[Fiction] A note?

[CuddleRainbowz]

Hello,
This is my first story and I apologize if its shit. If I have gone wrong tell me. I am not looking for sympathy votes. Each part of the story will be updated every week on Tuesday. With hardly any exceptions. I didn't really know if this should go in the 18+ stories but I put it in just to be on the safe side. Anyway, stop me blabbering on and lets get to the story. Well the character profiles then the story. Shut up!! Sorry not you, me. I get annoying. Ignore me.

Brief Character Profiles: Well the VERY main ones. There is a few more.

Name: Haylee Dancer
Age: 18
Looks: Long dark hair: Straight. Large blue eyes with dark brown eyelashes: Long. Slim. 32 B breasts. Small bottom. Caucasian skin with a couple of freckles and two spots on the left hand side of her forehead. Size 6 (Uk) Feet. Size 8 clothing (Uk)
Relationship? Yes, Alex is her boyfriend.

Name: Jade Korelli
Age: 18
Looks: Golden blonde hair: Often tied in pigtails. Innocent looking green eyes with short blonde lashes. Very thin almost stick thin. Once had anorexia. Completely flawless Caucasian skin. Except for somewhere.....(Dun dun dun!) Size 7 (Uk) Feet. Size 6 clothing (Uk) Size 32 A Breasts.
Relationship? No, But for a reason.

Name: Alex Dann
Age: 20
Looks: Very tall. Over 6 ' 4. Dark spiked hair. Quite scary face for someone who does not know him. But has a loving side too. Muscled but not too much. Broad body. Flawless Tanned skin. Dark brown eyes. Minuet eyelashes. Barely visible.
Relationship? Yes, with Haylee but is having and affair with Esther. But has a crush for Jade as well.

Name: Solomon Autumn
Age: 22
Looks: Dark skinned. Black hair nearly all shaven. Very muscular. Tall. Brown nearly black eyes. Very dominant looking. A bit of facial hair around his chin. Has a runners body. Broad. Short dark eyelashes. Tattoo on his hand of a black love heart.
Relationship? No, But has a crush on both Haylee and Esther

Name: Esther Pwell
Age: 19
Looks: Caucasian skin with lots of ginger freckles. Long ginger/red hair always styled perfectly straight. Big green eyes with long black lashes. Slim. Nearly as slim as Jade. Size 7 (Uk) Feet. Size 6 – 8 Clothes (Uk) Size 36 B Breasts. Quite tall. About 5 ' 10.
Relationship? Yes, with Alex.


Here's the story!


Chapter 1. Haylee's point of view.
It was a Saturday evening, I was laying on my bed tired and upset. I sighed doubtfully, and observed my pale pink room looking for any traces of him. Anything that reminded me of him. Anything! Slowly I scanned the room, next to my bed hung thousands of paintings and drawings. Little anime love pictures telling a sad tale. A poster of 'Hollywood Undead' lay hiding in the background. It looked shy somehow. As I looked closer, I saw some small red marks in the middle of the photo. A shiver twirled down my spine. Cautiously, I stepped of my bed and reached towards the poster. Suddenly, a finger of anger curled around my heart and crushed it. I ripped the poster off . Shouting and screaming his name over and over again. But the marks turned into words. They read 'Hello Haylee, I know how sad you have been recently. You know, about the fights with Alex' I gasped! 'Well sorry to make it worse. I have some nude pictures of you. The ones you took using that disposable phone. When you threw it in the bin, did you see the hand reach out for it? I didn't think so. Well I have them now. All of them! I have your email. I have your number. You will do everything I say. And beware of notes lying around they could be from me.'

All the thoughts of Alex ran out of my head. I just stood there in shock. Forgetting the whole world around me. Everything turned white, pallid white. I tried to think who it could be. Only three names popped into my head
1. Esther: She never really liked me. Always hanging round with my boyfriend. She pulled my hair once or twice. And always was jealous of how I looked.
2. Jade: My best-friend. But like with Esther she was always jealous of me. She told me that she liked controlling people. And sometimes being controlled. She also hung round with my boyfriend a lot.
3. Solomon: He fancied me when I was little. But he always seemed dominant. Always bossing everyone around. Trying to show he was the best. I guess he touched me a few times. But I'm sure he never wanted to control me.


“Haylee!” A stern voice called. “What are you doing up there?” It was my mum. My darling mother. My single mother. The one that raised me since I was born without no help. That mother. “I'm just......I'm just.” I stammered. “Putting some more posters up that's it!”
I heard a little mumble and a groan then creaky footsteps and then television. A usual pattern. With no haste, I logged onto MSN and saw that Alex was on. “Not him! Please not him!” I thought as a message from him popped up. I figured I had to talk to him. I wanted to work this out. I still loved him. He was my boyfriend after all. The conversation went like this:
Alex: Hello Baby.
Me: What do you want? You already broke my heart.
Alex: Listen darling I'm sorry. You know I've been having some rough patches.
Me: You? Think about me.
Alex: I love you?!
Me: You know I can't help but love you when you say that.
Alex: I know. Please?
Me: Please....?
Alex: Please Louise
Me: I'm not in the mood for jokes. I meant what do you mean.
Alex: I mean I am sorry for everything. Will you get back with me?
Me: I am with you Babe.
Alex: Promise?
Me: Yes!
Alex: Well then, meet me tomorrow at Starbucks in town.
Me: I can't. Going shopping with my cousins.
Alex: You would if you really loved me.
Me: Fine! You win. Meet you there.
Alex: Bye baby (Logs off)
Me: See you (Logs off)

I sat up from my bed, wondering what would happen tomorrow. Who sent me the note? What would happen to me? To my life?



Thanks for reading. Please feel free to comment. Thanks xx
And sorry that it's quite short. All I could think of.

[Rachie]

So we await next tuesday to find out whats next

Like the way you laid it out - with character info at top - all the best with story

Love Rachie
x x x x

[CuddleRainbowz]

Thanks Rachie xx

I still haven't decided what will happen next! I've never been one for planning......

[CuddleRainbowz]

Okay...well here’s the next part. A bit longer than before as the first bit was very short. It is starting as the next day.

Chapter 2. Written in third person.
“Bring bring, bring bring!” Screamed Haylee's alarm clock as it wobbled on her bedside table. A pale hand reached out and slowly pressed down on its smooth surface. With tired eyes, Haylee rolled over therefore lying on her side. She could only see one number, even that was blurry and fuzzy. But the number 10 was enough for her to realize she was late. Very late. Suddenly, her mind remembered all of yesterday. Memories came flooding back, especially the coffee shop meeting and the note. She knew Alex well enough to know that meeting him would mean she would have to be there at 10am. No earlier or later. “Oh shit!” Haylee whispered. “I am so late. So, so late. He's going to freak!” Her eyes started to close but she forced them open. Her memory started to fade but she forced it back. Her legs started to feel like jelly but she forced to keep them strong. Sleeping was the very last thing she wanted to do.

Slowly, she took all the strength she could to stand up. Both physically and mentally. “Ahhh,” she yawned as she stretched her jelly arms. Soon, she could smell bacon and eggs, toast and jam all for her. But she knew she had no time bacon, eggs, toast and jam. She didn't want to be any later than she knew she would be. So, as fast as she could, she got dressed. Nothing special was worn. She even forgot her bra. It was the last thing on her mind, well just before sleeping. Just a skirt, tights, tee shirt and hoodie was all she felt she needed. A quick splash of make up and a couple squirts of body spray and she was ready to go. Nearly.

Quickly, she skipped down the creaking stairs missing two with each dainty step. On the bottom of the sea green stairs, she found a small comb that she scraped through her brunette hair getting just about all of the tangles out. Haylee looked a terrible mess but she knew, well thought that Alex wouldn't mind. After all, to her she was his only girlfriend. Suddenly, she rushed through the kitchen grabbing her purse and in a flash she was out the door. A few murmurs were said like “Where are you going?” and “Get back here young lady!” from her mum but Haylee ignored them. Like they never were said.

By 10.25am she was at the local Starbucks. Since it was a sunny day, it was full to the brim. There was even a queue to get inside. Luckily, she used her charm to get past the worker and dodged the queue. After 5 minutes of searching the shop, she found Alex and strangely Esther as well. Both of them kissing passionately. Haylee's eyes widened, her lips crumpled and her face went blood red. In a fantasy story her ears would be puffing thousands of puffs of smoke. Red hot smoke. “Excuse me.” she said angrily to both Esther and Alex. “What the fucking hell do you think you too are doing!?” Suddenly, the two faces turned towards her. The girl surprised and the man grinning. “Oh, Well hello baby.” Alex said charmingly.
“What are you doing with Esther?!” Haylee screamed.
“Hush baby. She's my girlfriend too.” Alex said, like it was a perfectly normal thing.
“You can only have one girlfriend!”
“Why?”
“Because......Just because its normal!”
“Why do I have to be normal?”
“I'm breaking up with you then!”
“ Hey.....why?”
“Don't you realize?” Haylee screamed. Now more angry than she had ever been before. Alex just looked up at her and invited her too sit down. Much to her distress, she did but on the other side of Alex and Esther. Esther still with her mouth wide open. “Listen, my two gorgeous girls.” He said, still as cool as anything. “I didn't think you would mind too much. Anyway lesbians are hot.”
“You've been watching way too many porn videos.” Esther said.
“I agree, real life is not like that.” Haylee said. Starting to calm down.
Slowly, Esther dipped underneath the table and went to sit over the other side next to Haylee. Although Haylee was okay with it, she still felt uncomfortable sitting next to the girl her boyfriend had just French kissed. So she shuffled along a bit and put on a fake smile. A very fake smile.
“I thought you would say that.” He told them. “So I have someone here that will persuade you.” Alex made an unknown hand gesture then two recognisable people walked by and sat down next to Alex. Jade and Solomon.

After about 10 minutes of debating, Haylee noticed that there were two strings coming out from underneath Jades top. As she followed the line of dirty grey string it lead to Sol's brown manly hands. Suddenly, Haylee worked out that whenever Jade talked she screeched a bit from Solomon pulling on the string. She guessed it was attached to her nipples using a clamp or something. Just because she knew that Jade was into that kind of bondage thing as she had often talked about. Haylee knew almost everything about Jade since they were best friends. For a minute or two, Haylee stopped arguing, she almost forgot anyone was there she just thought. Then smirked. Then smiled. She had a little idea.

“Er.....Jade?” Haylee said, distracting everyone from the conversation. “Will you come into the toilets with me?”
Jade looked up at Solomon as if to say 'Please can I?' Sol let go of the string and pushed it inside her vagina causing her to shriek silently. “Of course Haylee. We will be back in a minute guys!” Jade answered like nothing was happening to her. Speedily, Haylee grabbed Jades wrist and rushed her to the disabled toilets. Just so nobody would hear them. When they got inside, Haylee shouted at her “What the hell is going on with you and Sol? I thought you tell me everything!?”
“Oh come on Haylee give me a bit of privacy. And nothing is going on between us!”
“Oh yes there is!” Haylee shrieked.
“There is not!”
“Well what was he doing with these two strings?” Haylee said pulling up the strings up.
“Listen.” Said Jade looking quite ashamed. “We had a little agreement. I am under his control for 5 more days. I'm even living with him too.”
“What was this little agreement?” Said Haylee shaking her head.
“He found some pictures of the body part.”
“What body part?” Haylee asked. Starting to lose her temper again.
“The one I don't like anyone to see.”
“Oh. Why did you take pictures of it?”
“They were for my doctor. See if he knew anything about it.” Jade said. Feeling very ashamed. Haylee put her arm around her friend and squeezed her tight. “I'm always here for you buddy. Anyway, I thought you liked this BDSM stuff!?” She reassured her.
“I do! But I like being the dominant one not the submissive one. But hey never mind. It will be over soon and I can get my payback.” Jade answered. Slowly, Haylee smiled and so did Jade. They knew that nothing could tear them apart.
10 minutes after they had left the table, Haylee opened up the bathroom door to discover 3 ears pressed against the door. Alex, Esther and Solomon had been listening into the whole conversation.

Suddenly, Haylee felt a sharp tug to her arm. She pulled away but the force of two strong males was overpowering. “Come with me!” Alex boomed whilst Solomon pulled Jade. When they got out of the toilets Solomon told them to act normal and be quiet. Terrified, Jade and Haylee agreed and walked out of Starbucks like nothing was happening. A few tears trickled down Haylee's face, as she and Jade got violently pushed into a black car with their hands tied behind their backs. When they got in the car, Jade and Haylee huddled together fearing the worst. As they started moving, Esther came to the back of the car where Jade and Haylee lay and pulled out 2 red ball gags. She whispered “Sorry,” and shoved them into their mouths. She looked like she enjoyed it. After that, she pulled down both of their skirts and threw them out of the car window. Jade and Haylee could only watch hopelessly out of the window to see them get shredded into pieces by passing cars. Throughout the journey, Jade and Haylee got called horrible names. Degrading word were written all down their legs and they were made to give each other wedgies. Before they got to the 'place' they were meant to go, thousands of tears had already fallen down their face. But no one bothered to wipe them up. 5 minutes before they got there, Haylee was made to sit on Jades lap with her plump red lips on Jades neck. They both felt very uncomfortable like this but got used to it.

Finally, they arrived at the building. It was an old abandoned mansion. It looked rusted and smelled terrible. But Haylee somehow knew that Solomon and Alex had been here before. They had planned everything that had happened. And had planned everything that was going to happen.


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Hey! Thanks for reading this. Please comment, pm me or thank me. Hope you like!
Well, I guess I'm not doing the Tuesday thing anymore. Ignore that bit!

[CuddleRainbowz]

Anyone going to read it?

[storm-shadow]

yes i read it and i cant wait till next tuesday. this and this alone will give me motavation for school.

[AlmightyElemental]

Wow...this story is...wow. I'm VERY intrigued so far. I can't wait to figure out who the true mastermind is behind all of this. Cannot WAIT for the next part.

[lordbob]

ya this story is very good and it has BDSM in it ina sutle way.

[bottomb]

love the story, cant wait to find out what happens next!