Just read the Two-Day Boys Sleepover. You write well. The only change I would recommend is inserting a line between paragraphs; it will make it easier to read.

I'm thankful that you didn't make all the characters twelve or thirteen. I stop reading a story when I encounter that. Sex with very young people is a major turn-off for me. I was uncomfortable with the incest, too, but kept reading anyway. As an author, you need to be free to create.

Thanks again.