One Amazing Night [NON-FICTION]

Air force dude · 11-22-2007, 11:34 PM

My name is Jason, but my freinds call me Jay. I'm not the most Popular gut in school, but i do date alot of Girls. One night one of the girls named Ellem was having a Holloween party. Her parent happened to be away for the week and so she had the house to her self.

She asked me if i would come. Knowing that there woould be lots of cool cool peopel there i said yes.

As i arrived at the house i realized that not that many people were there. I got into the house and found out only three people and me were there. Ellen looked up, finally are final guest. FINAL GEUST, THIS IS ALL THAT IS COMMING. THREE GIRLS AND ONE GUY!!!! What the hell had just happened. I had no idea. She told me that hey wre going to play a little game of T or D. I gladly said yes i would play. As the game went on, i picked dare more offten. Then i pick dare this one time and Ellen said that i had to be her slave for two days. Knowing that Ellen would some how get me in trouble if i said no, i quickly accepted. She told me to follow her and the girls up into her room. Ellen got infort and Jessica, and Amanda, got behind me. I got into her room and found many cloths tossed on the floor. She told me that if i did what a good slave would do that i would not be punished. She then told me to strip. WHAT!!!! i said no way your out of your mind. She said if you don't i'm going to cut your cock off. Being, well forced it took all my cloth's off. she then told her freinds, "He's all your's". The two girls them came and started to play with me. One gave me a blow job, while the other gave me a leg rub.

Sorry need to go will write later.

Air force dude · 11-22-2007, 11:37 PM

I need responses now!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Marc · 11-23-2007, 01:14 AM

Good so far but could do with a bit of checking before you press 'post' to clear out some of the typos, misspellings etc and would help if it was formatted a bit better too!

Air force dude · 11-23-2007, 06:47 AM

I was just getting bakc form Dinner and i was ready to go to bed.

I'll write soon, today

Air force dude · 11-23-2007, 06:58 AM

Okay so it felt amazing. (I was only 15 at this time). I could feel my cum making its way up my cock. Jessica took in my cum like it was nothing. Then they switched. As They finished with me Ellen came up to me and said, are you a good boy. Hopping not to upset her that much i said Yeah. She turned around and said get him ready, it's my turn. When i heard those words i knew that Ellen was going to get all excited. She always did before we would kiss. Anyway she went into the bathroom. The two girls walked to me and told me to clean up, and they handed me a towel. I cleaned up. Ellen opened the bathroom door and said you two OUT!. They left. Soon Ellen appeared Competely Nude. She turned to me and said, for making my girls happy your get a big nice reward. She came close to me and said I want to talk our relationship ten steps further.
Well as some say the rest was history.

Sorry it's not that good, it's my first time posting

Pikachu · 11-23-2007, 07:03 AM

don't worry mate its good keep it up

btw maybe this story should go in normal stories section not 18 plus jsut a thought i mean the sex here is concentual it doesn't involve rape or anything it isn't an 18+ story but it isn't a bad story either by anymeans

molten man · 11-29-2007, 09:24 PM

Lovely story nd grammar is ok!! Keep it up

olivedivon · 12-17-2008, 03:02 PM

I think that this is a very good story. keep it up!

molten man · 12-17-2008, 04:08 PM

you could make it less hurried though!!!

Officelover · 12-20-2008, 11:58 AM

Agreed. If there is one thing I hate in stories (besides lack of grammar or origniality) it is taking it too fast.

This certainly moves too fast (and it could be far more original)

Sorry for my critique; but my keyboard always has a way of being mean. Strange.

11-22-2007, 11:34 PM	#1
Air force dude Junior Member Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: Eastern USA Posts: 26	One Amazing Night [NON-FICTION] My name is Jason, but my freinds call me Jay. I'm not the most Popular gut in school, but i do date alot of Girls. One night one of the girls named Ellem was having a Holloween party. Her parent happened to be away for the week and so she had the house to her self. She asked me if i would come. Knowing that there woould be lots of cool cool peopel there i said yes. As i arrived at the house i realized that not that many people were there. I got into the house and found out only three people and me were there. Ellen looked up, finally are final guest. FINAL GEUST, THIS IS ALL THAT IS COMMING. THREE GIRLS AND ONE GUY!!!! What the hell had just happened. I had no idea. She told me that hey wre going to play a little game of T or D. I gladly said yes i would play. As the game went on, i picked dare more offten. Then i pick dare this one time and Ellen said that i had to be her slave for two days. Knowing that Ellen would some how get me in trouble if i said no, i quickly accepted. She told me to follow her and the girls up into her room. Ellen got infort and Jessica, and Amanda, got behind me. I got into her room and found many cloths tossed on the floor. She told me that if i did what a good slave would do that i would not be punished. She then told me to strip. WHAT!!!! i said no way your out of your mind. She said if you don't i'm going to cut your cock off. Being, well forced it took all my cloth's off. she then told her freinds, "He's all your's". The two girls them came and started to play with me. One gave me a blow job, while the other gave me a leg rub. Sorry need to go will write later.

11-23-2007, 01:14 AM	#3
Marc Warning: Contains Nuts Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: London/Berkshire, UK Posts: 1,097	Good so far but could do with a bit of checking before you press 'post' to clear out some of the typos, misspellings etc and would help if it was formatted a bit better too! __________________ Hugs! Marc Warning: May contain nuts. Likes: CFNM, WaM, Zentai, nudity, Cuffed, life model, body painting model, live TorD, being a naked chauffeur, to be continued.... Limits: No family, no work, no illegal, nothing beyond end of session, social suicide, swapping likes for dislikes, account control, to be continued... Dislikes: Anal, blood, scat, to be continued... https://www.zeemaps.com/map?group=150827 KIK: CFNM_Woody (mention getDare) Vote on my current poll, please

11-23-2007, 07:03 AM	#6
Pikachu Distinguished Member Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: Australia Posts: 897 Blog Entries: 4	don't worry mate its good keep it up btw maybe this story should go in normal stories section not 18 plus jsut a thought i mean the sex here is concentual it doesn't involve rape or anything it isn't an 18+ story but it isn't a bad story either by anymeans __________________

11-29-2007, 09:24 PM	#7
molten man Distinguished Member Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Mumbai, India Posts: 946	Lovely story nd grammar is ok!! Keep it up __________________ MMan 26/m/straight Skype: molten_man007 Kik: molten_man

12-17-2008, 03:02 PM	#8
olivedivon Account Banned Join Date: Dec 2008 Posts: 34	good I think that this is a very good story. keep it up! __________________ picture Jimi Hendrixs. now picture Jimmy Page. Now picture them together! Isn't that creepy? but the awesomeness of it resembles something close to me. 14/m/usa

11-22-2007, 11:37 PM	#2
Air force dude Junior Member Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: Eastern USA Posts: 26	I need responses now!!!!!!!!!!!!!

11-23-2007, 06:47 AM	#4
Air force dude Junior Member Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: Eastern USA Posts: 26	I was just getting bakc form Dinner and i was ready to go to bed. I'll write soon, today

11-23-2007, 06:58 AM	#5
Air force dude Junior Member Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: Eastern USA Posts: 26	Okay so it felt amazing. (I was only 15 at this time). I could feel my cum making its way up my cock. Jessica took in my cum like it was nothing. Then they switched. As They finished with me Ellen came up to me and said, are you a good boy. Hopping not to upset her that much i said Yeah. She turned around and said get him ready, it's my turn. When i heard those words i knew that Ellen was going to get all excited. She always did before we would kiss. Anyway she went into the bathroom. The two girls walked to me and told me to clean up, and they handed me a towel. I cleaned up. Ellen opened the bathroom door and said you two OUT!. They left. Soon Ellen appeared Competely Nude. She turned to me and said, for making my girls happy your get a big nice reward. She came close to me and said I want to talk our relationship ten steps further. Well as some say the rest was history. Sorry it's not that good, it's my first time posting

12-17-2008, 04:08 PM	#9
molten man Distinguished Member Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Mumbai, India Posts: 946	you could make it less hurried though!!! __________________ MMan 26/m/straight Skype: molten_man007 Kik: molten_man

12-20-2008, 11:58 AM	#10
Officelover Truth or Dare Enthusiast Join Date: May 2008 Location: New England Posts: 2,602 Blog Entries: 107	Agreed. If there is one thing I hate in stories (besides lack of grammar or origniality) it is taking it too fast. This certainly moves too fast (and it could be far more original) Sorry for my critique; but my keyboard always has a way of being mean. Strange. __________________ 20 Trans Femme Nonbinary Ass Collector Writes Poetry On Aluminum Foil with Gold Gel Pens Fills Mason Jar with Vodka I'm Doing A Cleanse White Kid with Black Nails