Fiction: Wrestlers mistakes - Page 3

Matman · 03-21-2012, 02:34 PM

He left and Locked the door on the way out, the first day was very painful, I didn't sleep at all, then I thought " how will he know of I take this off"
So First I slip the singlet off, The the jock, next I gently pull the butt plug out, it was very painful to pull out but felt better after. Then, I slowly unclaimed the nipple clamps, Then the cockring, I decided to keep the gag in because I couldn't retape it on. After relaxing for a few hours I decided to put everything back on so I wouldn't be caught, after painfully sliding the plug back in, I clamped my sore nipples, put the cockring back on and got into my jock/singlet, minute later Bryce comes in.
"So house wearing the toys?" he says jokingly
I can't reply because of the gag so I shrug
"you didn't take anything of did you?"
I shook my head
" you lying little bastard!"
He pressed the button on the collar and I feel to the ground, screaming under the gag and clenching my teeth on the mouthgaurd
"I had a camera set up just in case you did think of doing such a thing, and look, you did. Guess I can't trust you to roam free"
He takes the rope and bound my arms and legs , and leaves the room.
On the way out he says "punishment tomarrow, and it'll be fun"

gekostar1 · 03-23-2012, 05:04 AM

awesome story again

dareman 1 · 03-23-2012, 08:17 AM

Great new chapter again sir

Matman · 04-01-2012, 06:27 PM

Id like some feedback before next chapter
Love it?
Anything you dont like.should change?
random complaints/complements

Demonking · 04-01-2012, 06:52 PM

How about a random threat that if you don't post a new chapter soon you will have to change the genre to non-fiction because this will become very real for you

Matman · 04-01-2012, 07:11 PM

Too bad that would be AMAZING

JONWEDGIE1 · 04-01-2012, 08:23 PM

i would love that

amenablerebel · 04-02-2012, 09:12 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by JONWEDGIE1

i would love that

Where are you at because I would love to do it to you

DirtyDarez · 04-03-2012, 04:13 PM

Good story line but if you are looking for an honest opinion, I think it's too 'rushed' everything runs into the next thing, slow it down a bit and add more detail to things except the smell of sweat or urine. Watch your spelling, it takes away from the story.
Plan your story, decide where it's going next and whats going to happen, try to have one big climax instead of lots of small ones, it will make writing it easier. Also, try using paragraphs, it makes it easier to read.
All in all it has potential but you could write it better.
No hard feelings, just some constructive critisicm

Demonking · 04-08-2012, 06:54 PM

Like post a new chapter or the unthinkable will happen to you

Demonking · 04-16-2012, 07:42 PM

Well you got your feedback so how about a few more chapters. Please

Matman · 04-25-2012, 07:29 AM

I've wrote the chapter, but id like to add pictures to make it better, if u have/find any wrestling, bondage, etc. pics id love to seem them
Send me any pics u think I could use in the story
Also if you have a acount on straightupguys.com I'd love to be able to use a few pics from their
Email me [email protected]

Matman · 04-26-2012, 03:51 PM

Also if you are young and strong (like muscles) and are willing to do photos let me know, I'd love to get some personalized pics for the story

Matman · 04-27-2012, 09:46 PM

i have written the chapter but am starting to second guess were im going with it, PM me to read it and tell me if you like it or not

Slavebound · 04-28-2012, 11:25 AM

I love the idea!

03-21-2012, 02:34 PM	#31
Matman getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Nov 2011 Location: US Posts: 404 Blog Entries: 1	He left and Locked the door on the way out, the first day was very painful, I didn't sleep at all, then I thought " how will he know of I take this off" So First I slip the singlet off, The the jock, next I gently pull the butt plug out, it was very painful to pull out but felt better after. Then, I slowly unclaimed the nipple clamps, Then the cockring, I decided to keep the gag in because I couldn't retape it on. After relaxing for a few hours I decided to put everything back on so I wouldn't be caught, after painfully sliding the plug back in, I clamped my sore nipples, put the cockring back on and got into my jock/singlet, minute later Bryce comes in. "So house wearing the toys?" he says jokingly I can't reply because of the gag so I shrug "you didn't take anything of did you?" I shook my head " you lying little bastard!" He pressed the button on the collar and I feel to the ground, screaming under the gag and clenching my teeth on the mouthgaurd "I had a camera set up just in case you did think of doing such a thing, and look, you did. Guess I can't trust you to roam free" He takes the rope and bound my arms and legs , and leaves the room. On the way out he says "punishment tomarrow, and it'll be fun" __________________ I have a new email, it's [email protected] Like jockstrap,wrestling headgear, duct tape, spandex, sweat, control, Chance/ dice dare Limits: pictures, anal, cum, humiliation, public, messy If its not in my likes/Limits I haven't tried it yet so I might be open to it, Truths http://www.getdare.com/bbs/showthrea...015#post746015 Bondage stories http://www.getdare.com/bbs/showthread.php?p=704146 Last edited by Matman; 03-22-2012 at 07:15 PM.

03-23-2012, 08:17 AM	#33
dareman 1 getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Jan 2012 Location: England Posts: 310	Great new chapter again sir __________________ Likes: Public Humiliation, Light Bondage, Pictures, Public Nudity Limits: pain, poo, pee, permanent, family + friends, extreme public, webcam, cross dressing, long dares and illegal Will do any dare Pm to me that is not in my limits

04-01-2012, 06:27 PM	#34
Matman getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Nov 2011 Location: US Posts: 404 Blog Entries: 1	Id like some feedback before next chapter Love it? Anything you dont like.should change? random complaints/complements __________________ I have a new email, it's [email protected] Like jockstrap,wrestling headgear, duct tape, spandex, sweat, control, Chance/ dice dare Limits: pictures, anal, cum, humiliation, public, messy If its not in my likes/Limits I haven't tried it yet so I might be open to it, Truths http://www.getdare.com/bbs/showthrea...015#post746015 Bondage stories http://www.getdare.com/bbs/showthread.php?p=704146

04-01-2012, 07:11 PM	#36
Matman getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Nov 2011 Location: US Posts: 404 Blog Entries: 1	Too bad that would be AMAZING __________________ I have a new email, it's [email protected] Like jockstrap,wrestling headgear, duct tape, spandex, sweat, control, Chance/ dice dare Limits: pictures, anal, cum, humiliation, public, messy If its not in my likes/Limits I haven't tried it yet so I might be open to it, Truths http://www.getdare.com/bbs/showthrea...015#post746015 Bondage stories http://www.getdare.com/bbs/showthread.php?p=704146

04-01-2012, 08:23 PM	#37
JONWEDGIE1 getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Jun 2011 Location: NC Posts: 297 Blog Entries: 3	i would love that __________________ kik- jonjon141516 New likes- hidden public(bathroom) and being exposed( no personal info) Likes: Mild BallBusting,Underwear, Armpit, Being Bullied, Time Limit Dares, Socks, Sleeping Dares, and Having Rules to Follow,Gag, Dice Dares,Cum Dislike- Piss, limits: public, family, pee and poo, spanking I can reject any dare Forfeits Ideas need https://www.getdare.com/bbs/showthre...50#post4772650

03-23-2012, 05:04 AM	#32
gekostar1 Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2011 Posts: 197	awesome story again

04-01-2012, 06:52 PM	#35
Demonking getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Sep 2011 Location: United States Posts: 259 Blog Entries: 1	How about a random threat that if you don't post a new chapter soon you will have to change the genre to non-fiction because this will become very real for you

04-03-2012, 04:13 PM	#39
DirtyDarez getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Nov 2011 Location: Ireland Posts: 407 Blog Entries: 11	Good story line but if you are looking for an honest opinion, I think it's too 'rushed' everything runs into the next thing, slow it down a bit and add more detail to things except the smell of sweat or urine. Watch your spelling, it takes away from the story. Plan your story, decide where it's going next and whats going to happen, try to have one big climax instead of lots of small ones, it will make writing it easier. Also, try using paragraphs, it makes it easier to read. All in all it has potential but you could write it better. No hard feelings, just some constructive critisicm

04-08-2012, 06:54 PM	#40
Demonking getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Sep 2011 Location: United States Posts: 259 Blog Entries: 1	Like post a new chapter or the unthinkable will happen to you

04-16-2012, 07:42 PM	#41
Demonking getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Sep 2011 Location: United States Posts: 259 Blog Entries: 1	Well you got your feedback so how about a few more chapters. Please

04-25-2012, 07:29 AM	#42
Matman getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Nov 2011 Location: US Posts: 404 Blog Entries: 1	I've wrote the chapter, but id like to add pictures to make it better, if u have/find any wrestling, bondage, etc. pics id love to seem them Send me any pics u think I could use in the story Also if you have a acount on straightupguys.com I'd love to be able to use a few pics from their Email me [email protected] __________________ I have a new email, it's [email protected] Like jockstrap,wrestling headgear, duct tape, spandex, sweat, control, Chance/ dice dare Limits: pictures, anal, cum, humiliation, public, messy If its not in my likes/Limits I haven't tried it yet so I might be open to it, Truths http://www.getdare.com/bbs/showthrea...015#post746015 Bondage stories http://www.getdare.com/bbs/showthread.php?p=704146

04-26-2012, 03:51 PM	#43
Matman getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Nov 2011 Location: US Posts: 404 Blog Entries: 1	Also if you are young and strong (like muscles) and are willing to do photos let me know, I'd love to get some personalized pics for the story __________________ I have a new email, it's [email protected] Like jockstrap,wrestling headgear, duct tape, spandex, sweat, control, Chance/ dice dare Limits: pictures, anal, cum, humiliation, public, messy If its not in my likes/Limits I haven't tried it yet so I might be open to it, Truths http://www.getdare.com/bbs/showthrea...015#post746015 Bondage stories http://www.getdare.com/bbs/showthread.php?p=704146

04-27-2012, 09:46 PM	#44
Matman getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Nov 2011 Location: US Posts: 404 Blog Entries: 1	i have written the chapter but am starting to second guess were im going with it, PM me to read it and tell me if you like it or not __________________ I have a new email, it's [email protected] Like jockstrap,wrestling headgear, duct tape, spandex, sweat, control, Chance/ dice dare Limits: pictures, anal, cum, humiliation, public, messy If its not in my likes/Limits I haven't tried it yet so I might be open to it, Truths http://www.getdare.com/bbs/showthrea...015#post746015 Bondage stories http://www.getdare.com/bbs/showthread.php?p=704146

04-28-2012, 11:25 AM	#45
Slavebound Junior Member Join Date: Jan 2012 Posts: 20	I love the idea!