Fiction: Holiday at the beach!

IrishAuthor1337 · 08-21-2012, 06:42 AM

Adam

Sex: M
Age: 15
Hair: Brown
Height: 5'5
Body: Average
Eyes: Green

James

Sex: M
Age: 14
Hair: Blond
Height: 5'7
Body: Average
Eyes: Blue

Michael

Sex: M
Age: 15
Hair: Blond
Height: 5'9
Body: Skinny
Eyes: Blue

Chapter 1

Adam`s Pov :

" Come on , just 8 minutes left till we`re out of here", the teacher glared at me.
oops , maybe I said that a bit loud.

Michael turned around from his desk in front of me and whispered, "I can`t wait til the three of us are out of here and off to your holiday house with out our parents"

"Yes, I can feel the cool waves at the beach already"

"Thanks again for letting us come with you!"

"Well, when I heard my parents wern`t coming I didn`t want to have to go alone".

* Bell Ringing*

"Yes" I exclaimed jumping out of my seat and nearly sending James who was sitting beside me flying to the floor.

"Hey, watch out" He murmured

"Sorry, I`m just soooo excited" I said rushing to my locker,"Hurry we only have two hours to catch the train to the town the house is in and I still have to go home and change!"

"And pack your suitcase"Michael reminded me.

"Its your fault I havn`t done that already, you kept skyping me when I was about to start packing"

"Ok , well I need to go home to meet you at the Station later!"

"Yes,see you later" James agreed.

Later at home...

"Alright, Mom I`m leaving now"

"Not so fast,I`ve made you a packed lunch, plus you`ve forgotten your swimming trunks".

"I can just swim in my shorts" I protested.

"You know how I don`t approve of that, its very un-hygienic".

"Well I can`t wear these" I said ,holding up the swim trunks she had laid out for me. They were dark blue with white stripes at the sides, and the type that only went down to your thighs.

"Well you are no arguing and Bill the caretaker will check up on you every once in a while and If he tells me your not wearing them or you are doind anything else bad for that matter you are Coming Straight Home" She said it in a dangerous voice so I decided not to take the argument any farther.

"Alright bye"I shouted before grabbing my lunch and racing out the door grabbing my lunch as I went.

A.N. I know its short

The TorD will begin shortly

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Mr. Fun 21 · 08-21-2012, 01:55 PM

Sounds good. Didnt really notice any mistakes. So good job!

Tylerr · 08-22-2012, 09:44 PM

short swim trunks? start of a success.

Abmp · 08-23-2012, 05:48 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Tylerr

short swim trunks? start of a success.

Haha so true.
Great start, looking forward to see how it progresses

08-21-2012, 06:42 AM	#1
IrishAuthor1337 Baby Member Join Date: Aug 2012 Posts: 1	Holiday at the beach! Adam Sex: M Age: 15 Hair: Brown Height: 5'5 Body: Average Eyes: Green James Sex: M Age: 14 Hair: Blond Height: 5'7 Body: Average Eyes: Blue Michael Sex: M Age: 15 Hair: Blond Height: 5'9 Body: Skinny Eyes: Blue Chapter 1 Adam`s Pov : " Come on , just 8 minutes left till we`re out of here", the teacher glared at me. oops , maybe I said that a bit loud. Michael turned around from his desk in front of me and whispered, "I can`t wait til the three of us are out of here and off to your holiday house with out our parents" "Yes, I can feel the cool waves at the beach already" "Thanks again for letting us come with you!" "Well, when I heard my parents wern`t coming I didn`t want to have to go alone". * Bell Ringing* "Yes" I exclaimed jumping out of my seat and nearly sending James who was sitting beside me flying to the floor. "Hey, watch out" He murmured "Sorry, I`m just soooo excited" I said rushing to my locker,"Hurry we only have two hours to catch the train to the town the house is in and I still have to go home and change!" "And pack your suitcase"Michael reminded me. "Its your fault I havn`t done that already, you kept skyping me when I was about to start packing" "Ok , well I need to go home to meet you at the Station later!" "Yes,see you later" James agreed. Later at home... "Alright, Mom I`m leaving now" "Not so fast,I`ve made you a packed lunch, plus you`ve forgotten your swimming trunks". "I can just swim in my shorts" I protested. "You know how I don`t approve of that, its very un-hygienic". "Well I can`t wear these" I said ,holding up the swim trunks she had laid out for me. They were dark blue with white stripes at the sides, and the type that only went down to your thighs. "Well you are no arguing and Bill the caretaker will check up on you every once in a while and If he tells me your not wearing them or you are doind anything else bad for that matter you are Coming Straight Home" She said it in a dangerous voice so I decided not to take the argument any farther. "Alright bye"I shouted before grabbing my lunch and racing out the door grabbing my lunch as I went. A.N. I know its short The TorD will begin shortly Please leave feedback!

08-21-2012, 01:55 PM	#2
Mr. Fun 21 Member Join Date: Feb 2012 Location: Louisiana Posts: 94	Sounds good. Didnt really notice any mistakes. So good job! __________________ Addicted!!!

08-22-2012, 09:44 PM	#3
Tylerr Senior Member Join Date: Feb 2011 Location: Narnia Posts: 108	short swim trunks? start of a success. __________________ All have been alive, but only few have lived Tyler [: Lets play Truth or Dare! PM me or Email me! Email me @ [email protected]