Hell At My Girlfriend's House [FICTION]

[splat]

Ok- This is my first truth or dare story so feedback and tips would really help! Thanks!
It happened last year, when I was 18. I did gymnastics and I was quite slim but strong.
My girlfriend had always been slightly strange, she was pretty and kind, but sometimes she got carried away. I don't know why I kept going out with her, I suppose I would feel guilty if I let her go, and I suppose I loved her.
One Monday, in the October holidays she invited me to come and stay at hers, as her parents were away for three weeks. I agreed and I brought my things over later that day.
I made her pasta after hunting around her kitchen. She ate it eagerly and I watched her, eating mine at the same time. We talked and watched a film after that. She shuffled closer to me and lay her head on my chest. I put my arm around her shoulders, she sighed and then suddenly sat upright.
"What next?" She said. I was slightly confused, then I answered-
"Um, Why dont we get Drake round?"
"Dan?"
"Um, Yea?"
"Thats....A good idea!"
I looked at her blankly as she typed his number into the red phone. Seconds later she informed me he was coming round in half an hour.
[How is it?]

[splat]

[Just want to add then next short bit]
She settled back down beside me, and as I wrapped my arm around her waist she lent over to kiss me. I stroked her hair and we kissed for several minutes. I slipped my hand under her shirt and managed to, with great effort, untie her bra strap, I pulled it off, and she, in the mood, pulled her shirt off, and mine. I started to have an erection as we french kissed. My dick bulged as I pulled her closer, suddenly the doorbell rang. I sat up, as she pulled her bra on and her shirt, just as I pulled my shirt and jumper on. Drake rang it again and I ran to the door as my girlfriend, Flora, struggled to do up her bra in panic. I opened the door and Drake flew in. I stood in his way as he tried to get into the sitting room.
"Flora's just...um...clearing up the popcorn. We spilt it."
"Right...."
"Come on in!" Called Floras shaky voice.
I sighed my relief as Drake raced into the room.

[Kumquat250]

it's good keep it going!!!

hurry up too...not to rush you when's the next part coming out?

[splat]

[Hey, thanks! What just happend?! I wrote a really long entry and it didnt post!!!!] Im devistated! wtf.

[Marc]

there's a 10,000 character limit.... did you exceed it?

[splat]

Hehe. Probally. Thanks.
Its late now so i will write tomoz. thanks.

[splat]

Here it goes (again...)
"Hi!" Flora's shacky voice pipped up.
"Hi."
"Um, Hi?" Flora repeated.
"You said that already."
"Oh. Sorry. How are you?"
"Good Good, Dan?"
"Good. Yea. Good." Dan nodded.
"Nice. What do you want to do?" Flora enquired.
"Well, you see, I was hoping we could play truth or dare?!"
Dan cringed, as he knew Drake knew of thing that happend in Dans past, and the dares he was capable of.
"Yea! Sure!" Flora replied.
"Ok, can we go up to your bedroom, I have a site with lots of truth and dare questions. Its realy good!"
"Sure."
They all poured into Floras blue bedroom. There was a large desk covered in pictures she had drawn, pencils, paints, pencils and rubbers, and a black, shiny, laptop. He bedroom was a single, and had a pink cover with cupcakes on it. She had one poster on it of the Plain White-Ts. One of her favourite bands. Drake sat down at the clutterd desk. He opend the laptop up and opened the net. He typed something in and was soon logging onto something. He scrolled down and it showed a few HUNDRED truth and dares.
"Ok. You can start Flora!" Drake smiled at her.
"Say. Dan, truth or dare?!"
"Hmm...Dare." He knew her dares werent harsh, just sweet.
"Ok. Lets see...Actually. Group dare. Drake? Is that alright?"
"Sure!"
"Ok. What we do is that we blindfold Dan, and we hide, the first person he finds he has to...If its me, frenchie, and Drake, he must kiss you on the cheek."
I rolled my eyes, in a playfull way and tied round her head one of Floras scarfs. The room darkend, I figured that Flora turned the lights off the make it better. I walked round in the dark and walked towards each giggle or chuckle I heard. Eventually I tripped over Flora. Then said. "Found you!" And I took the blindfold off, and Drake flicked the light switch. I kissed Flora as required. Then it was my turn.
[next bit a little later!]

[hotnpimpin]

keep going its good

[molten man]

nice keep it on. Make it nice and interesting!!

[Kitty]

is the story dead?

[molten man]

is the story dead?

why do u say so??

[anayguy]

keep it going i like it

[Kitty]

why do u say so??

cause the last update is 09-15-2007, 01:23 AM

[Marc]

cause the last update is 09-15-2007, 01:23 AM

Then why did you wake it up after three months.

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