Fiction: Chopper Down

Gamers · 06-08-2010, 08:00 PM

This is my first story so be nice! And yes, this story does have to do with TorD, although it might not be in the beggining. I will try to actually finish this story to as long as it is liked : P
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Crawling from the debree of the once was helicopter, Brandon scanned the surrounding destruction. To his left he say what use to be the cockpit, now a mess of shattered glass, mangled metal, and blood. He could just make out the outline of the slumped figure of the pilot against the smoke. Turning his head right he saw a hand sticking our of the rubble directly in front of him. Cold, unmoving against the night sky. to his right he could see the stewn bodies of his team mates, wether any of them were alive or not was past him. He could see Shawn's mangled body in the midst of a flaming pile, slowly burning away. Finally, he looked down at himself to check for any injuries. As soon as he saw his left leg, his jaw dropped open. Covered in blood with shredded pants, what he saw was horrifying. His leg was spilling blood out over the debree, but worse than that, a large gash cut deep into his leg, cutting the skin as well as the bone. Even the marrow was showing. As he started slipping into unconsiousness, he thought about the events of the night before...
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Sorry it is so short! It is getting late and i cant be up much longer.

rdcottman · 06-08-2010, 10:06 PM

no problem, this is a good story so far. please keep up the good work.

Memories for Life · 06-09-2010, 02:24 AM

Not to be nit-picking, but this preview seems a ghoulish way to lead into a ToRD story! A helicopter crash, with it's mangled burning bodies and various "debris" isn't a good lead into a fun story about truth or dare.

It's a fictional story so could you just start again with just the ToRD narration?

Cuffed · 06-09-2010, 03:43 AM

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Originally Posted by Memories for Life

Not to be nit-picking, but this preview seems a ghoulish way to lead into a ToRD story! A helicopter crash, with it's mangled burning bodies and various "debris" isn't a good lead into a fun story about truth or dare.

It's a fictional story so could you just start again with just the ToRD narration?

Aww, leave him alone. It's about time we have some fresh stories on this site. Give him a chance you never know it might turn out to be one of the best stories on getdare. It's not like his spelling and layout is shocking either
Continue.

Memories for Life · 06-09-2010, 03:59 AM

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Originally Posted by Cuffed

Aww, leave him alone. It's about time we have some fresh stories on this site. Give him a chance you never know it might turn out to be one of the best stories on getdare. It's not like his spelling and layout is shocking either
Continue.

As I watched my best friend screaming in agony as I watched him on fire while still alive, I realized I was smiling as I remembered the events of the night before...

As I looked at my body as I slid feet first into the wood chipper, my mind wandered to the fun time the night before....

As I slowly felt my skin melting from my body while sitting in the maniac's box of battery acid, I was able to see and hear my girlfriend's agony as her limbs were slowly torn from her body, I thought back gleefully to our fun time the night before....

Dicedarefan666 · 06-09-2010, 04:11 AM

He's not saying he's happy about the night before, and honestly, there are tons of cliché stories about happy go lucky TorD games, go read one of them, I want to read something interesting, so I'll watch this thread.

06-08-2010, 08:00 PM	#1
Gamers Member Join Date: Apr 2010 Location: U.S. Posts: 40	Chopper Down This is my first story so be nice! And yes, this story does have to do with TorD, although it might not be in the beggining. I will try to actually finish this story to as long as it is liked : P -------------------------------------------------------------------------- Crawling from the debree of the once was helicopter, Brandon scanned the surrounding destruction. To his left he say what use to be the cockpit, now a mess of shattered glass, mangled metal, and blood. He could just make out the outline of the slumped figure of the pilot against the smoke. Turning his head right he saw a hand sticking our of the rubble directly in front of him. Cold, unmoving against the night sky. to his right he could see the stewn bodies of his team mates, wether any of them were alive or not was past him. He could see Shawn's mangled body in the midst of a flaming pile, slowly burning away. Finally, he looked down at himself to check for any injuries. As soon as he saw his left leg, his jaw dropped open. Covered in blood with shredded pants, what he saw was horrifying. His leg was spilling blood out over the debree, but worse than that, a large gash cut deep into his leg, cutting the skin as well as the bone. Even the marrow was showing. As he started slipping into unconsiousness, he thought about the events of the night before... -------------------------------------------------------------------------- Sorry it is so short! It is getting late and i cant be up much longer.

06-09-2010, 04:11 AM	#6
Dicedarefan666 getDare Sweetheart Join Date: Feb 2009 Posts: 403	He's not saying he's happy about the night before, and honestly, there are tons of cliché stories about happy go lucky TorD games, go read one of them, I want to read something interesting, so I'll watch this thread. __________________ Likes: Light to moderate pain - Giving dares - Asking questions Dislikes: Hard pain - Jacking off - Semi-public - Wedgies Hates: Extreme pain - Urine - Full Public - Involving other people Limits (Will never do these) Permanent damage - Involving Family - Scat - Involving Animals - Crossdressing - Eating Gross stuff

06-08-2010, 10:06 PM	#2
rdcottman Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2010 Location: soon to be San Francisco Posts: 140	no problem, this is a good story so far. please keep up the good work.

06-09-2010, 02:24 AM	#3
Memories for Life getDare Devil Join Date: Mar 2010 Location: Jacksonville, FL Posts: 1,012	Not to be nit-picking, but this preview seems a ghoulish way to lead into a ToRD story! A helicopter crash, with it's mangled burning bodies and various "debris" isn't a good lead into a fun story about truth or dare. It's a fictional story so could you just start again with just the ToRD narration?