Fiction: ★ Charlotte's School Trip - Page 12

BettyBoop · 06-11-2009, 01:09 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by nich

I apologize for pressuring you, I didn't know you were under stress, and the other forums I belong to usually post full stories. Just not used to the chapters.

No worries. I'll write more when I can

my2bits · 06-22-2009, 12:14 AM

Hey, no rush, I know you have exams, but I just don't want this thread to get lost in the piles of the forum. This is an amazing story that I would HATE to see die because people stopped posting in it. Truly amazing, write at your leisure.

superman17 · 06-22-2009, 12:54 AM

Great Story, especially like the latest post! Take your time writing the next one. But i cant wait!

blueboy · 06-22-2009, 03:19 PM

Take your time. I am in exams right now myself and I know how stressful it can be. Exceptional story by the way. You certainly have a talent for writing.
Good luck on your exams!

- Blueboy

dare dude · 06-23-2009, 02:18 PM

i just read this and thought it was amazing i cant wait for the next chapter

flying_squirrel2003 · 06-23-2009, 11:15 PM

I really like the development of the storyline. I think you are amazing at keeping the flow of the story going, and I really appreciate the interesting situations Charlotte gets put into. The way that the clothes are laid out / provided for Charlotte and her friends really makes me smile. I like the aspect of control that it gives their tormentor.

Swirly · 06-25-2009, 06:59 AM

Post when you're ready. It's a good story. We can wait for the next installment.

ace · 07-09-2009, 10:21 AM

Hey Bella.. can you atleast tentatively let us know when you ll update this story.. I had been following his story and its disappointing everyday i come and see no update added..
BTW.. Loved the dares that you and charlotte have done.. So Erotic..

quidproquo · 07-09-2009, 11:58 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by ace

Hey Bella.. can you atleast tentatively let us know when you ll update this story.. I had been following his story and its disappointing everyday i come and see no update added..
BTW.. Loved the dares that you and charlotte have done.. So Erotic..

I'm sure if she knew she would tell us. Don't pressure her, she doesn't have to tell you anything. Stories are better when they aren't rushed.

ace · 07-09-2009, 01:45 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by quidproquo

I'm sure if she knew she would tell us. Don't pressure her, she doesn't have to tell you anything. Stories are better when they aren't rushed.

Ya i understand.. but it ll be nice if she tentatively lets us know when she ll be back with the stories.. With the flow that she was writing it with in the beginning.. I am just afraid it ll be lost given the long time gap..

Arko · 07-10-2009, 04:02 PM

This story makes me want to dance and shout "YAY!" so I pretty much will.

And GCSEs were a B!#@H this year in my opinion.

Arko · 07-21-2009, 12:00 PM

Aww, all is right in the world of Charlotte.

Desril · 07-21-2009, 12:59 PM

Did I miss something, or is there no chapter 18?

BettyBoop · 07-21-2009, 01:29 PM

Totally skipped a chapter, give me a minute.

BettyBoop · 07-21-2009, 01:30 PM

Chapter 18
‘Charl?’ A familiar voice sounded to me from above.
Soon hands had pulled my upright; I was cold, wet, muddy and shivering.
‘What happened to you?’ I looked up into Lucas’ face and couldn’t help but smile, though it was hardly a smile with the way I was shivering, I hadn’t realise how cold I was.
‘I..I fell’ I struggled to speak through my chattering teeth.
He pushed me away and I was confused for a moment before he pulled his jacket of and then put it on me like I was a child.
I didn’t argue, the jacket felt hot against my skin.
‘I can’t leave you alone for one minute’ He said looking into my eyes, worried that I was ill, I could tell.
‘I’m f..f..fine’ I mumbled, trying to sound fine, and failing.
Suddenly my legs were swooped up from beneath me and I was cradled in Lucas’ arms.
‘I c..can walk you k..know’ I stuttered at him.
‘Sure, that’s why I found you on the floor’ He smiled at me, but not in a mean way.
‘I’m all muddy’ I moaned at him, I was beginning to warm up so it was hard to ask to be put down
‘Don’t be silly’ He chuckled and began walking through the tress toward camp, I looked up into Lucas’ face as the rain dripped off his nose, it made me laugh.
Soon we’d made it to my cabin; he brought me inside, through the corridor and to my room.
As he laid me on my feet the door opposite opened and Sasha jumped out
‘Oh Charlotte, I’m so sorry, I got dragged away by some boy, he said he wanted to show me something but we went into the forest and he disappeared. I’m sorry, I was going to help, I was!’ The words came out almost too quickly to understand, I looked into Sasha’s face and she looked like she was about to burst into tears.
‘Don’t worry, its fine really, calm down’ I said, forcing a smile.
I shivered again and Lucas piped up
‘She’s freezing I better get her to sleep’ he directed at Sasha
‘Oh of course’ She said directing another apologetic look at me before I shuffled into my room.
Lucas led me in, ‘Are you ok, you’re starting to go a little blue’
I thought he was joking but he looked at me in such a way I had to check in the mirror, I looked freezing, my hair clung to my face and eyes looked sunken. I was exhausted now I’d finally stopped moving and I took a deep laboured breath trying to keep my eyes open.
I turned slowly and it took my eyes a while to notice the neatly folded pile of clothes on my bed. I walked over the bed, my feet hardly leaving the ground as I picked up the small heart shaped note that lay on the soft fabric.

“Sleep well x”

Was all that was written on the paper in neat slanted writing, the exact same as the other notes. Lucas looked at me, puzzled before nodding at the clothes folded on my bed.
‘I’ll leave you to change’ He smiled before holding my face between his hands, pushing my hair back and kissing my forehead, the way he looked felt more like he was examining me, seeing if I was about to collapse.
He slid open the glass door, then slid it shut, looking at me worryingly once more through the glass then and jumped over the balcony into the night.
I stumbled toward my bed and put on the pale yellow pyjama trousers and pale yellow tank top.
I sat down and brushed my hair back into a ponytail.
I rolled under the sheets and curled into a ball, hugging my knees to my chest I fell asleep.

06-23-2009, 02:18 PM	#170
dare dude Member Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: CA Posts: 38	i just read this and thought it was amazing i cant wait for the next chapter __________________ Likes: Orgasm control/denial(not just edge 5 times etc..), mild anal(my vibe), risk,chance, hidden public. Dislikes:Wedgies, spanking, body writing limits: Friends, family, illegal, permanent, messy, pain, poo, pics, rossdressing, roleplaying, pee. Toys: Vibrator

06-23-2009, 11:15 PM	#171
flying_squirrel2003 Member Join Date: Apr 2009 Posts: 31	Great story. I really like the development of the storyline. I think you are amazing at keeping the flow of the story going, and I really appreciate the interesting situations Charlotte gets put into. The way that the clothes are laid out / provided for Charlotte and her friends really makes me smile. I like the aspect of control that it gives their tormentor.

07-09-2009, 10:21 AM	#173
ace Member Join Date: Mar 2009 Location: India Posts: 77	Hey Bella.. can you atleast tentatively let us know when you ll update this story.. I had been following his story and its disappointing everyday i come and see no update added.. BTW.. Loved the dares that you and charlotte have done.. So Erotic.. __________________ 22/m/india Limits: Family, permanent damage, exposure Likes: Almost everything else.

07-10-2009, 04:02 PM	#176
Arko Member Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: UK Posts: 99	This story makes me want to dance and shout "YAY!" so I pretty much will. And GCSEs were a B!#@H this year in my opinion. __________________ Your eyes tell me try harder, But you're lost in the headlights, And I'm lost in your eyes Loves: Semi public, naked, anything in the rain Likes: Pee, messy, self bondage L... OKs: Food, light/med pain, anal Limits: Permanent, poop , involving other people, illegal, extreme pain

07-21-2009, 12:00 PM	#177
Arko Member Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: UK Posts: 99	Aww, all is right in the world of Charlotte. __________________ Your eyes tell me try harder, But you're lost in the headlights, And I'm lost in your eyes Loves: Semi public, naked, anything in the rain Likes: Pee, messy, self bondage L... OKs: Food, light/med pain, anal Limits: Permanent, poop , involving other people, illegal, extreme pain

06-22-2009, 12:14 AM	#167
my2bits Baby Member Join Date: Jan 2009 Posts: 1	Hey, no rush, I know you have exams, but I just don't want this thread to get lost in the piles of the forum. This is an amazing story that I would HATE to see die because people stopped posting in it. Truly amazing, write at your leisure.

06-22-2009, 12:54 AM	#168
superman17 Junior Member Join Date: May 2008 Posts: 6	Great Story, especially like the latest post! Take your time writing the next one. But i cant wait!

06-22-2009, 03:19 PM	#169
blueboy Member Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: Edmonton, Alberta Posts: 55 Blog Entries: 2	Take your time. I am in exams right now myself and I know how stressful it can be. Exceptional story by the way. You certainly have a talent for writing. Good luck on your exams! - Blueboy

06-25-2009, 06:59 AM	#172
Swirly Member Join Date: Nov 2008 Location: London Posts: 43	Post when you're ready. It's a good story. We can wait for the next installment.

07-21-2009, 12:59 PM	#178
Desril Member Join Date: Aug 2008 Posts: 68	Did I miss something, or is there no chapter 18?

07-21-2009, 01:29 PM	#179
BettyBoop Angel of Dare Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: England. Posts: 8,249 Blog Entries: 105	Totally skipped a chapter, give me a minute. __________________ ★Boop Boop de Boop.★ female, engurrland. Ask me anything, click. My tumblr. 18+ ▼

07-21-2009, 01:30 PM	#180
BettyBoop Angel of Dare Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: England. Posts: 8,249 Blog Entries: 105	Chapter 18 ‘Charl?’ A familiar voice sounded to me from above. Soon hands had pulled my upright; I was cold, wet, muddy and shivering. ‘What happened to you?’ I looked up into Lucas’ face and couldn’t help but smile, though it was hardly a smile with the way I was shivering, I hadn’t realise how cold I was. ‘I..I fell’ I struggled to speak through my chattering teeth. He pushed me away and I was confused for a moment before he pulled his jacket of and then put it on me like I was a child. I didn’t argue, the jacket felt hot against my skin. ‘I can’t leave you alone for one minute’ He said looking into my eyes, worried that I was ill, I could tell. ‘I’m f..f..fine’ I mumbled, trying to sound fine, and failing. Suddenly my legs were swooped up from beneath me and I was cradled in Lucas’ arms. ‘I c..can walk you k..know’ I stuttered at him. ‘Sure, that’s why I found you on the floor’ He smiled at me, but not in a mean way. ‘I’m all muddy’ I moaned at him, I was beginning to warm up so it was hard to ask to be put down ‘Don’t be silly’ He chuckled and began walking through the tress toward camp, I looked up into Lucas’ face as the rain dripped off his nose, it made me laugh. Soon we’d made it to my cabin; he brought me inside, through the corridor and to my room. As he laid me on my feet the door opposite opened and Sasha jumped out ‘Oh Charlotte, I’m so sorry, I got dragged away by some boy, he said he wanted to show me something but we went into the forest and he disappeared. I’m sorry, I was going to help, I was!’ The words came out almost too quickly to understand, I looked into Sasha’s face and she looked like she was about to burst into tears. ‘Don’t worry, its fine really, calm down’ I said, forcing a smile. I shivered again and Lucas piped up ‘She’s freezing I better get her to sleep’ he directed at Sasha ‘Oh of course’ She said directing another apologetic look at me before I shuffled into my room. Lucas led me in, ‘Are you ok, you’re starting to go a little blue’ I thought he was joking but he looked at me in such a way I had to check in the mirror, I looked freezing, my hair clung to my face and eyes looked sunken. I was exhausted now I’d finally stopped moving and I took a deep laboured breath trying to keep my eyes open. I turned slowly and it took my eyes a while to notice the neatly folded pile of clothes on my bed. I walked over the bed, my feet hardly leaving the ground as I picked up the small heart shaped note that lay on the soft fabric. “Sleep well x” Was all that was written on the paper in neat slanted writing, the exact same as the other notes. Lucas looked at me, puzzled before nodding at the clothes folded on my bed. ‘I’ll leave you to change’ He smiled before holding my face between his hands, pushing my hair back and kissing my forehead, the way he looked felt more like he was examining me, seeing if I was about to collapse. He slid open the glass door, then slid it shut, looking at me worryingly once more through the glass then and jumped over the balcony into the night. I stumbled toward my bed and put on the pale yellow pyjama trousers and pale yellow tank top. I sat down and brushed my hair back into a ponytail. I rolled under the sheets and curled into a ball, hugging my knees to my chest I fell asleep. __________________ ★Boop Boop de Boop.★ female, engurrland. Ask me anything, click. My tumblr. 18+ ▼