Babysitting Adventures... - Page 2

Lover boi · 08-08-2009, 11:36 PM

AWESOME all i got to say lol

Keynes · 08-08-2009, 11:51 PM

He is right Hon...I'm aching here.....

Keep going the crew..(UK FAN CLUB) want more..............................................

jhacksworth · 08-09-2009, 12:30 AM

I had no idea that you talked like this... And you swear like a sailor! For shame... but a great read. haha

Keynes · 08-09-2009, 02:20 AM

HeyHoney...just gotta tell you..you are now famouse or should I say infamous !

You have entered the vernacular of the racing 'Fluffies' they have created a new term in your honour..or should I say in honour of your story...I will PM you later and let you know!

Officelover · 08-09-2009, 07:09 AM

Awesome...

Please. Write more. Immediately.

interesting · 08-09-2009, 10:43 AM

Insert additional congratulatory comment here.

It's nice. Not enough spacing between paragraphs to my taste, presentation-wise.

Also, not enough character development. I think the story skips ahead too fast, but apparently other like that, so good for them. I prefer something more elaborate, with more emotion and drive than just narrative development.

Keep it up. Practice makes better.

sexy_kitty · 08-11-2009, 10:23 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by interesting

Insert additional congratulatory comment here.

It's nice. Not enough spacing between paragraphs to my taste, presentation-wise.

Also, not enough character development. I think the story skips ahead too fast, but apparently other like that, so good for them. I prefer something more elaborate, with more emotion and drive than just narrative development.

Keep it up. Practice makes better.

Thanks for the criticism ^_^ I appreciate it. Yeah I noticed the spacing, I type it on my phone so it's not the best sorry. And about the development, I'm working on it lol chill. (sarcasm) Lol.. But it's getting there. I admit it seems like a quick start but what's gonna happen won't be.

thanks again.

Oh and I won't be putting up another chapter for a few days. I wouldve today but I'm swamped. I'm working on it though!

wicked · 08-11-2009, 11:26 AM

lol, people have been making babysitting stories after I made the first one. Good story. but it started out too fast.

molten man · 08-11-2009, 02:35 PM

way too good. Keep it going!!

SuperFluffy · 08-12-2009, 11:14 AM

Hey love the story.

Please more NOW!

TorD_boy · 08-12-2009, 12:12 PM

Ye i must read more this is soooooo good

Mikeyboi101 · 08-12-2009, 01:16 PM

AMAZING! seriously keep this up ^^

HeadHunter_t · 08-15-2009, 08:15 PM

I like it and would like to see how things turn out so please continue

redlynn20 · 08-15-2009, 11:44 PM

the baby sitting ones are my favorite! keep it up!

dragonator · 08-21-2009, 12:49 PM

you got a subscriber

08-08-2009, 11:36 PM	#16
Lover boi Member Join Date: Oct 2007 Posts: 34	AWESOME all i got to say lol __________________ [

08-09-2009, 07:09 AM	#20
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08-09-2009, 10:43 AM	#21
interesting getDare Succubus Join Date: Sep 2008 Location: Somewhere between here and there, in Quebec, Canada... Posts: 1,662 Blog Entries: 27	Insert additional congratulatory comment here. It's nice. Not enough spacing between paragraphs to my taste, presentation-wise. Also, not enough character development. I think the story skips ahead too fast, but apparently other like that, so good for them. I prefer something more elaborate, with more emotion and drive than just narrative development. Keep it up. Practice makes better. __________________ You can visit my erotic stories website at: interestinglifestories.weebly.com This link can get you to all of my stories on this site as well: *Blog for my GD stories*

08-11-2009, 11:26 AM	#23
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08-11-2009, 02:35 PM	#24
molten man Distinguished Member Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Mumbai, India Posts: 946	way too good. Keep it going!! __________________ MMan 26/m/straight Skype: molten_man007 Kik: molten_man

08-08-2009, 11:51 PM	#17
Keynes Member Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: Its all in the name..somewhere in England Posts: 48	He is right Hon...I'm aching here..... Keep going the crew..(UK FAN CLUB) want more..............................................

08-09-2009, 12:30 AM	#18
jhacksworth Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: So Cal Posts: 213	I had no idea that you talked like this... And you swear like a sailor! For shame... but a great read. haha

08-09-2009, 02:20 AM	#19
Keynes Member Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: Its all in the name..somewhere in England Posts: 48	HeyHoney...just gotta tell you..you are now famouse or should I say infamous ! You have entered the vernacular of the racing 'Fluffies' they have created a new term in your honour..or should I say in honour of your story...I will PM you later and let you know!

08-12-2009, 11:14 AM	#25
SuperFluffy Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Great Britain Posts: 107 Blog Entries: 3	Hey love the story. Please more NOW!

08-12-2009, 12:12 PM	#26
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08-12-2009, 01:16 PM	#27
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08-15-2009, 08:15 PM	#28
HeadHunter_t Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2008 Location: south africa Posts: 223	Hey I like it and would like to see how things turn out so please continue __________________ 24 m from south Africa.

08-15-2009, 11:44 PM	#29
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08-21-2009, 12:49 PM	#30
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