[Fiction] A 'special' relationship.

[sydneyyy93]

Warning: This story is going to be in detail 100% it will talk about what happens in their relationship and what happens to girls at her age. And girls you know what im talking about.

Characters:
Crystal- (An 11 year old orphan. She is very shy, Jasons adopted daughter.)
Jason- (A 20 year old man. He is Crystals adopted father.)

Chapter 1

Jason was in his almost adopted daughters bedroom. He was fixing it up for her. He made her bed and put all the furniture in her room. He was just finishing up and was getting ready to go get her. He stepped out of the house, locking the door. He walked to his car and got in. He drove up to the adoption Agency. He looked over at Crystal and waved to her. She was excited to see him and ran to him and hugged him. He has been coming in and seeing her for her anger problems and more. She somehow convinced him to adopt her. She looked up at ahim she was about 5'0. He knelt down and hugged her. "Ill be done in about an hour ok Sweetie." She smiled at him a tear coming down her cheek. "Ok Jason." He wiped her tear away and kissed her on her forehead. "Ill be back soon ok dear you just wait im not leaving here without you!" She smiled up at him and ran off to play with her friends. He walked into the office.

[25rob1985]

a short first chapter but sounds like its going to be good do write more

[sydneyyy93]

Originally Posted by sydneyyy93

Warning: This story is going to be in detail 100% it will talk about what happens in their relationship and what happens to girls at her age. And girls you know what im talking about.

Characters:
Crystal- (An 11 year old orphan. She is very shy, Jasons adopted daughter.)
Jason- (A 20 year old man. He is Crystals adopted father.)

Chapter 1

Jason was in his almost adopted daughters bedroom. He was fixing it up for her. He made her bed and put all the furniture in her room. He was just finishing up and was getting ready to go get her. He stepped out of the house, locking the door. He walked to his car and got in. He drove up to the adoption Agency. He looked over at Crystal and waved to her. She was excited to see him and ran to him and hugged him. He has been coming in and seeing her for her anger problems and more. She somehow convinced him to adopt her. She looked up at ahim she was about 5'0. He knelt down and hugged her. "Ill be done in about an hour ok Sweetie." She smiled at him a tear coming down her cheek. "Ok Jason." He wiped her tear away and kissed her on her forehead. "Ill be back soon ok dear you just wait im not leaving here without you!" She smiled up at him and ran off to play with her friends. He walked into the office.

Chapter 2

After being in the office for about 30 minutes. He had white papers in his hand and motioned for Crystal to come to him. He knelt down as Crystal came running to him her long blonde hair flowing behind her she had a huge smile on her face. He picked her up hugging her. Crystal wrapped her legs around him tightly aswell as her arms around his neck. "So Jason???" She smiled at him. "Your mine..." He smiled back at her and kissed her on her forehead. He carried her out to the car and put her in the passanger side. He went around and got into the drivers side and drove off to the house. About 20 minutes later they arrived at the house. Crystal got out of the car amazed. "Do you like it dear?" He said smiling as he looked around. "I love it daddy." She blushed as she said 'daddy'. She went up to the door and pushed the door open. She was amazed at what she seen.

[rdcottman]

keep up the great work, your storys are very interesting. but, do you think you could make the chapters a bit longer?

[sydneyyy93]

Originally Posted by sydneyyy93

Warning: This story is going to be in detail 100% it will talk about what happens in their relationship and what happens to girls at her age. And girls you know what im talking about.

Characters:
Crystal- (An 11 year old orphan. She is very shy, Jasons adopted daughter.)
Jason- (A 20 year old man. He is Crystals adopted father.)

Chapter 1

Jason was in his almost adopted daughters bedroom. He was fixing it up for her. He made her bed and put all the furniture in her room. He was just finishing up and was getting ready to go get her. He stepped out of the house, locking the door. He walked to his car and got in. He drove up to the adoption Agency. He looked over at Crystal and waved to her. She was excited to see him and ran to him and hugged him. He has been coming in and seeing her for her anger problems and more. She somehow convinced him to adopt her. She looked up at ahim she was about 5'0. He knelt down and hugged her. "Ill be done in about an hour ok Sweetie." She smiled at him a tear coming down her cheek. "Ok Jason." He wiped her tear away and kissed her on her forehead. "Ill be back soon ok dear you just wait im not leaving here without you!" She smiled up at him and ran off to play with her friends. He walked into the office.

Originally Posted by sydneyyy93

Chapter 2

After being in the office for about 30 minutes. He had white papers in his hand and motioned for Crystal to come to him. He knelt down as Crystal came running to him her long blonde hair flowing behind her she had a huge smile on her face. He picked her up hugging her. Crystal wrapped her legs around him tightly aswell as her arms around his neck. "So Jason???" She smiled at him. "Your mine..." He smiled back at her and kissed her on her forehead. He carried her out to the car and put her in the passanger side. He went around and got into the drivers side and drove off to the house. About 20 minutes later they arrived at the house. Crystal got out of the car amazed. "Do you like it dear?" He said smiling as he looked around. "I love it daddy." She blushed as she said 'daddy'. She went up to the door and pushed the door open. She was amazed at what she seen.

Chapter 3

To Crystals surprise the house was as beautiful on the inside as it was on the outside. The walls were white with a forest light green border. She couldnt believe her eyes. She walked into the kitchen it was so beautiful and white and CLEAN!!!. She then walked back into the livingroom and stood him standing there. "Your house is so beautiful." He smiled at her and took her hand. "You have yet to see your bedroom." He walked her up to her room and went to the right. "My room is down the left ok so if you need anything during the nite you can come and ask me." She smiled up at him as they stood infront of her door. Her name was already carved into the door. She opened the door. Her walls where painted a lime green, the borders where a dark purple. Her two favorite colors. She turned to face her bed, it was huge with white sheets she looked above her bed to see her name. She climbed on her bed and wrapped her arms tightly around his neck. "Thank you so much!" She laid her head on his shoulder almost crying. "Thats not all Sweetie." He held her as he walked over to her closet and stood infront of it. "Remember when i measured you to see what size clothes youd wear?" She nodded looking at him. He pushed her closet door open it was completely full of clothes. "Oh my goodness...." She put her hands over her mouth. "You didnt have to....." She started to cry and burried her face into him. He laid her down on her bed and sat next to her. "This is your house now im your daddy.." She smiled at him as he kissed her forehead. "I love you daddy." She said with a smile. "I love you 2 sweetheart."

[the doc]

haha as i guess you want replys here to ur gettin it from me haha
its a nice story i just miss some excitement but i understand that this story needs some building but still

[sydneyyy93]

Originally Posted by the doc

haha as i guess you want replys here to ur gettin it from me haha
its a nice story i just miss some excitement but i understand that this story needs some building but still

Yes...
I always try to wait to get replies before i post another part to the story.

[sydneyyy93]

Originally Posted by sydneyyy93

Warning: This story is going to be in detail 100% it will talk about what happens in their relationship and what happens to girls at her age. And girls you know what im talking about.

Characters:
Crystal- (An 11 year old orphan. She is very shy, Jasons adopted daughter.)
Jason- (A 20 year old man. He is Crystals adopted father.)

Chapter 1

Jason was in his almost adopted daughters bedroom. He was fixing it up for her. He made her bed and put all the furniture in her room. He was just finishing up and was getting ready to go get her. He stepped out of the house, locking the door. He walked to his car and got in. He drove up to the adoption Agency. He looked over at Crystal and waved to her. She was excited to see him and ran to him and hugged him. He has been coming in and seeing her for her anger problems and more. She somehow convinced him to adopt her. She looked up at ahim she was about 5'0. He knelt down and hugged her. "Ill be done in about an hour ok Sweetie." She smiled at him a tear coming down her cheek. "Ok Jason." He wiped her tear away and kissed her on her forehead. "Ill be back soon ok dear you just wait im not leaving here without you!" She smiled up at him and ran off to play with her friends. He walked into the office.

Originally Posted by sydneyyy93

Chapter 2

After being in the office for about 30 minutes. He had white papers in his hand and motioned for Crystal to come to him. He knelt down as Crystal came running to him her long blonde hair flowing behind her she had a huge smile on her face. He picked her up hugging her. Crystal wrapped her legs around him tightly aswell as her arms around his neck. "So Jason???" She smiled at him. "Your mine..." He smiled back at her and kissed her on her forehead. He carried her out to the car and put her in the passanger side. He went around and got into the drivers side and drove off to the house. About 20 minutes later they arrived at the house. Crystal got out of the car amazed. "Do you like it dear?" He said smiling as he looked around. "I love it daddy." She blushed as she said 'daddy'. She went up to the door and pushed the door open. She was amazed at what she seen.

Originally Posted by sydneyyy93

Chapter 3

To Crystals surprise the house was as beautiful on the inside as it was on the outside. The walls were white with a forest light green border. She couldnt believe her eyes. She walked into the kitchen it was so beautiful and white and CLEAN!!!. She then walked back into the livingroom and stood him standing there. "Your house is so beautiful." He smiled at her and took her hand. "You have yet to see your bedroom." He walked her up to her room and went to the right. "My room is down the left ok so if you need anything during the nite you can come and ask me." She smiled up at him as they stood infront of her door. Her name was already carved into the door. She opened the door. Her walls where painted a lime green, the borders where a dark purple. Her two favorite colors. She turned to face her bed, it was huge with white sheets she looked above her bed to see her name. She climbed on her bed and wrapped her arms tightly around his neck. "Thank you so much!" She laid her head on his shoulder almost crying. "Thats not all Sweetie." He held her as he walked over to her closet and stood infront of it. "Remember when i measured you to see what size clothes youd wear?" She nodded looking at him. He pushed her closet door open it was completely full of clothes. "Oh my goodness...." She put her hands over her mouth. "You didnt have to....." She started to cry and burried her face into him. He laid her down on her bed and sat next to her. "This is your house now im your daddy.." She smiled at him as he kissed her forehead. "I love you daddy." She said with a smile. "I love you 2 sweetheart."

Chapter 4

The next morning Crystal woke up very early. Her mouth was so dry, she went down stairs and to the fridge. She took a yoohoo that her new daddy had bought for her and went up to her room drinking it. She laid back in bed after putting the yoohoo box on her nitestand. She smiled. "I love it here." She fell back to sleep. The next thing she knew her daddy was sitting next to her on the bed shaking her to wake her up. "Sweetie wake up." He smiled at her as she refused. "I dont wanna daddy." She turned over pulling the covers over her head. He stood up and crossed his arms smirking at her. "Ok... I guess we dont have to go shopping." Her eyes opened as she jumped out of bed grabbing her robe she ran into the bathroom turning on the water. She ran back and hugged him. "Good morning daddy." She giggled and walked back into the bathroom. She undressed, stepping into teh shower. She began to wash herself. She stepped out about a few minutes later drying herself off. She put her robe on and brushed her teeth, and blow dry her hair. She walked into her room grabbing a blue jean ruffle skirt, pants and bra, and a white,pink, and blue zebra patterned tanktop that faded. She grabbed some sandals from teh many her daddy bought her. She walked down stairs and sat on teh couch. "Do i look good daddy?" She asked as she put her sandals on. "You already bought me many things i dont think i need anymore." He grabbed his keys waiting at the door. "C'mon sweetie..." She grabbed her bag and jacket and headed out to the car. She sat in teh passangers side and waited. A few minutes he came and got in the car and drove to the mall. As she walked into the mall holding his hand her mouth dropped.

[sydneyyy93]

I will update this story when someone actually comments it with nice comments...

[stats2001]

love this so far,,.try not to worry about some of the comments, i have read a few of your stories and they are great...keep up the good work, and i too look forward to many moe chapters to come !!!

[sydneyyy93]

Originally Posted by sydneyyy93

Warning: This story is going to be in detail 100% it will talk about what happens in their relationship and what happens to girls at her age. And girls you know what im talking about.

Characters:
Crystal- (An 11 year old orphan. She is very shy, Jasons adopted daughter.)
Jason- (A 20 year old man. He is Crystals adopted father.)

Chapter 1

Jason was in his almost adopted daughters bedroom. He was fixing it up for her. He made her bed and put all the furniture in her room. He was just finishing up and was getting ready to go get her. He stepped out of the house, locking the door. He walked to his car and got in. He drove up to the adoption Agency. He looked over at Crystal and waved to her. She was excited to see him and ran to him and hugged him. He has been coming in and seeing her for her anger problems and more. She somehow convinced him to adopt her. She looked up at ahim she was about 5'0. He knelt down and hugged her. "Ill be done in about an hour ok Sweetie." She smiled at him a tear coming down her cheek. "Ok Jason." He wiped her tear away and kissed her on her forehead. "Ill be back soon ok dear you just wait im not leaving here without you!" She smiled up at him and ran off to play with her friends. He walked into the office.

Originally Posted by sydneyyy93

Chapter 2

After being in the office for about 30 minutes. He had white papers in his hand and motioned for Crystal to come to him. He knelt down as Crystal came running to him her long blonde hair flowing behind her she had a huge smile on her face. He picked her up hugging her. Crystal wrapped her legs around him tightly aswell as her arms around his neck. "So Jason???" She smiled at him. "Your mine..." He smiled back at her and kissed her on her forehead. He carried her out to the car and put her in the passanger side. He went around and got into the drivers side and drove off to the house. About 20 minutes later they arrived at the house. Crystal got out of the car amazed. "Do you like it dear?" He said smiling as he looked around. "I love it daddy." She blushed as she said 'daddy'. She went up to the door and pushed the door open. She was amazed at what she seen.

Originally Posted by sydneyyy93

Chapter 3

To Crystals surprise the house was as beautiful on the inside as it was on the outside. The walls were white with a forest light green border. She couldnt believe her eyes. She walked into the kitchen it was so beautiful and white and CLEAN!!!. She then walked back into the livingroom and stood him standing there. "Your house is so beautiful." He smiled at her and took her hand. "You have yet to see your bedroom." He walked her up to her room and went to the right. "My room is down the left ok so if you need anything during the nite you can come and ask me." She smiled up at him as they stood infront of her door. Her name was already carved into the door. She opened the door. Her walls where painted a lime green, the borders where a dark purple. Her two favorite colors. She turned to face her bed, it was huge with white sheets she looked above her bed to see her name. She climbed on her bed and wrapped her arms tightly around his neck. "Thank you so much!" She laid her head on his shoulder almost crying. "Thats not all Sweetie." He held her as he walked over to her closet and stood infront of it. "Remember when i measured you to see what size clothes youd wear?" She nodded looking at him. He pushed her closet door open it was completely full of clothes. "Oh my goodness...." She put her hands over her mouth. "You didnt have to....." She started to cry and burried her face into him. He laid her down on her bed and sat next to her. "This is your house now im your daddy.." She smiled at him as he kissed her forehead. "I love you daddy." She said with a smile. "I love you 2 sweetheart."

Originally Posted by sydneyyy93

Chapter 4

The next morning Crystal woke up very early. Her mouth was so dry, she went down stairs and to the fridge. She took a yoohoo that her new daddy had bought for her and went up to her room drinking it. She laid back in bed after putting the yoohoo box on her nitestand. She smiled. "I love it here." She fell back to sleep. The next thing she knew her daddy was sitting next to her on the bed shaking her to wake her up. "Sweetie wake up." He smiled at her as she refused. "I dont wanna daddy." She turned over pulling the covers over her head. He stood up and crossed his arms smirking at her. "Ok... I guess we dont have to go shopping." Her eyes opened as she jumped out of bed grabbing her robe she ran into the bathroom turning on the water. She ran back and hugged him. "Good morning daddy." She giggled and walked back into the bathroom. She undressed, stepping into teh shower. She began to wash herself. She stepped out about a few minutes later drying herself off. She put her robe on and brushed her teeth, and blow dry her hair. She walked into her room grabbing a blue jean ruffle skirt, pants and bra, and a white,pink, and blue zebra patterned tanktop that faded. She grabbed some sandals from teh many her daddy bought her. She walked down stairs and sat on teh couch. "Do i look good daddy?" She asked as she put her sandals on. "You already bought me many things i dont think i need anymore." He grabbed his keys waiting at the door. "C'mon sweetie..." She grabbed her bag and jacket and headed out to the car. She sat in teh passangers side and waited. A few minutes he came and got in the car and drove to the mall. As she walked into the mall holding his hand her mouth dropped.

Chapter 5

Crystal was so surprised at how big the mall was. She hadnt been in a mall every. Jason laughed a bit picking her up. "Where do you want to go first?" He kissed her cheek. "I dont know daddy....." She wrapped her arms around his neck. "I dont know any places in here....." He walked over to a map of the mall. "Well theres Aeropostale, American Eagle, Hot Topic, Rue 21...." She thought for a minute and finally spoke. "All..." She giggled as he began to walk into aeropostale. She jumped down and ran throughout the store grabbing clothes. "Daddy!!!" She screamed. Jason walked over to teh dressing room . "Yes dear?" She came out of the dressing room. "How does it look?" She was wearing a tanktop and pants. "Its cute on you." She smiled and walked back in. She came out with all teh clothes about three shirts and three pants. She handed them to him. "Thanks daddy." She kissed his cheek. She waited by the door for him. He came with the bag a few minutes later. "Where to next?" He asked looking around. "ummmm whats that place??" She said pointing to 'Lilly Pad'. "Ummm i don't know i think it sells bags..." She ran over to it. and looked around. "Daddy can i get one??" She said looking up at him with puppy eyes. "Just one." She ran over and got a pink and brown bag. She went to the counter and paid for it. "Thanks daddy." She put it in teh other bag and held his hand as they walked out of the store. "Thank you very much i like all the things I got." She got into teh car and sat in the back seat with teh bag. He got in teh drivers side and began to drive home. "Daddy can we get something to eat?? im hungry." She looked into the mirror at him. "I love you..." She smiled at him. "Alright." He pulled into McDonalds. "What do you want?" She looked at the menu. "A milkshake and some chicken nuggets." She sat in teh back playing with her doll. He handed her, her food. "There you go sweetie." She smiled as she started to snack on her fries. "No eating in teh car sweetie..." She groaned and sat it aside. "Can i atleast drink my milkshake?" He nodded approvingly. "Sure." She sipped her milkshake. "Thanks." She sat back and started to fall asleep.

[thedaring1]

I really like it so far, finaly a story that isnt rushed. Im excited and nervous to see how this turns out.

[ofthenorth]

I like it...interested to see where it goes. Very good writing, and wondering where you're going with a little girl and a twenty year old man with the nature of the stories on this site. I know it's not in the R section but still a curious question.

Only one thing to point out, you do something I do myself a lot, I'm guessing you type fast and in doing so you mess up simple short words cause your finger's muscle memory outruns your brain. You misspell "the" a lot as "teh" I do the same thing and have to go back and correct it however mine is usually "hte" :P just thought I'd point that out for you. I'm just a grammar and spelling nazi a lot of times. Haha.

Overall great story...a nice piece of "fantasy fiction" :P Ignore all those negative comments and keep up the good work. It may not be exactly in line with reality but what story is? I've read stories on here where people do things that would for sure get them arrested, in the hospital, or dead even and some even claim their "true" so ignore anything about this not being "believable" and the fact that it's not a "dare" story doesn't mean anything it's just getting started and there's lots of stories on here that aren't actually dares so forget about that, and you probably have a wealth of ideas floating around that can make it into that genre that you just haven't brought into the story yet. It's still starting.

It's a great story and you're a good writer. Keep it up.

[sydneyyy93]

Originally Posted by sydneyyy93

Warning: This story is going to be in detail 100% it will talk about what happens in their relationship and what happens to girls at her age. And girls you know what im talking about.

Characters:
Crystal- (An 11 year old orphan. She is very shy, Jasons adopted daughter.)
Jason- (A 20 year old man. He is Crystals adopted father.)

Chapter 1

Jason was in his almost adopted daughters bedroom. He was fixing it up for her. He made her bed and put all the furniture in her room. He was just finishing up and was getting ready to go get her. He stepped out of the house, locking the door. He walked to his car and got in. He drove up to the adoption Agency. He looked over at Crystal and waved to her. She was excited to see him and ran to him and hugged him. He has been coming in and seeing her for her anger problems and more. She somehow convinced him to adopt her. She looked up at ahim she was about 5'0. He knelt down and hugged her. "Ill be done in about an hour ok Sweetie." She smiled at him a tear coming down her cheek. "Ok Jason." He wiped her tear away and kissed her on her forehead. "Ill be back soon ok dear you just wait im not leaving here without you!" She smiled up at him and ran off to play with her friends. He walked into the office.

Originally Posted by sydneyyy93

Chapter 2

After being in the office for about 30 minutes. He had white papers in his hand and motioned for Crystal to come to him. He knelt down as Crystal came running to him her long blonde hair flowing behind her she had a huge smile on her face. He picked her up hugging her. Crystal wrapped her legs around him tightly aswell as her arms around his neck. "So Jason???" She smiled at him. "Your mine..." He smiled back at her and kissed her on her forehead. He carried her out to the car and put her in the passanger side. He went around and got into the drivers side and drove off to the house. About 20 minutes later they arrived at the house. Crystal got out of the car amazed. "Do you like it dear?" He said smiling as he looked around. "I love it daddy." She blushed as she said 'daddy'. She went up to the door and pushed the door open. She was amazed at what she seen.

Originally Posted by sydneyyy93

Chapter 3

To Crystals surprise the house was as beautiful on the inside as it was on the outside. The walls were white with a forest light green border. She couldnt believe her eyes. She walked into the kitchen it was so beautiful and white and CLEAN!!!. She then walked back into the livingroom and stood him standing there. "Your house is so beautiful." He smiled at her and took her hand. "You have yet to see your bedroom." He walked her up to her room and went to the right. "My room is down the left ok so if you need anything during the nite you can come and ask me." She smiled up at him as they stood infront of her door. Her name was already carved into the door. She opened the door. Her walls where painted a lime green, the borders where a dark purple. Her two favorite colors. She turned to face her bed, it was huge with white sheets she looked above her bed to see her name. She climbed on her bed and wrapped her arms tightly around his neck. "Thank you so much!" She laid her head on his shoulder almost crying. "Thats not all Sweetie." He held her as he walked over to her closet and stood infront of it. "Remember when i measured you to see what size clothes youd wear?" She nodded looking at him. He pushed her closet door open it was completely full of clothes. "Oh my goodness...." She put her hands over her mouth. "You didnt have to....." She started to cry and burried her face into him. He laid her down on her bed and sat next to her. "This is your house now im your daddy.." She smiled at him as he kissed her forehead. "I love you daddy." She said with a smile. "I love you 2 sweetheart."

Originally Posted by sydneyyy93

Chapter 4

The next morning Crystal woke up very early. Her mouth was so dry, she went down stairs and to the fridge. She took a yoohoo that her new daddy had bought for her and went up to her room drinking it. She laid back in bed after putting the yoohoo box on her nitestand. She smiled. "I love it here." She fell back to sleep. The next thing she knew her daddy was sitting next to her on the bed shaking her to wake her up. "Sweetie wake up." He smiled at her as she refused. "I dont wanna daddy." She turned over pulling the covers over her head. He stood up and crossed his arms smirking at her. "Ok... I guess we dont have to go shopping." Her eyes opened as she jumped out of bed grabbing her robe she ran into the bathroom turning on the water. She ran back and hugged him. "Good morning daddy." She giggled and walked back into the bathroom. She undressed, stepping into teh shower. She began to wash herself. She stepped out about a few minutes later drying herself off. She put her robe on and brushed her teeth, and blow dry her hair. She walked into her room grabbing a blue jean ruffle skirt, pants and bra, and a white,pink, and blue zebra patterned tanktop that faded. She grabbed some sandals from teh many her daddy bought her. She walked down stairs and sat on teh couch. "Do i look good daddy?" She asked as she put her sandals on. "You already bought me many things i dont think i need anymore." He grabbed his keys waiting at the door. "C'mon sweetie..." She grabbed her bag and jacket and headed out to the car. She sat in teh passangers side and waited. A few minutes he came and got in the car and drove to the mall. As she walked into the mall holding his hand her mouth dropped.

Originally Posted by sydneyyy93

Chapter 5

Crystal was so surprised at how big the mall was. She hadnt been in a mall every. Jason laughed a bit picking her up. "Where do you want to go first?" He kissed her cheek. "I dont know daddy....." She wrapped her arms around his neck. "I dont know any places in here....." He walked over to a map of the mall. "Well theres Aeropostale, American Eagle, Hot Topic, Rue 21...." She thought for a minute and finally spoke. "All..." She giggled as he began to walk into aeropostale. She jumped down and ran throughout the store grabbing clothes. "Daddy!!!" She screamed. Jason walked over to teh dressing room . "Yes dear?" She came out of the dressing room. "How does it look?" She was wearing a tanktop and pants. "Its cute on you." She smiled and walked back in. She came out with all teh clothes about three shirts and three pants. She handed them to him. "Thanks daddy." She kissed his cheek. She waited by the door for him. He came with the bag a few minutes later. "Where to next?" He asked looking around. "ummmm whats that place??" She said pointing to 'Lilly Pad'. "Ummm i don't know i think it sells bags..." She ran over to it. and looked around. "Daddy can i get one??" She said looking up at him with puppy eyes. "Just one." She ran over and got a pink and brown bag. She went to the counter and paid for it. "Thanks daddy." She put it in teh other bag and held his hand as they walked out of the store. "Thank you very much i like all the things I got." She got into teh car and sat in the back seat with teh bag. He got in teh drivers side and began to drive home. "Daddy can we get something to eat?? im hungry." She looked into the mirror at him. "I love you..." She smiled at him. "Alright." He pulled into McDonalds. "What do you want?" She looked at the menu. "A milkshake and some chicken nuggets." She sat in teh back playing with her doll. He handed her, her food. "There you go sweetie." She smiled as she started to snack on her fries. "No eating in teh car sweetie..." She groaned and sat it aside. "Can i atleast drink my milkshake?" He nodded approvingly. "Sure." She sipped her milkshake. "Thanks." She sat back and started to fall asleep.

Chapter 6

He smiled looking into the rear mirror at her. She looked so adorable as she slept, So peaceful and cute. He shook his head, 'what am i thinking shes 11 and my daughter...' He kept his eyes on the road glancing at her from the mirror occasionaly. He pulled into the driveway and cut the car off still looking at her usually she woke up when the car stopped. He got out and opened her door picked her up. She wrapped her legs around his waist and her arms around his neck resting her head on his shoulder. He smiled at her rubbing her back ignoring teh clothes she had left. He took her inside, walking up the steps he walked to her room, He laid her down on the bed and took her shirt off leaving her in her tanktop. He took her skirt off and got her shorts putting them on her he laid her down the rest of the way and covered her up. He sat next to her as she slept rubbing her hair. She smiled as if dreaming... He got up leaving the room he went down stairs cleaning up the kitchen. His girlfriend Lillian came up behind him and hugged him. "Hey Jason.... where is she?" She said curious. "Shes upstairs sleeping she fell asleep in the car." He turned around facing her, he hugged her and kissed her. "Oh..." Suddenly Crystal screamed for him. "DADDY!!!" Jason and Lillian both ran up the stairs and into her room. "What is it sweetie?" Jason said as he sat down. "I'm bleeding daddy..."Jason looked at Lillian....

[Memories for Life]

Originally Posted by sydneyyy93

...He has been coming in and seeing her for her anger problems and more. She somehow convinced him to adopt her. ...

I know you stated that this will be "fiction" but could you still make it a logical story with imaginary characters. There isn't a orphanage in our known universe which would allow a single 20 year old male to adopt a 11 year old female child!

Beside that fact, in the (3) chapters, there isn't any indication there is anything remotely related to "dares" which these forums are based upon!

Structured as is, your story excels above others posted here because it uses proper grammar and punctuation! It's comfortable to read and, even in its short structure, shows you have a talent in prose.