Well I just read all of this in one go, and I am glad to see that you are including the choice element again, even though I've missed both of the deadlines...No matter, it's not always super important to start out the story all that fast. Details of the camp, details of the campers themselves, details really make visualizing the story a lot easier. I do like where it is going though, as of right now it's not a mass produced master-slave story that we see and I think it's going to continue to branch into other areas that we haven't seen before. Also with the abilities of two apparently very good authors, I look forward to seeing where this collab story will go.
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