01-26-2009, 04:52 AM | #106 |
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It was fine until it got up to the stage where they fucked... That just happened way too quickly. Previously, you've given alot more detail, are you rushing these chapters for some reason?
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01-26-2009, 08:28 AM | #107 |
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It seemed a bit more....rough? than the other incidents. More like it was just a little part of the story, a treat to keep us going rather than an actual forward movement of the plot. I enjoyed it in a different way than some of the longer chapters that you've written.
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Yeah. I'm going to try to be more diligent and quick in posting in the future (not the next one, but you know what I mean.)
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01-27-2009, 03:17 PM | #109 |
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Part 19: Ooh, baby...
Pam and Daniel drove in his car. Pam was used to it by now; a green car. Kind of small. She was used to it's smell, and she always associated that smell with fear.
Pam was used to keeping quiet in the car. She knew she'd be punished if she talked. She was used to a lot of things now. But, truth be told, she wasn't and never would be used to humiliation. Or degrading things, for that matter. And pain. She wasn't used to anything. It was rides in this car that Pam used the silence as an excuse to thik about these kinds of things. She realized that day that though she wasn't used to it, that she kind of liked pain, humiliation, and degradingness. But not from Daniel. Daniel, to Pam, was still a cruel, evil person. One who went around blackmailing, kidnapping, and torturing young, sweet girls. The car pulled to a stop. A mall? Pam thought, Daniel's already taken me here. What is going on? They walked briskly into the mall, and into the large entryway. Pam was thankful that Daniel had given her clothes to wear. Pam felt strange, thinking of clothing as a priveledge. They went up the escalator, and stepped off. They entered a large store. Pam had only been in here once before, to help her mom pick out a gift for a baby shower. What are we doing in here? A woman in a friendly-looking red shirt and jeans stepped over to them and said, "Good morning, how can I help you?" "Good morning." Answered Daniel. "Hi." Said Pam. "Now," Daniel said, "We are interested in buying some things." "I see," the woman said, "And may I ask who these are for?" "Her baby." Daniel pointed to Pam. WHAT?! Now, now she thinks I'm... She thinks I'm... Pregnant! "Oh." The woman said awkwardly. "Oh, um, I see." Daniel subtly motioned for Pam to make up a little story. "Um," Pam said, "Yes. I'm three months pregnant now." She felt as if a load of bricks had fallen on her. The woman thought that she was having sex. At eighteen! She knew this wasn't too uncommon, but it wasn't really tlked about. Then it hit her. She was having sex. Holy crap! (Something just came up, I'll write more later. Sorry!)
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01-27-2009, 03:40 PM | #110 |
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Nooooo! Pregnancy! Nooooo! Sorry, I just don't like that part. The writing is good, but the task is....gah!
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01-27-2009, 03:45 PM | #111 |
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wow. please update soon. and i wonder how she will keep this from her parents.
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01-27-2009, 06:00 PM | #112 |
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Hm, decent. Interesting in why daniel is doing this
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01-27-2009, 06:26 PM | #113 |
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I'm just wondering... why don't you like this part? You think it's a contoversial sibject? Please, how can I fix this?!
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01-27-2009, 06:40 PM | #114 |
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No, it's just....pregnancy! You don't need to fix it and I haven't seen many tasks like this before so it's creative. But of all things! Pregnancy! I'm sorry, I'm just ranting for no reason. Something about it just irks the crap out of me.
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01-27-2009, 08:44 PM | #116 |
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WHAT!? omg, I can't wait for the next part. Is she really pregnant or is he just trying to humiliate her? It seems like just embracing her like this is pretty light compared to the stuff daniel would usually do. But he couldn't know for sure if she were pregnant. Just because they had unprotected sex doesn't mean shes definitely up the duff.
Oh, and by the way, I noticed the lack of trivia:P
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I don't know. In retrospect this was a bad idea, but I've already put it in, so I'll just have to continue it soon. So sorry, everyone.
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01-28-2009, 06:36 AM | #119 |
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i thought that was good, it was very creative
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01-28-2009, 07:32 AM | #120 |
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Don't apologize. I think its a good addition. You definitely got a pretty damn big reaction from the readers:P
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