
"Well the last retreat started out pretty boring too." Kailee told us.
"So what happened?!?" Chris and I both shouted, dying to know the answer.
"Beth and I decided to make it a little more interesting by playing a game called Truth or Dare..."

Once again, any suggestions would be great. Let me know what you guys think.

big_k · 09-11-2011, 08:09 PM

Loving this story so far, has a ton of potential

coldnorth · 09-11-2011, 08:25 PM

cool tell us more pppppppppplease

BelgianDare · 09-11-2011, 11:08 PM

Continue the good work!

Difficulty_10 · 09-12-2011, 10:39 AM

Good so far. Church is a great scenario for T or D.

tordman · 09-12-2011, 08:01 PM

Thanks for the comments guys! I'll try to have another part up either tomorrow or the next day. PM me if you have any ideas for the story. I'm open to suggestions

tordman · 09-13-2011, 08:42 PM

Thank you guys for the support. It really means a lot. So, as promised, the story continues...

"So what happened?!?" Ben and I both shouted, dying to know the answer.
"Beth and I decided to make it a little more interesting by playing a game called Truth or Dare."

"Isn't that game for, like, little kids?" I asked, surprised.
"Well, we play it a little differently..." Beth replied, looking at Kailee mischievously.
"What do you mean?" Chris asked and I wondered the same thing.
"We don't choose the same types of dares that little kids use and we changed some rules. It might be easier to explain if we just showed you. Would you like to play with us?" Kailee asked us "innocently."

To me this sounded like a no-brainer. Two attractive girls who wanted to play truth or dare in a secluded shack, hell yeah. I mean, what was the worst that could happen? The most extreme dare would probably to kiss someone. Hopefully, that would wind up being Kailee and I.
"Yeah, sure. I'm in," I said.
"Chris?" Beth asked hopefully.
"Uh, why not? So, what are the rules?"
Kailee explained, "No daring anyone to do something that will get them in trouble with the leaders and nothing too dangerous. Other than that, everything's fair game. And if you refuse to complete a dare or you lie when answering a question. You become the rest of the group's slave for the rest of the retreat."
"Okay," everyone agreed.

"So, who goes first?" I asked.
"How about you, Ben?" Kailee replied.
"Alright, Kailee. Truth or dare?"
"Truth."
"Do you like anyone at the moment?"
"As a matter of fact, I do."
Damn it! I should've asked who! Why am I so stupid?
"Chris, truth or dare?"
"Truth."
"How far have you gone with a girl?"
Wow. I think we skipped a couple steps here. This game is moving faster than I expected.
After hesitating a moment, Chris answered, "I got to second base with my ex-girlfriend last year."
"And what do you mean by second base?" Kailee asked, putting him on the spot even more.
"She let me feel her up and she gave me a handjob," Chris answered awkwardly.
Trying to move the game along, Chris asked, "Truth or dare, Beth?"
"Truth."
"How far have you been?"
Without flinching, she answered, "My ex-boyfriend and I gave each other oral."
"She isn't even a little embarrassed," I thought to myself. I wouldn't be that comfortable sharing stuff like that.
Shaken from my thoughts, Beth asked me, "Truth or dare, Ben?"
Not wanting to answer another question like that, I replied, "Dare."
Little did I know, this is where the game really started heating up...

Once again, all comments and suggestions are appreciated. Thanks for reading!
-tordman

tordman · 09-15-2011, 08:32 PM

The story continues...

Shaken from my thoughts, Beth asked me, "Truth or dare, Ben?"
Not wanting to answer another question like that, I replied, "Dare."
Little did I know, this is where the game really started heating up.

"I dare you to strip down to your boxers."
"What?!?" I exclaimed, not believing what I was hearing.
"Oh come on," Kailee said, "it's pretty much the same as wearing a bathing suit."
"I guess..."
Chris leaned over and whispered to me, "Hey, if you do this then think of what we can dare them to do."
That was all the encouragement I needed. I quickly shed my t-shirt and slipped off my shorts.
"This*isn't so bad. I'm a lot less hot now."
"I disagree..." Kailee half whispered to herself.

"So now it's my turn... Truth or dare, Beth?" I asked, hoping to get a little revenge.
"What the hell, dare me."
I thought for a second.
"I dare you to take off your shirt," I said a little awkwardly, not sure if she would actually do it.
Without the slightest hesitation, she slid her shirt off, sliding it over her cute, perky boobs hidden by her pink bra. Chris and I both were stunned for a few seconds. Did that actually just happen?
"Truth or dare, Kailee?" Beth asked while we were still in shock of what just occurred.
"I guess since everyone else is doing it, I'll take a dare."
"Well, I don't want to be the only girl who isn't fully clothed so why don't you strip down to your panties and bra."

Now I was in total shock. This had to be a dream. Things like this don't happen in real life, do they? Then, Kailee started removing her shirt slowly. She was a little more nervous than Beth but she didn't show any sign of wanting to back out. She was wearing a sexy black bra which looked incredible on her perfect, round boobs. She, then, began to lower her pants. Now she was a lot more hesitant.
Beth noticed and said, "What's the matter? Scared? You could always just back out and become our slave."
That helped her to make up her mind. She continued to slide her pants further down. Then I realized why she was so embarrassed about taking off her pants...

xiboy · 09-16-2011, 05:53 PM

Please Continue, your a good writer

daremaster 1 · 09-16-2011, 05:59 PM

This is some nice work, keep it up!

tordman · 09-17-2011, 11:49 PM

Thank you guys for the compliments! Just to let you know, I do plan on finishing this story and depending on how well it goes there might be a sequel. And now, the story continues...

She continued to slide her pants further down. Then I realized why she was so embarrassed about taking off her pants.

Underneath, she was wearing a tight, sexy, black thong. I was totally speechless. I never would've expected this to happen to me in a million years. Chris seemed like he was completely shocked too, but not Beth. Beth had a smug grin on her face like she had just cheated on a test and gotten away with it.
"I swear I don't normally wear things like this!"
"Then why are you wearing it now?" Chris managed to stutter out.
Beth quickly explained, "Well, on the last retreat, I dared Kailee to only pack thongs for the next retreat we went on."
"Believe me, I wouldn't be wearing this if it weren't for that dare.
Satisfied with the answer and extremely distracted by the view we were getting, Chris and I remained silent.

"Anyway, truth or dare, Chris?"
"........."
"Chris!"
"Wha... Oh, um dare."
"Hmmm..."
"Shit, I mean truth!"
"Nope. No changing your answer," Beth said sternly.
Chris wasn't happy about this but grudgingly gave in to Beth's rules.
"Well, seeing as you're the only one who hasn't lost clothes yet, your dare is to strip completely..." Kailee said, clearly wanting someone to be more embarrassed than herself.
"What?!? You can't dare me to do that!"
It kind of surprised me too. I did not expect a dare that extreme.
"I'm not finished yet! Your dare is to strip completely and go for a quick swim in the lake. And you are to leave your clothes off after the dare is completed."
Wow, now it was REALLY extreme.
"There's no way I'm doing that!"
"It's either that or become our slave for the rest of the retreat," Beth retorted.
"I guess I'll..."

Hope you enjoyed this chapter. I should have another one up soon. Let me know what you guys think.

darebunny22 · 09-18-2011, 12:01 AM

this is good, keep up the good work

BelgianDare · 09-18-2011, 02:41 AM

Superbe!! Thanks for the entertainment!

09-06-2011, 08:07 PM	#1
tordman Member Join Date: Apr 2007 Posts: 44	The Church Retreat Hello GetDare Members, This is my first attempt at writing a story. I've been reading them for a few years now and I think it's time I tried it for myself. So here it is... "...in Jesus' name, amen." Finally, morning service is over. I thought it would never end.* "We will meet back here for lunch at noon. You are free to explore the grounds until then." This is going to be an awesome retreat. No parents and hardly any supervision all weekend. "Hey Ben! Wanna go walk around with us?" It's Kailee, the cutest girl in the whole church. I've had a crush on her for a few months now. "Yeah, sure." Her friend, Beth, is with her she's nice but not nearly as attractive as Kailee.* "Oh, and Beth was wondering if you could invite Chris too." "Okay, I'll go ask him." Chris has been one of my best friends for a few years now and I'm rooming with him all weekend. "Hey Chris, Kailee and Beth wanna go walk around with us and see what there is to do on the campgrounds." "I don't know, Ben. I was gonna go unpack." "Come on! You can do that later. Just do me this favor. You know I'd do the same for you." "Alright, fine. But you owe me." We found the girls waiting right be the door. "Where do you guys want to check out first?" I said. "How about the lake?" Kailee replied. We all agreed and set off towards the lake... Sorry it's kind of short but I want to see if people like the way I write or if there's anything I need to change. All comments and constructive criticism are appreciated.

09-10-2011, 08:31 AM	#3
tordman Member Join Date: Apr 2007 Posts: 44	I'm not the type of writer that's gonna say "I need this many replies before I post again," but a little more feedback would be nice. However, the story continues... "Where do you guys want to check out first?" I said. "How about the lake?" Kailee replied. We all agreed and set off towards the lake. The path to the lake was down a long, winding trail hidden from the rest of the campground by dense trees. "So what do you guys think of the retreat so far?" I asked to break the silence. "It's been alright but also kinda boring," Kailee answered. "It's a church retreat. What did you expect?" Chris said. "I don't know but it definitely hasn't been as good as our last one, right Beth?" "Not even close. But you never know. It's not over yet." "Wait, what happened on the last retreat?" Chris and I both asked.* We hadn't been able to go because we had a big football game that weekend. Now I was starting to wish I had gone. "Well... It wasn't so much the retreat as it was what we did in our free time," Kailee said, hardly answering our question. By this time, we had reached the lake. The area around the lake was surrounded by tall trees and at the far end of the lake there was a little shack. "Let's check out what's inside that shack!" Beth shouted. We all followed her to the other side of the lake. Inside the shack, it looked bigger than it did from the outside. It was carpeted and there were a few chairs strewn about. There was, also, two tiny windows on the sides but other than that, it was empty. We all took a seat and got comfortable. It was a pretty nice, secluded place to hangout. "So, you wanna tell us what happened in your "free time" at the last retreat?" I asked the girls. "Should we tell em?" Beth asked Kailee. "Well the last retreat started out pretty boring too." Kailee told us. "So what happened?!?" Chris and I both shouted, dying to know the answer. "Beth and I decided to make it a little more interesting by playing a game called Truth or Dare..." Once again, any suggestions would be great. Let me know what you guys think. Last edited by tordman; 09-13-2011 at 07:57 PM. Reason: Name Mixup

09-12-2011, 10:39 AM	#7
Difficulty_10 Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2011 Location: U.S. Posts: 164	Good so far. Church is a great scenario for T or D. __________________ Limits: Permanent, Scat, Bestiality, Getting Arrested, Pics, Vids, Gay, Extreme Pain, Cross Dressing Will at least try everything else. I'm looking for people who are into real dares, not massively complicated, unrealistic, hours long forays into your masturbatory fantasies. PM me. I may be in the mood to be a slave or master.

09-13-2011, 08:42 PM	#9
tordman Member Join Date: Apr 2007 Posts: 44	Thank you guys for the support. It really means a lot. So, as promised, the story continues... "So what happened?!?" Ben and I both shouted, dying to know the answer. "Beth and I decided to make it a little more interesting by playing a game called Truth or Dare." "Isn't that game for, like, little kids?" I asked, surprised. "Well, we play it a little differently..." Beth replied, looking at Kailee mischievously. "What do you mean?" Chris asked and I wondered the same thing. "We don't choose the same types of dares that little kids use and we changed some rules. It might be easier to explain if we just showed you. Would you like to play with us?" Kailee asked us "innocently." To me this sounded like a no-brainer. Two attractive girls who wanted to play truth or dare in a secluded shack, hell yeah. I mean, what was the worst that could happen? The most extreme dare would probably to kiss someone. Hopefully, that would wind up being Kailee and I. "Yeah, sure. I'm in," I said. "Chris?" Beth asked hopefully. "Uh, why not? So, what are the rules?" Kailee explained, "No daring anyone to do something that will get them in trouble with the leaders and nothing too dangerous. Other than that, everything's fair game. And if you refuse to complete a dare or you lie when answering a question. You become the rest of the group's slave for the rest of the retreat." "Okay," everyone agreed. "So, who goes first?" I asked. "How about you, Ben?" Kailee replied. "Alright, Kailee. Truth or dare?" "Truth." "Do you like anyone at the moment?" "As a matter of fact, I do." Damn it! I should've asked who! Why am I so stupid? "Chris, truth or dare?" "Truth." "How far have you gone with a girl?" Wow. I think we skipped a couple steps here. This game is moving faster than I expected. After hesitating a moment, Chris answered, "I got to second base with my ex-girlfriend last year." "And what do you mean by second base?" Kailee asked, putting him on the spot even more. "She let me feel her up and she gave me a handjob," Chris answered awkwardly. Trying to move the game along, Chris asked, "Truth or dare, Beth?" "Truth." "How far have you been?" Without flinching, she answered, "My ex-boyfriend and I gave each other oral." "She isn't even a little embarrassed," I thought to myself. I wouldn't be that comfortable sharing stuff like that. Shaken from my thoughts, Beth asked me, "Truth or dare, Ben?" Not wanting to answer another question like that, I replied, "Dare." Little did I know, this is where the game really started heating up... Once again, all comments and suggestions are appreciated. Thanks for reading! -tordman Last edited by tordman; 09-15-2011 at 08:27 PM.

09-16-2011, 05:53 PM	#11
xiboy Junior Member Join Date: Sep 2011 Posts: 3	Nice Work! Please Continue, your a good writer

09-07-2011, 09:55 PM	#2
daredevil2 getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Apr 2010 Posts: 388	i like this keep going

09-11-2011, 08:09 PM	#4
big_k Junior Member Join Date: Feb 2010 Posts: 13	Loving this story so far, has a ton of potential

09-11-2011, 08:25 PM	#5
coldnorth Junior Member Join Date: Jun 2010 Location: Canada Posts: 5	cool tell us more pppppppppplease

09-11-2011, 11:08 PM	#6
BelgianDare Distinguished Member Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: Europe Posts: 535 Blog Entries: 21	Continue the good work!

09-12-2011, 08:01 PM	#8
tordman Member Join Date: Apr 2007 Posts: 44	Thanks for the comments guys! I'll try to have another part up either tomorrow or the next day. PM me if you have any ideas for the story. I'm open to suggestions

09-15-2011, 08:32 PM	#10
tordman Member Join Date: Apr 2007 Posts: 44	The story continues... Shaken from my thoughts, Beth asked me, "Truth or dare, Ben?" Not wanting to answer another question like that, I replied, "Dare." Little did I know, this is where the game really started heating up. "I dare you to strip down to your boxers." "What?!?" I exclaimed, not believing what I was hearing. "Oh come on," Kailee said, "it's pretty much the same as wearing a bathing suit." "I guess..." Chris leaned over and whispered to me, "Hey, if you do this then think of what we can dare them to do." That was all the encouragement I needed. I quickly shed my t-shirt and slipped off my shorts. "This*isn't so bad. I'm a lot less hot now." "I disagree..." Kailee half whispered to herself. "So now it's my turn... Truth or dare, Beth?" I asked, hoping to get a little revenge. "What the hell, dare me." I thought for a second. "I dare you to take off your shirt," I said a little awkwardly, not sure if she would actually do it. Without the slightest hesitation, she slid her shirt off, sliding it over her cute, perky boobs hidden by her pink bra. Chris and I both were stunned for a few seconds. Did that actually just happen? "Truth or dare, Kailee?" Beth asked while we were still in shock of what just occurred. "I guess since everyone else is doing it, I'll take a dare." "Well, I don't want to be the only girl who isn't fully clothed so why don't you strip down to your panties and bra." Now I was in total shock. This had to be a dream. Things like this don't happen in real life, do they? Then, Kailee started removing her shirt slowly. She was a little more nervous than Beth but she didn't show any sign of wanting to back out. She was wearing a sexy black bra which looked incredible on her perfect, round boobs. She, then, began to lower her pants. Now she was a lot more hesitant. Beth noticed and said, "What's the matter? Scared? You could always just back out and become our slave." That helped her to make up her mind. She continued to slide her pants further down. Then I realized why she was so embarrassed about taking off her pants...

09-16-2011, 05:59 PM	#12
daremaster 1 getDare God Join Date: Apr 2011 Location: <3 Posts: 3,032	This is some nice work, keep it up!

09-17-2011, 11:49 PM	#13
tordman Member Join Date: Apr 2007 Posts: 44	Thank you guys for the compliments! Just to let you know, I do plan on finishing this story and depending on how well it goes there might be a sequel. And now, the story continues... She continued to slide her pants further down. Then I realized why she was so embarrassed about taking off her pants. Underneath, she was wearing a tight, sexy, black thong. I was totally speechless. I never would've expected this to happen to me in a million years. Chris seemed like he was completely shocked too, but not Beth. Beth had a smug grin on her face like she had just cheated on a test and gotten away with it. "I swear I don't normally wear things like this!" "Then why are you wearing it now?" Chris managed to stutter out. Beth quickly explained, "Well, on the last retreat, I dared Kailee to only pack thongs for the next retreat we went on." "Believe me, I wouldn't be wearing this if it weren't for that dare. Satisfied with the answer and extremely distracted by the view we were getting, Chris and I remained silent. "Anyway, truth or dare, Chris?" "........." "Chris!" "Wha... Oh, um dare." "Hmmm..." "Shit, I mean truth!" "Nope. No changing your answer," Beth said sternly. Chris wasn't happy about this but grudgingly gave in to Beth's rules. "Well, seeing as you're the only one who hasn't lost clothes yet, your dare is to strip completely..." Kailee said, clearly wanting someone to be more embarrassed than herself. "What?!? You can't dare me to do that!" It kind of surprised me too. I did not expect a dare that extreme. "I'm not finished yet! Your dare is to strip completely and go for a quick swim in the lake. And you are to leave your clothes off after the dare is completed." Wow, now it was REALLY extreme. "There's no way I'm doing that!" "It's either that or become our slave for the rest of the retreat," Beth retorted. "I guess I'll..." Hope you enjoyed this chapter. I should have another one up soon. Let me know what you guys think. Last edited by tordman; 09-18-2011 at 08:15 PM.

09-18-2011, 12:01 AM	#14
darebunny22 Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2011 Location: England Posts: 157	this is good, keep up the good work __________________ A True Artist At Heart xxxx Please read my Stories Lucky Horshoe Love Unforgiven

09-18-2011, 02:41 AM	#15
BelgianDare Distinguished Member Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: Europe Posts: 535 Blog Entries: 21	Superbe!! Thanks for the entertainment!