his life after death(fiction)

ramsies11 · 05-24-2008, 04:52 AM

here is my first story so please only constructive critisizam(mispelled)
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as a seriail rapist was lieing on the ground half-dead.He was wondering what the hell was going to happen to him.As he thought over the 7 deadly sins(greed,gluttony,lust,wrath,envy,pride,and sloth)as he thought over them he could only remember 6/7 of them and was not worried about the other(lust). As he thought he could die peace-fully and go to heaven,but God had other plans for him

.then he died and walked tward a bright light. then as he woke up in the clouds he heard a heavenly voice say: bob u have commited too much sin and you will be sent to hell",as God him-self said that a trap-door opened under his feet and he was plumiting to the earth.

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hey guys tell me how im doing ok?

05-24-2008, 04:52 AM	#1
ramsies11 Distinguished Member Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: in the little blue box circleing the earth Posts: 724 Blog Entries: 1	his life after death(fiction) here is my first story so please only constructive critisizam(mispelled) ================================================== === as a seriail rapist was lieing on the ground half-dead.He was wondering what the hell was going to happen to him.As he thought over the 7 deadly sins(greed,gluttony,lust,wrath,envy,pride,and sloth)as he thought over them he could only remember 6/7 of them and was not worried about the other(lust). As he thought he could die peace-fully and go to heaven,but God had other plans for him.then he died and walked tward a bright light. then as he woke up in the clouds he heard a heavenly voice say: bob u have commited too much sin and you will be sent to hell",as God him-self said that a trap-door opened under his feet and he was plumiting to the earth. ================================================== ======== hey guys tell me how im doing ok?