06-20-2010, 03:51 PM | #46 |
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This is kinda perverted...
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06-20-2010, 10:20 PM | #47 |
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AWESOME although I woulda liked to see them go a bit further but yeah
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06-21-2010, 01:50 PM | #48 |
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Now that this story has turned to mature themes, I think a Mod needs to move it the appropriate forum. The story is well written but the latest chapter deals with sensitive subject matter, not suitable for the casual under 18 forum browser.
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06-22-2010, 07:13 PM | #49 | |
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Chapter 12 The ending The next morning Crystal woke up early and got dressed in some pants and a long sleeve shirt. Crystal grabbed the phone and started to dial 9-1-1. She was caught by her dad before she could even get 9 in there. "Hey what are you doing with teh phone?" He said looking down at her. "Oh nothing..." She ran upstairs and into her room locking her door. Once she was in there she called the cops. About 10 minutes later the cops arrived and broke in teh door. Crystal jumped and ran down stairs to find her father being handcuffed and a social services lady hold onto Crystal and bring her outside. "We are taking you out of this home due to what you told the cops." Crystal nodded and watched as the cops took her daddy into custody. Crystal hated having turn him in but she couldnt do something like that. The social services lady soon put Crystal in teh car and drove off to teh orphanage and dropped Crystal after signing her in..... The end... Sorry I ended it like this but im done with writing.
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06-23-2010, 12:45 AM | #50 |
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This is disturbing.
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06-23-2010, 12:51 AM | #52 |
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Agreed. Moved to R18: Mature Stories.
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06-23-2010, 07:55 AM | #53 |
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ok loved your story tho
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06-23-2010, 05:10 PM | #54 |
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I know.... but its something that happens in reality and yea i was trying to make a point in it but i got so much bad comments and messages that i couldnt take it anymore and decided to just quit with this story...
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06-23-2010, 11:48 PM | #55 |
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if you want you can write a new story (especially for me)
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