[subby999uk]

Thank you to everyone who's taken the time to read my story and leave their reviews, it's nice to see it's still getting some interest after all this time. When I started writing it I never imagined it would be the subject of a book review.
The story was only intended to be a bit of fapping material, rather than a serious piece of literature, I enjoy thinking up erotic scenes and scenarios and writing those so it's really just a series of scenes tied together with a bit of dodgy plot in good old porn tradition, I did try doing a bit more plot and character development in this than I've done in my previous stories though.
I know it stretched believability a lot of the time, but it is an erotic fantasy, and as such the scenarios were quite extreme and far fetched, but in my experience the submissive fantasies that people have tend to be more extreme than anything they would ever contemplate or want to actually happen to them in real life, erotic fantasies don't need to be realistic to be arousing, that's what I find anyway, I try and keep things just the right side of being feasible, however unlikely they may be. I think most people looking for stories on a site like getdare are mainly looking for something that's going to turn them on rather than anything else.

There are some things about the story I wasn't happy with, I think this is inevitable though when writing in this format, posting each chapter as it's written rather than writing the story as a whole and then publishing it, there obviously isn't the option to go back and change anything that no longer fits with how the story is developing. The most obvious example of this is her children, which I initially included as a way of increasing how much jeopardy she was in, but ended up just stopping to plot developing without too many people being hurt.

When I started the story I set out to try and write something that had as broad appeal as possible to the getdare audience so I included many of the common themes that getdare users like, humiliation, clothing control, bladder control, teasing, orgasm denial, chastity, writing lines, many of the things that crop up most often in dare requests. This extends to Kate, when I was setting up the character I imagined her to be a typical getdare user in many ways, she had an obvious kinky submissive side that she was exploring online, but she'd had no experience of kink in real life with anyone else, either due to lack of opportunity or her being too scared to pursue it. I also tried to get across how discontented she was with her current situation, being in a loveless marriage to a man who drank too much. I thought these 2 points would make her willingness to go along what was happening to her more plausible. I don't think I managed to get across how conflicted she was about her situation right from the start, I made it sound like her life was being ruined and there was nothing about her situation that was in any way pleasant, that wasn't my intention. If that was really the case then she could have found a way to put a stop to what was happening as people have commented.
I know it's been suggested that it might have been better if she was young and innocent but that would have gone too far into an extreme non consensual scenario that I didn't want to do. I'm really not into writing about people being forced against their will or real blackmail so I tried to get across how aroused she was at the same time as being scared of what could happen, the fear she had was always tinged with excitement though and this only increased as time went on, that was my intention anyway, I don't think that really worked. Everyone has their own preferences though with regards to the type of characters they enjoy most, personally I like scenarios with mature, powerful and self confident women being brought down and degraded and having their lives transformed, but that's a story for another day.

It sounds like the university environment I set it in isn't accurate, I'm in the UK so I'm not really familiar with the US school system, in the UK you typically go to university from 18 to 21 to study for a degree, maybe it's different over there.
Someone commented that it would have been better if her thoughts were italicized as they usually are in fiction, I agree it would, but copying the text into getdare from Word loses the formatting and I'd have had to go though the whole text re-doing the italics which was too much of a pain.
Anyway, thanks for your comments everyone, hopefully I'll have the chance to start working on a new story soon.