John's Slavery

[qwertypete]

Wow! I really like it... can't wait

[ty_la]

Maybe, not the best additon. But certainly one of the best . keep it up.

[Officelover]

Very, very good! One suggestion: Don't mention drugs so much. I find that offenive and distracting.

[Manbearpig]

Originally Posted by Officelover

Very, very good! One suggestion: Don't mention drugs so much. I find that offenive and distracting.

I would happen to agree. However, it is your story and it is very good.

[Coyote]

this a great story. The grammer is nice and it is the perfect length. not too short but not so long that you get sick of reading the post

[sexy682]

this story is very very exelent

[daredaredare]

Originally Posted by Officelover

Very, very good! One suggestion: Don't mention drugs so much. I find that offenive and distracting.

I very rarely mention drugs. Viagara is common in stories like these, and also common for male prostitutes so its inevitable.

Alcohol, is impossible to seperate from teens who party.

As for weed, if that offends you, then you need to research weed and figure out why.

Drugs, in my eyes, is the hard shit like E, heroin, blow, etc. etc. I won't be mentioning any of those.

I would suggest not reading the next installment, because there will be high sex in it.

[ty_la]

Well, certain people find different things offensive. I personally do not mind the weed. But I can see why other's would, If you feel you MUST use it this time, i wouldn't do it again. Everyone reads these storys because they like reading about M/s BSDM, ect. If they wanted to read storys about people getting blazed and fucking, they would join a forum that does such storys, i think it may go against people's personal, and in some cases religious beliefs. My two cents, don't take it as a shun to you, or your story. As it's nto intended that way.

[Coyote]

i do not find this offensive so i hope that the next installment will come out soon

[Smile]

I think that if you find it offencive then just stop reading, if you choose to read it and get offended then thats your fault, not the writers.

And also is it just me or does John get picked on more than Jamie?

[Officelover]

The problem with that is, I mostly love this story!!!

Anyways, yes I do think that John gets picked on much more.

[daredaredare]

Originally Posted by i_am_james

I think that if you find it offencive then just stop reading, if you choose to read it and get offended then thats your fault, not the writers.

And also is it just me or does John get picked on more than Jamie?

haha thats pretty much precisely my feeling. But anti-lighter drugs and censorship are my two biggest pet peeves because of real life circumstances, so that is probably coloring my opinion.

I won't mention it too much in the story, but obviously, they are high right now. its not like I'll just write "they smoked too much, fell asleep, and woke up sober right before their master came home". Just would break my flow. No way to avoid it for the next part.

Yeah, John is the more preferred slave currently. I haven't been giving you too much about the Jamie story though, since it is, after all, called John's slavery. For instance, you do not know much about jamie the night before, you just knew that she did whatever the girls wanted while they waited to fuck John. Thats open to so many things, some even worse than Johns. I might go further into Jamie's story at later times, but as for now, the story is one of the same for a little while.

[Manbearpig]

Originally Posted by daredaredare

haha thats pretty much precisely my feeling. But anti-lighter drugs and censorship are my two biggest pet peeves because of real life circumstances, so that is probably coloring my opinion.

I won't mention it too much in the story, but obviously, they are high right now. its not like I'll just write "they smoked too much, fell asleep, and woke up sober right before their master came home". Just would break my flow. No way to avoid it for the next part.

Thank you. Although sometimes it is a little distracting, its part of the storyline. And getting back to the offending thing, I mean compared to some other things on this site, this doesnt even come close. I look forward to the next part

[glasssbottle174]

Well done. That is all that i can say. Well done it was brilliant!

[Smile]

Originally Posted by daredaredare

Yeah, John is the more preferred slave currently. I haven't been giving you too much about the Jamie story though, since it is, after all, called John's slavery. For instance, you do not know much about jamie the night before, you just knew that she did whatever the girls wanted while they waited to fuck John. Thats open to so many things, some even worse than Johns. I might go further into Jamie's story at later times, but as for now, the story is one of the same for a little while.

You should make a sequal story after this on about what jamie is thinking/doing called jamie's slavery or something, just a suggestion but i think it would be good.
By the way this story is absolutly amazing just so you know